I just finished reading through it. Like someone mentioned it's weird how he keeps using the mother's name rather than just saying mom. It also seems to be translated from Spanish with some text that hasn't gotten translated, mostly in menus but there was one "Sí" in the script.
I do like the scenario and it shows a lot of promise, so I'll likely check it out again in a couple updates. One last complaint is that the animations have a very low framerate which just makes it look very choppy.
Hmm your mothers name should be capitalized by default, and would be nice for either a language selection or the menus to be in English. Other than those nitpicks seems good will see what the updates bring.
Uff, incest and mind control in 1 game? And with decent/very good visuals? Count me in!!! I just hope that besides hypnosis there´s corruption and maybe some physical transformation (Nothing too extreme, just change of clothes/hairstyles or attitude).
The script needs some work. A lot of times it's supposed to be describing the scene, but what it's describing isn't even in the scene. Ex: Karen and her friend in the kitchen. Says karen has her hair pulled back...nope. Then it says her friend is cutting fruit.....nope. Other scenes like that also