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Did not know MC had anything ”seven times” and do not remember about something like ”seven times over” to be a thing MC would think about or talk about with his former girlfriend or anybody else for that matter.
Rather smooth read, otherwise, to the point of hearing how the town is missing a propper restaurant from commander babe supreme Bella herself. Small irks here and there feel nit picky more than anything, such as isolating the ”too” with commas in the statement below:
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It works tho - the character is stressed and could mingle words too much, while trying too hard to appeal to MC.
Just thought that, possibly, a more lively, faster delivery would be:
”Canto, I also hope you will help me!”
”I hope so too, Canto!”
”Will you help me, Canto!”
”I do too: hope you will help me, Canto!”
Great game! Good looking characters! Easy to read and follow dialogues.