For those keeping track, the dev does not need my help with the English for part 2, as he has found someone to proofread and edit. Working on part 2 is the dev's priority, although I did give him my edited version of the Demo's English script. He may use my edit of the Demo, and he may not.
In any case, I am happy to stand aside and enjoy the game, and I am glad the dev found someone to help with part 2. I do not know if that person is editing part 1.
I could attach my edit for the Demo here, but I would rather wait and find out what the dev is doing. Besides, my edit is unofficial.