Interesting. The prose is nice! But I think the stilted nature of the lines tends to come off more as beat poetry than any coherent narrative. Ideally, you'd, be able to slip in and out of those moments of poetry to highlight the otherworldly nature of particular moments, but as it stands, I feel like I'm spending much of the game listening to someone recite a monotone poem. Again, though, the prose is evocative and effective.
The renders are nice, but something about their composition is a bit drab. It's not even that they're badly lit --- that's intentional -- but more than the subject of them tends to be thoroughly bland. There's no interesting symmetry, no eye-catching angle that refreshes a mundane object... just very typical shots. Amateur digital photography. The filters and smash cuts help, but if you're going to go for a more ~artsy~ style than the typical '2d sprite talks to you while changing pose' -- I think you have to better utilize the visual components during the downtime between impact shots.
The story is... fine. I guess. there's not much to comment on because so little is made clear -- there's really not much to speculate on at all. The MC is an absolutely psychotic, depressed person! That could be interesting if we got more internal dialogue, but as it stands his insane cyber-stalking only serves the functional purpose of giving a 'the call is coming from inside the house' moment. Much of his narration is evocative rather than insightful, and by the end, I don't get an impression of anyone other than someone who probably deserved getting dabbed on by a witch.
There's just nothing to latch on top about the actual story beyond a series of eerie vignettes, and nothing eerie or interesting enough about the MC to get me to speculate on the greater implications of getting hooked into Lovecraft!Tinder.
As a little art piece this is passable. It's aesthetic as fuck, for sure. But if you're interested in actually telling a story, or really painting a picture of dread and sexuality, you need to add some more meat to the bones in the form of narrative.
There's another very weird game called Of Birds & Bees that this gives me vibes of. Except Birds and Bees definitely is... trying... to tell a story. Maybe look intom that for inspiration -- or just vibes, as it kind of seems like your thing.
Anyway, good luck going forward. You definitely have the production values to make something great, but right now, it feels like you're being dragged down by a lack of confidence.