- Nov 24, 2018
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Well good game so far, it has a few issues that need sorting though.
The artwork on the MC and the girls is great.
The story arc is unfolding how I assumed it would, which is a good thing, slow is good, the MC has to prove himself to "The Bitches" and the way he goes about it is the right way, slow is good, slowly work through each one and get them all dependent on the MC solely, then in return they will all end up in his bedroom cage eventually as his hareem, along with his Mom, and the 3 girls I`m guessing who live upstairs and many other girls he encounter`s along the way as his confidence grows.
The game has a few minor issues, I encountered the Ren`py error screen twice, then went back, started again, and never encountered it again, so, maybe a full test needs doing for bugs.
The general story is good, but, the story has issue`s in the English speliing, and English Grammer also.
The Dev needs to get a natural English speaker to proof read the entire story and to correct both, all English spelling mistakes and all English grammer mistakes, once they are sorted the story added to the Artwork, could make this a great game in reality.
Ask someone You know who is a natural English speaker for help, or, ask a natural English speaker from this forum for help with an entire proof read for spelling mistakes and for grammer mistakes also.
Good game so far, needs work to become a great game.
The artwork on the MC and the girls is great.
The story arc is unfolding how I assumed it would, which is a good thing, slow is good, the MC has to prove himself to "The Bitches" and the way he goes about it is the right way, slow is good, slowly work through each one and get them all dependent on the MC solely, then in return they will all end up in his bedroom cage eventually as his hareem, along with his Mom, and the 3 girls I`m guessing who live upstairs and many other girls he encounter`s along the way as his confidence grows.
The game has a few minor issues, I encountered the Ren`py error screen twice, then went back, started again, and never encountered it again, so, maybe a full test needs doing for bugs.
The general story is good, but, the story has issue`s in the English speliing, and English Grammer also.
The Dev needs to get a natural English speaker to proof read the entire story and to correct both, all English spelling mistakes and all English grammer mistakes, once they are sorted the story added to the Artwork, could make this a great game in reality.
Ask someone You know who is a natural English speaker for help, or, ask a natural English speaker from this forum for help with an entire proof read for spelling mistakes and for grammer mistakes also.
Good game so far, needs work to become a great game.