- Jul 7, 2017
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I’m quietly optimistic that the structure the choice at the end of Ep8 brings will help DPC in the future. I’m rapidly coming to believe that the reason some of these plot elements were shit is because they were added in to stall the LI’s. All the shittiest parts were elements that stopped LI’s in their tracks.I think that the judgment on the run of Maya and Josy I postpone to another time, that the atmosphere is already very hot today....
let's talk about Jill's run.
it would be a very good run, if you can forget about the blackmail... i can't do it so much... a marginal note, while it seemed to me that many characters are much better "graphically" (Riona and Bella who solved the problem of the flying eyelashes at least), Jill had very few good renders, sometimes she looks fat, sometimes old, leaving aside the question of the smile...
in general this chapter seemed to me very cerebral, DPC takes the opportunity to explain and rectify some impressions that one could be made in the course of the game.
from this point of view we suddenly discover that Jill has friends, many friends, and even good people, who like her are part of the 1% that has few concerns. and it's great, better a correction than to carry on a character excessively introverted. but this of course strikes even more with the context of blackmail, a person with a solid network of friends how does it fall into a trap like this? could not make a phone call to Bianca? a friend lawyer does not have it? well forget it.... (who knows if the story of what happened near the barn will have any importance...)
the recital, which was a moment we were all waiting for, is perfect in its classicism, no effort to find an original idea, but it works. DPC doesn't give up basing her narrative on guilt, so either we help Jill or she fails miserably...a true modern woman....
with Jill the path of declaring ourselves seriously to her comes very naturally, more so than with any other LI
as much as I loved that the blackmailing episode was closed, I found Jill's outburst with Tybalt excessive, and the idea that since the three dates have passed MC is safe, is really naive
after reading the negative shazba 's scene, when I got to the confrontation with Jill, a bit of fear came over me, but I found it to be a believable dialogue in the end, Jill is understandably exhausted, and for that she blames MC (who is guilty of the situation Jill found herself in, but not of the fact that she believes in unicorns and Tybalt) and at that point she wonders if it's actually worth it
it will be up to MC to prove it to her.
then comes the longed-for first time, which, apart from the usual naivety of hyper reserved people having sex without problems in front of a window overlooking a garden frequented by a gang of idiots, seemed to me a very good scene, very warm and gentle
rightly at this point Jill's story was virtually closed, she would have had nothing else to tell so DPC anticipates the family plot, I have a bad feeling (not for the drama, but for the accumulation of coincidences) but let's hope well
Theres a relatively flowing story to each LI but they move at different paces so DPC has to put in afterthought storylines to keep everyone on level pegging as other elements are introduced.
Jill was stopped dead for a few episodes by the blackmail. Maya/Josy are in an indefinite holding pattern until her tuition is sorted. Sage was kept in place by Chad and the cheating. Bella was primed for this date a few episodes ago and just sorta existed until the trigger was pulled and everything with her moved more in half an episode than it has in the last 4.
Almost all these stalls were unceremoniously removed in Ep8. He clearly didn’t give a shit about Chad, the blackmail or Sage’s reluctance to date.
It doesn’t make the writing any better but it can also be salvaged. These shitty plot lines have hopefully served their purpose. With any luck he doesn’t repeat this bullshit and just conjure up new roadblocks outta Zoey and repeat himself. Maybe now we can have structured plot lines with conviction that doesn’t have to stop every other episode to let everything catch up.
