VN Ren'Py Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.10 P2] [Ethan Krautz]

[EthanKrautz]

changed the OP and moved to games tell me if the engine is different

Its Ok, thanks

 

[Bollagus]

Doesn't look so bad, but please, make sure to change typos like he instead of she, and his instead of hers, it really ruins it, .....and of course an incest patch will do very fine by me. And a way to chenge MC's name.

 

[Gleemer]

Here is the Italian translation

of Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.4 Part 2]

This translation is "unofficial, it was created by a fan.

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Ecco la traduzione italiana

di un fan Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.4 Part 2]

Questa traduzione "non è ufficiale" è stata generata da un fan.

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+ Walkthrough/Gallery Mod già installata

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Here is the Italian translation

of Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.4 Part 1]

This translation is "unofficial, it was created by a fan.

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+ Walkthrough/Gallery Mod already installed

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Ecco la traduzione italiana

di un fan Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.4 Part 1]

Questa traduzione "non è ufficiale" è stata generata da un fan.

You must be registered to see the links

+ Walkthrough/Gallery Mod già installata

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Here is the Italian translation

of Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.3 Part 2]

This translation is "unofficial, it was created by a fan.

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Ecco la traduzione italiana

di un fan Between Salvation and Abyss [Ch.3 Part 2]

Questa traduzione "non è ufficiale" è stata generata da un fan.

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[おい！]

"Ethan, will have to "strengthen" the ties with his family and other characters that will enter the scene." Yes fuck em, fuck em all.

 

[humanno21]

Gizz, is some AI producing those games...

 

[AdamJohn36]

Definitely adding this to my watchlist. Incest and pregnancy in the future. Make me happy to see.

 

[zeus04]

 

[Tragic Princess]

The Nun is all it took for me I'm in.

 

[Cooling Prob]

Girls are..." She"....Guys are..."He". Kind of weird when you're reading. Understandable though to make mistakes when English isn't a first language. English speakers like myself are always big shits about people who make mistakes

 

[Eayz3n]

Nice ladies. Some grammatical errors but i understand english its not your first language neither is mine so i dont judge.

But my question is. Will there be 2 paths 1 romance 1 corruption? Or just some stuff is avoidable?

Anyway good luck whit your game hope it goes well for you.

 

[EthanKrautz]

No dead landlord = no play

Is dead.

 

[Grimtown]

This just got tagged [incest], yet I don't see any sexual related tags. Is there actual incest in this yet? Else the tag should go under planned, but not on the OP. Or if there already is, the appropriate [anal/oral/vaginal/hand/foot/tits-sex/-job/-fuck] tags should be added.

 

[EthanKrautz]

I'm going to be honest, I clicked because there's a sexy nun in the screenshots. There isn't much to say about the game so far and the English isn't the worst I have ever read but you keep referring to the female characters with he and him pronouns when it should be she and her that you use.

The "grandmother landlady" also has the issue where she has black lines on her forehead in some scenes which is a common problem with DAZ that can easily be fixed before you start the render or fixed in post using something like Photoshop or GIMP.

Yeah, I'll fix that by the time I release the first version of the game, which will be shortly. I will take advantage of Easter.

 

[ravendarklock]

Hispanic language translated to English, with out the translator actually speaking English.
Male=he, female=she, You need a grammar technician, and they aren't free.
Also, you got a discord yet?

 

[Deleted member 3006697]

Is dead.

Also I see that this time the tenant was involved in the process.
Progress!!


Joker apart, its looking good so far just as the others have stated the only major issue right now is English.
Good Job

 

[EthanKrautz]

Interesting start - but the English needs a lot of work, all the he/she him/her mistakes need fixing as it reads really badly.
It says that your "family" moved after the murder - yet the MC knows his way around?

Also... evil nuns - me like

He lived there before, remember he knows Sofia.

 

[tigerdiamond]

Girls are..." She"....Guys are..."He". Kind of weird when you're reading. Understandable though to make mistakes when English isn't a first language. English speakers like myself are always big shits about people who make mistakes

I think they used a translator, it's a common error I've seen with machine translated works.

 

[treeoflife123]

Nice start!
Good luck with game. I'd love to see that bush much closer.

 

[tigerdiamond]

This just got tagged [incest], yet I don't see any sexual related tags. Is there actual incest in this yet? Else the tag should go under planned, but not on the OP. Or if there already is, the appropriate [anal/oral/vaginal/hand/foot/tits-sex/-job/-fuck] tags should be added.

could be kissing without sex yet.

 

[EthanKrautz]

Hispanic language translated to English, with out the translator actually speaking English.
Male=he, female=she, You need a grammar technician, and they aren't free.
Also, you got a discord yet?

I have discord.