- Aug 11, 2018
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Pacing is way too fast, and combined with the machine translated Engrish totally broke immersion. There are more masculine male models in Koikatu, the one you are using is a wee bit too feminine for my taste, particularly for a demonic king of lust. Character development is almost absent: I realize it's more of a demo than anything else, but a little interior dialogue on the part of the female characters (for example the nun questioning why she's suddenly attracted to this boy and slowly giving in to the corruption) would go a long way. Female models are done fairly well, although most of them seem very similar physically. I'll wait a few updates before revisiting and hope for either a rewrite, or major revisions, editing, and proofreading.
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