Ren'Py Completed Betrayed [v1.03 Steam] [Joraell]

[Joraell]

Probably the best animations around, nice renders, nice girls, and the story's premise is cool.

GOOD

However, have to suggest, keep Bethanny's tits big, she looks better

Yes, to Bethany they suits pretty well .


To all:
Thanks To all of you guys for nice words about my game. But I have one plea on you. If you anybody have any possible way how to help me with better propagation for this game I will be really happy.

Thinking about supporting me is great too.

MC fucking She Devil ? This definitelly happen. But it depends on how you will play .-) during the whole game.

 

[Joraell]

The basic premise and the story are pretty shallow and really nice renders cannot help with that.
Definitely not for me but serial fappers will only look at the pretty ladies so it will work for them.

I think you are wrong with the story. But that you cannot see from 0.1 version

 

[kays]

i really do like it and the renders are of this world just amazing

Spoiler: I Mean look at this

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and the animated scenes are crazy good made

 

[Joraell]

i really do like it and the renders are of this world just amazing

Spoiler: I Mean look at this

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You like that piercing in tongue right ?

BTW. That image is just a part of the animation. Not meaned like a standalone render

 

[kays]

You like that piercing in tongue right ?

BTW. That image is just a part of the animation. Not meaned like a standalone render

yep but aswell as how good the model looks so flawless and the animation of her scene is so well made aswell played tons of games but renders,animations in this one r by far the best ive seen like the anal scene her face expressions are just amazingly well made overall just way to good

 

[Joraell]

yep but aswell as how good the model looks so flawless and the animation of her scene is so well made aswell played tons of games but renders,animations in this one r by far the best ive seen cudos

Thank you.
Maybe this reflects somewhere.

 

[nZk]

Welp with renders like that, diamonds are no longer nature's hardest material.

 

[thedude6969]

I need some help. I've possessed the bum and am totally stuck. I can't go anywhere or do anything (school won't let me in, I don't have the keys for the apartment, nothing else to do really). Am I missing something? I have the wire.

 

[Joraell]

I need some help. I've possessed the bum and am totally stuck. I can't go anywhere or do anything (school won't let me in, I don't have the keys for the apartment, nothing else to do really). Am I missing something?

warehouse - wire

 

[thedude6969]

warehouse - wire

Sorry - I have the wire. What do I do with it?

 

[Tickle]

Awesome intro so far

 

[Joraell]

Sorry - I have the wire. What do I do with it?

go to crash sit e and get keys from sewer.

 

[bosp]

I think you are wrong with the story. But that you cannot see from 0.1 version

I will check on the game again once it gets more elaborate content.
Maybe you will prove me wrong, who knows.

 

[malikshabazz]

First off, that's a bang up start to the game. The renders and animation are as good as any on the site. The she-devil is crazy hot. However, I had a couple of minor critiques.

- I'd suggest adding a couple aids for getting stuck. In Timestamps you can push 'H' and it will give you a hint as to the next move. Also, maybe a key to push that would highlight the clickable items in a room. Remember that people play fapping games to fap. If you have to spend 20 minutes trying to find the wire on the dock to fish out the keys, it kills the momentum. Make the hints/highlights optional, so people can use them or not, but if they want to rush to the next scene, they can.
- I know you wrote that an English speaker did the dialog, but it is very slightly... off. Nothing as egregious as some of the machine translated monstrosities, but some sentences hit the ear a little wrong. It may not be in the short term cards, but a high quality polish of the dialog would kick things up a level.

Otherwise, seriously dude, this is one of the best v0.1 that I've seen in the last year.

 

[Joraell]

First off, that's a bang up start to the game. The renders and animation are as good as any on the site. The she-devil is crazy hot. However, I had a couple of minor critiques.

- I'd suggest adding a couple aids for getting stuck. In Timestamps you can push 'H' and it will give you a hint as to the next move. Also, maybe a key to push that would highlight the clickable items in a room. Remember that people play fapping games to fap. If you have to spend 20 minutes trying to find the wire on the dock to fish out the keys, it kills the momentum. Make the hints/highlights optional, so people can use them or not, but if they want to rush to the next scene, they can.
- I know you wrote that an English speaker did the dialog, but it is very slightly... off. Nothing as egregious as some of the machine translated monstrosities, but some sentences hit the ear a little wrong. It may not be in the short term cards, but a high quality polish of the dialog would kick things up a level.

Otherwise, seriously dude, this is one of the best v0.1 that I've seen in the last year.

Thanks you a lot. This H forh highlight object is planed and in next versions. rooms that is empty will not highlighted or avaiable at all. It was only for this version.
I'm really happy for positive reaction like this.

About english speech and corections. I cannot rate quality of correction, because my Enlish is just Engirsh , as you can see here )

I hope that I not disappointed all of you at next updates. I will try my best as always

 

[malikshabazz]

About english speech and corections. I cannot rate quality of correction, because my Enlish is just Engirsh , as you can see here )

Well, it's why I listed it as a long-term goal. Your English is fine, but obviously a second language (which sure as hell doesn't impact the renders). You'd probably want to bring a professional copy editor onto the team at some point.

And to answer your question above about promoting the game, seriously, man... Maintain a regular version update schedule and that stellar quality of renders and animations, and the promotion will take care of itself.

 

[Patrick6918]

Ok nice game but ???!!!!! I don't understand for key I've try all reading the tread but nothing I can't grb the key! I'll deleted this game

 

[ThunderRob]

try reading the comments..over and over it tells you how to get the key

 

[Daxter250]

... i like demon girls in games

i like trains okerFace:


no seriously, where is my angel girl giving me a sandwich while a chorus is singing in the background and sunlight is shining brightly?

 

[Patrick6918]

try reading the comments..over and over it tells you how to get the key

Nice try but the game is deleted I no start & and need to look 4 pages treads for....what's up! after .....1 hours missing my time better play other game!