VN Ren'Py Because I Love Her [Part 2 NTR Update Zoey] [The Typist]

[MaxRichard]

It does currently feel like the dialogue both in style and volume is weighted towards a pro-open relationship middle-to-low confidence path. But I understand and respect the dev's response, it can be difficult to write in a voice that perhaps comes secondary to the writer.

FWIW from the dev's thoughtful response earlier, I understood (perhaps incorrectly) that the goal of the story is to show the MC becoming a more dominant person if they allow themselves to be one (by departing their comfort zone), so I think that's pretty cool — even if I personally tend to be more dominant from the outset (or I like to think so!).

Not every story needs to be 100% generic. Character development is a worthwhile goal and seldom found in AVNs, so maybe we just weren't ready for it.

Having said that, if this character arc is indeed the goal, maybe a little bit more of foreshadowing in the earlier parts of the story would be helpful, to hint at the possibility of this development. And in which case, I would suggest more "show, don't tell" than thought bubbles by the MC (not saying the latter is prevalent in this particular story, but I do think too many AVNs are guilty of forgetting the golden rule)

 

[NebulousShooter]

But there is still very little content to really give a veredict.

Now, thats a much bigger red flag, don't know about the history of this game, but I cannot ignore the OP release date.

 

[Maviarab]

Now, thats a much bigger red flag, don't know about the history of this game, but I cannot ignore the OP release date.

I think we're now on it's third iteration I've lost count lol. There is also no planned pre-written story (dev has as much as admitted this without actually stating it so succintly recently)....I would hazard a guess that another rewrite...re-start or something else happening is high.

Dev may not like hearing that, but only brought that line of thinking upon himself. We're all thinking it at some level, difficult not too given the devlopment history.

 

[La Dani]

Ok, I have to admit that after I had replayed the "new" game others times, is really arousing. Good, good rework.

 

[Big Rooster]

Ok, I have to admit that after I had replayed the "new" game others times, is really arousing. Good, good rework.

Third times a charm so it seems.
Imagination can get the story so far, but a coherent story structure and resolution are equally important.
Now that The Typist has a viable story in his pocket, I would like to recommend he writes down (or types) an ending. Not to be set in concrete, but only as an outline as to where he's going with the story. The sketchy neighbors and coffee shop duo are ripe with intrigue. They both could turn out to be friends or foes! His lady boss is another interesting character, she could pay him an insane amount of money for a good story, and he could become addicted to the money or the risky sexual nature of the stories he is writing. Zoey and Claire would be more than willing to do what is necessary to make an interesting and very kinky story, in fact they both recklessly embrace the "living on the edge" lifestyle, to their benefit or peril. Zoeys eagerness on giving up her virtue, to an essentially a stranger, bodes well for raising her kink index.

random "what if" thoughts that can be used or not.

 

[La Dani]

Third times a charm so it seems.
Imagination can get his story so far, but a coherent structure and resolution are especially equally important.

Beatiful phrase.

 

[Big Rooster]

Beautiful phrase.

I was channeling my high school English teacher

 

[La Dani]

Ok, I have to admit that after I had replayed the "new" game others times, is really arousing. Good, good rework.

Hi Typist, how many years !
All good, but the part at the glory-hole was dynamite and I miss that!

 

[D3vilMan]

Hi Typist, how many years !
All good, but the part at the glory-hole was dynamite and I miss that!

Yeah..The Glory hole,The bathroom part and the secret meetup in Damian apartment was great in the old version..hoped they would be added in the new version as well,but anyway new version is great..I just hope there will be more ntr,cuck scenes.

 

[Joshy92]

I like that Typist made the steam achievements super easy so far.

 

[Big Rooster]

Yeah..The Glory hole,The bathroom part and the secret meetup in Damian apartment was great in the old version..hoped they would be added in the new version as well,but anyway new version is great..I just hope there will be more ntr,cuck scenes.

maybe she has to get corrupted more on this itineration of this game

 

[Joshy92]

Honestly, I'll be happy as long as I can share the girls without them cheating on me.
I think it'll be fine though I already told Claire as long as I'm there she can go wild.

 

[La Dani]

Honestly, I'll be happy as long as I can share the girls without them cheating on me.
I think it'll be fine though I already told Claire as long as I'm there she can go wild.

You''ll be a GREAT husband, my friend.

 

[drakov]

Anyone know when will be the next Update ?



Thanks

 

[Dankdude]

How come this is the only ren'py game with good looking characters? All other games look like barbie dolls or something alien. This one is great!

 

[Big Rooster]

the sisters at the gym

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[MikeOG]

How come this is the only ren'py game with good looking characters? All other games look like barbie dolls or something alien. This one is great!

i dont think you have played other renpy games

 

[Atlas555]

Can someone tell me what's the differences between Version 1.0 and episode 1 part 1? The last one is a remake?

 

[asahibito]

Can someone tell me what's the differences between Version 1.0 and episode 1 part 1? The last one is a remake?

Correct Ep 1 part 1 is remake.

 

[Samantha_Gaming]

How come this is the only ren'py game with good looking characters? All other games look like barbie dolls or something alien. This one is great!

Have you played Dr.PinkCake's games? But yeah, i have to agree, the dev of this game does make some of the best-looking renders i've ever seen in a game.