- Aug 22, 2020
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- Thread starter FireFunk
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- Jan 9, 2021
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This game needs work on conversations, and a proofreader (Samir calling his sister "my brother")
The characters mostly pose like they're telling the story to the player, which by itself can work if the conversation is carrying the story, but the writing is somewhat flat and very minimal in it's current state. Use monologues/thoughts and the conversations to bring the characters to life... Don't go surprising your brother, exchange 3 sentences and let a stranger drop you off...
Use the first chapter to introduce the characters and their activities/university... We now get a speeddate introduction and besides their names we have very little information about these characters...
Also work on the choice system is highly advised, the female MC is just a few choices away from getting into a sexual situation and the choices are too basic to end with that result.... You should not need to be an asshole just to avoid these guys and being nice should not immediately result in getting groped etc.. And if you get groped there should be a choice to slap the guy if this comes out of nowhere... Build up to situations with clear choices...
And good luck dev!
The characters mostly pose like they're telling the story to the player, which by itself can work if the conversation is carrying the story, but the writing is somewhat flat and very minimal in it's current state. Use monologues/thoughts and the conversations to bring the characters to life... Don't go surprising your brother, exchange 3 sentences and let a stranger drop you off...
Use the first chapter to introduce the characters and their activities/university... We now get a speeddate introduction and besides their names we have very little information about these characters...
Also work on the choice system is highly advised, the female MC is just a few choices away from getting into a sexual situation and the choices are too basic to end with that result.... You should not need to be an asshole just to avoid these guys and being nice should not immediately result in getting groped etc.. And if you get groped there should be a choice to slap the guy if this comes out of nowhere... Build up to situations with clear choices...
And good luck dev!
- Jun 3, 2020
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- Dec 14, 2021
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Multi protagonist game. NO NO NO and NO. I'm not some cuck who watches while sister fuck the whole town. If I don't get a sister, then no one else will either. This is already a doomed game. -50/5 and ignore.
- May 29, 2018
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Blue eyes and heavy blue eye shadow gets me hard and wet!!!!
- Jun 3, 2020
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Bring that sweet tight sister ass over here, I need to point something out to you, you belong to me, baby sister."Will his brother manage to be a good person? ...or will he join the dissipation?"
Sister: "Oh God! Brother what have you done?"
Brother: "Don't play dumb Sis, it's the men's restroom..."
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- Jan 3, 2019
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Yeah it says female protagonist tag but makes it sound like you play as a dude.
To be clear I was searching for both [Female Protagonist] tag AND [Male Domination] tag because I want to play from female perspective and be submissive and dominated by the men in the game.
The tags are kind of confusing
My first plan was to go with 1 update every month.. For now, I don't have a supporter so I don't rush myself.. If these positive comments continue, I will bring an update soon ( positive comments like this are the only thing that motivates me and that's what matters to me )
- Aug 13, 2020
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The Game itself could be really awesome, but the downside that turn it back into a bad game is none of the sentences are written correctly, like refering He while it a She and calling Sister a brother and such, not to mention some sentences are like talking to Yoda in Star Wars. Maybe seek a translator and let him write your text in English.
- Jan 20, 2018
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The game promises to be a good one, so pay a little more attention to the writing of the dialogues, there are some mistakes here and there. Good luck dev
- Jun 27, 2020
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This is making me anxious we have to get some news on this badass game
- Aug 30, 2021
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I'm thinking of continuing the game, I couldn't spare time due to my busy work, but I want to bring an update again