Kerni,
First, let me say how awesome it is to see you so active on the threads for your games here.
Second, this is a small constructive criticism from me: I am enjoying the story of Bound a great deal, however I'm finding myself clicking through all the dialogue. Not because I'm trying to get to the scenes faster, but because I get bored with the monotone text boxes. All the characters speak the same way (like mannerisms and whatnot), and the text is always the same color on the same background. After a while, it just sort of bleeds together, and I'm just clicking to get to the next plot point. I *do* have a suggestion or two to help with this. First, is give each character a color for the text. It can be just their name in the dialogue box, or all the text, but this way it's more than just a name change showing that the new person is speaking. The second suggestion is about HOW the different characters speak. This was an issue I had with Milky Ways as well. While each character had their own personality traits in the script (Like Maya being anti-male to start but because she wanted stuff, Malia likes her plants, etc), they all sorta just...talked the same way. I know, with a written script without voice, it is harder to do accents properly, but just changing HOW they talk could help. For example, if you've played Mass Effect, the way I'd hear the girls speak: Maya would be akin to Mordin, quick to slip to technical jargon, short speeches unless it was about a passionate thing(like getting her to open up about the cosplay and she begins to believe you don't think less of her for enjoying it) then she'd never shut up; Maya would speak like Tali, casual, down to earth, curses slipping in frequently but as a sign of exasperation or excitement; Juna would talk like Miranda, very haughty, she comes from power and knows it, but once her trust is gained, is very forthcoming and passionate; and Yukari would speak like EDI, being and AI, very formal sentence structure, very concise, but not above using humor or compassion. Like I said, just written text makes that much harder to convey, but if it was possible for you going forward, it would help people (myself and possibly others like me) keep the girls separate.
Finally, an offer to help with the script: I am a native English speaker, and currently retired, so if you'd like help with proofreading, I can do that for you.