Alright gonna give this game a real shot and actually play it! I'm gonna edit this post for any typos I find, then I'll probably make a separate post and link this post in it when I'm done playing with my thoughts and any feedback afterwards to signify being done with bug/typo hunting.
Ver.0.02
Typos/Inconsistencies/Bugs Found
In the intro/ new game start screen:
"I just got accepted into Chase-Bank one of the most prestigious Bank in New York city"-> banks in New York city.
"After graduated from Stanford, i applied in the Management Trainee program. I rented a Rented Small Apartment near your office and live frugal so i can survive in this concrete jungle." -> After graduating from Stanford, I applied into the Management Trainee program and rented a small apartment near my office and am living frugally in order to live in this concrete jungle.
"This journey is for your survival, either you'll survive, or succumb into depression" -> This journey is about your survival. Either you'll survive or succumb to depression
Check Stats screen
"to start investing, purchase laptop & workstation at the mall, install them in your home, and start investing in stocks or time deposits" -> To start investing, purchase a laptop & workstation at the mall, install them in your home, and start investing in stocks or time deposits.
Find all and replace
i
or <spacebar>i<spacebar> with I across all dialogue files same with i've to I've
Main menu
Bed Room-> Bedroom (find all and replace across all files)
Get Out-> Go Out
In the bathroom
"I took shower"-> I took a shower
In the bedroom and napping or at the office and napping
"I took some power nap to recharge my energy"->I took a power nap to recharge my energy
Clicking masturbate in the bedroom
"I Jerk my dick off.. this lust is too much to handle"-> I jerked my dick off... My lust is too much to handle
Wake up button in the masturbate action
Wake up -> Stop jerking off or Finish masturbating
Get out button is cut off when I open the browser in full screen.
Interact with collague button
Interact with collague-> Interact with colleague
At My workstation then Do work (first time)
"the Bank makes money" -> the bank
Clicking coffee in My workstation/going to coffee corner
"I drink a cup of Cafe Late "-> I drink a cup of Caffe Latte
In your workstation
coffee->Get Coffee
Visiting the div head
"cuz i don't think so" -> Cuz I don't think so (Capitalize the starting letter of the first word of every sentence)
On the left menu screen
Workingdays-> Working Days
Clicking the mall button when outside
"One of the biggest mall in the city"-> One of the biggest malls in the city
At the Nightclub
"The club is closed at day"-> The club is closed during the day
The Redlight District
The speaker has the picture of an older man but his speaker text says Brothel. Should be Brothel Employee/Brothel Owner
"Comeback here after dark" -> Comeback here after dark.
At the Bar & Resto
"Suitable for high roller like me"-> Suitable for a highroller like me."
"Dryaged" -> Dry-Aged
Cheat menu
"it's okay to skip working"->It's okay to skip work
At the Bar and resto then clicking drink premium beer
"I drink bottle of premium beer"- > I drank a bottle of premium beer
"I opened bottle of Chateu"-> I opened a bottle of Chateau
Eating lobster
"this is something different"-> This is something different entirely!
Eating seared tuna
"it's like the tuna itslef" -> it's like the tuna itself
(Im gonna guess what you meant to say in this sentence)
-> it's like the tuna itself was taken straight from the sea before being cooked to perfection!
When visiting Natalia
Natalia Stark, Employee of the month from Business Unit. She often seen consults with financial directorate"-> from the Business Unit. She is often seen consulting with the financial directorate.
Discuss work with Natalia
Nata-> Natalia (unless its a nick name which if it is would be better if it was Nats or Nat)
Talk with Natalia
"We speak a lot.most of them casual things. We find so much in common" -> We spoke a lot about casual things but still found so much in common.
Mia Malkova
"Mia Malkova is the most popular girl in Finance Division. Not only she's hot as fuck., she's also one of the brightest employee in this division"-> Mia Malkova is the most popular girl in the Finance Division. Not only is she hot as fuck, she's also one of the brightest employees in the division
"MC i need you help on this things"-> Hey MC, can I get your help on some things?
"That's easy the only thing you need to do is to apply this formula on certain rations" is rations the right word? I know some finance people use ratios. were you talking about those? If you were it would sound better if -> That's easy the only thing you need to do is to apply this formula on these ratios.
