The problem is you're kind of being an ass. You say you skip all the dialog but "know" that every line is messed up. You complain about the choices not "having any effect" but then point out they do change some scenes just not stuff days later in game. Like in real life, yeah, some choices don't change things days of weeks later. There is a story here and sometimes things outside the MC's control are moving things along too. Sorry we aren't writing a hundred different divergent stories to make every little choice matter massively updates later. You resist the Bright Lord and try to protect and care for Chloe, but Chloe still leaves, why? Because the mom and sister are still (in her mind) being bitches to her, so she leaves. So, yeah, not every choice you make changes things past the moment. Because we want the story to actually be moving and not be the same thing over and over where Bright Lord tries to corrupt the girls and MC and he resists and so on forever. The story is moving, and the MC can go with the flow or resist when he can, but the story is moving forward, like a river.
You are just lobbing criticism grenades with nothing constructive. "Fix the dialog!" Well, where are the errors? "I don't know because I don't actually read the dialog, I skip it. But EVERY LINE is unreadable." Right...
"Choices should matter!" How should they effect things? What would be a reasonable outcome to resisting a powerful creature in your head? "*Silence*" Oh, you have no idea, you just want... what?
I think a change in dialog and a different version of the next scene or even a later scene is a perfectly reasonable effect. You haven't said what you think should be the outcome, you're just criticizing with no effort to add anything. It's like saying you hate someone's cooking but when they ask what you would do you don't say, "I'd have less pepper," or "I'd add more salt." Instead, you say, "You should just have cooked it differently so I would have liked it more, stop being mean to me by asking for more constructive criticism."
You like the art, awesome. You don't like the writing, fine. But add something constructive because just saying, "I don't like it," over and over and then getting upset when people ask for more specifics. It is just a dick-ish thing to do. You aren't a victim; you stepped into the arena, tossed your grenade, and are now not holding your own when people clap back because you aren't presenting anything to actually help your case. Are there typos, yeah, and they get fixed when they get seen and the whole first part is going to be fixed later. Either be constructive or stop tossing baseless critisims.
"Either be constructive or stop tossing baseless criticisms????"
Did you not read ANY of my previous comments, where said MULTIPLE times already "(ahem) correct the dialog/ use an editor to smooth out the story/ phone a friend that speaks proper english to go through the story and help the script flow/ use GOOGLE spellcheck to do a once over before you drop the lines of dialog", I am sure I could come up with more analogies to fit what I already said.
Look I am not TRYING to be an asshole here, I even liked a few comments already made in fact, I am TRYING to get one simple crucial point across.
The REST of this horseshiit that I am typing next is simply going OVER many of the things you brought up, AND repeating what I just said above...several...times, since you brought up that same point...also...several times in the post I am replying to here.
Wow, alright let me clarify some things then since I realize I have typed out a LOT of shiit in the past couple of pages that things often get missed.
SO I skip through the dialog...THIS TIME, since I already went through it once before if you recall me saying so.
The ONLY things I see change by the choices made are a scene or NOT a scene, meaning it's auto-skipped by not choosing to include it.|
When I said choices do not matter, I played through this using theFULL on corruption mode, everything that has to do with a corruption choice, I made, regardless of if it benefitted anyone or not, the second playthrough, I chose a more restrained attitude and avoided most of the corruption choices.
Chloe still leaves because she feels alone, which is EXACTLY how she placed herself, ALL of her choices made her feel alone since she pushed everyone away after her Landlays-Nextdoor Neighbors-Best Friends-Second Cousins-Rommates Husband died.
Yet that STILL doesn't explain why she would jump at the chance to have ANY job, especially one from the Black Widow that took out that parental figure she misses SO much.
Not every choice makes a difference...alright, I will reiterate that NONE of them make a difference, that's what makes this Kinetic rather than Virtual, which is deeply a personal fav since I like a good choose-your-own-adventure.
Lol when I mentioned an editor is seriously required for the dialog, that is clear and present the main issue with this story, the broken English is apparent in virtually every sentence, and some have several errors in each, I really mean it, see once a good editor goes over the script and corrects it properly, this will flow like milk and honey, improving the entire experience a thousand-fold.
I am NOT just criticizing without any attempt to "add anything", every single post I have MADE here includes exactly what this needs...it's incredible how you missed that...of course, that's what happens when someone sees a long post, then decided to skim through it to cherry-pick certain parts, while ignoring the main narrative.
You have repeated yourself THREE times in your previous post, which I replied to the same here, since I have said VERY plainly yet again what I think this needs, and yet again it bears repeating, even in this reply I am typing out now, which I have already pointed out TWICE, simply go through the text in the script, iron out the butchered language to make it flow. then voila, instant course correction, and a MUCH more enjoyable story...is there an echo in here?
Lastly...no there arent JUST typos, come ON now, if you read the dialog you KNOW its Tiiiime for an ooooverhaaaaul!
Lol its mildly amusing, that you keep mentioning that I say NOTHING on how to fix this, while I just spent the better part of this entire reply rehashing exactly that... isn't it.
Ah to heil with this, I have repeated myself enough for one day, this is fcking ridiculous, simply, go through the story and make it flow like someone who actually speaks english, rather than the butchered flow it has now..like trying to read a book in the passenger seat while driving over continuous bumps.
And lastly to those who think I am just being a...what is that OH YEAH a KAREN lmfao??
Perhaps you could read what was typed instead of the headlines (I KNOW huh reading is HARD though isnt it?), you might learn something, instead of dropping a basic-bitch comment.
