I hate when a writer tells but doesnt show. Mc tells that Jane is beatiful twice, but there is not any special render to strengthen that statement and allow us to watch her throught his eyes. So if you think is beautiful, ok, if like me, you think she is an average girl with big tits, you will disagree with the mc and inmersion will be destroyed.
"You notice that Anna breathing became more rapid" With you super hearing? Wih your third eye? She just came up 10 steps of wooden stairs and you didint notice her until she coughed right in your ear. She is wearing heels, by the way. Not questioning the reliability of your senses, actually yes.