At the Electronic shop
Electronic shop-> Electronics shop
"what do i want to buy>"-> What do I want to buy?
Buy laptop. After clicking the button it has a broken image
Buy Workstation Equipments -> Buy Workstation Equipment
"I need to purchase the workstation set to be able to work properly at home" I get this image implying that I couldnt buy it but checking my finances or bank balance on the left menu it deducted from my cash. I also didnt think that Workstation equipment meant a computer setup. It's misleading. Might be better if it was ->"This is great! Now all I need is a laptop to complete my setup!"
Then change it to Buy Gaming Setup Equipment
I am able to click the buy workstation equipment and personal laptop button even if I bought them already. if I click it again it says I cant afford it even though I have the money. You should instead not have the button at all after buying it if you aren't gonna buy them anymore in the future.
Going to the property agent
When outside
Normal Car dealer-> Car Dealer
Exotic Car dealer-> Luxury Car Dealer
Clicking Exotic Car dealer displays the message with only the words exotic. I'm assuming this is a template or WIP but later on it should be the full name
In the night club
"I'm having fun in the club" remove this section or speaker chunk and combine it below
"I see several girls dancing alone.. which girls should i make move to?" -> I'm having fun dancing in the club and see several girls dancing alone... which girl should I approach?
Dance with the brunnette-> Dance with the brunette
Also the Dance with the brunette button is broken or cut off
Club girl goes to the bathroom
"With pleaseure"-> With pleasure
"suck my dirty cock you bith"-> Suck my dirty cock you bitch
Seriously after every sentence or period. Capitalize the First letter of the first word after it
"she really swallow all my cum.. Is all girls in this club this dirty "-> She really swallowed all my cum. Are all the girls in this club this dirty?
At the brothel regular escort service
"We only offer you the best of the best sex artists "-> We only offer the best of the best. (I dont think sex artists is even a word or euphenism or code word)
At the High class escort service
"You're man of culture after all< Remember, the upfront fee is onlya booking fee. If you're willing to pay, they will prioritize you instead of others "-> You're a man of culture after all! Remember, the upfront fee is only a booking fee. If you're willing to pay more, they will prioritize you over the others.
Celebrity escort service takes me to the high class escort service. I expected a this page is a WIP screen if it wasnt finished or the brothel owner telling me Sorry that isn't available yet. Come back in a later game build / version.
In the kitchen at night
Have Dinner>> button has these weird >> symbols that shouldnt be there
In the stats page
(stock) should be (stocks)
If stress meter is too high
"I'm to stressed, i need to break for a while" -> I'm too stressed out, I need to take a break for a while.
It would be much more immersive if you made this sound like the character himself was saying it like in the following example
Argh...Too stressed out... need to take a break. (sound more like the person or character we play as is saying it and is informal IMO)
No one cares about your promotion not your boss or your coworkers ( if its intentional then thats sad
I guess we arent friends with them?)
I can go inside the club even if I have negative cash and get a message saying I dont have enough money for that kinda lifestyle. which doesnt make sense and nothing happens if I proceed anyway like no deduction in my cash.
I filled up the relationship meter with Natalia Starr but nothing happens (At Rank Assistant Manager) At first I was confused that nothing could happen while I was low rank
Having an empty energy meter yet I can still go out and act normally. I expected to be auto moved to home or the bedroom whenever the energy bar is empty. otherwise why should we keep it from being empty?
Reaching Manager level
for boards of directors-> for the board of directors.
Flirting for the first time with Natalia
"She also not trying to hide her attraction to me"-> She is also no longer trying to hide her attraction to me.
Again I woulda like to see a scene where the boss talks to me abt being promoted to manager and her telling me I can now visit her office without being told to leave.
In the fix you made for the bug in v0.02b (I didnt play 0.02b just saw the screenshot in a later post)
"Eva i think i need a time for myslef. Is it okay?" -> Eva, I think... I think I need some time alone for myself... Is that okay?
Discussing work with Eva for the first time as manager
"<Player name> i heard bad reports on some branches. I want you to do some investigations on it"-> <Player name>, I've been getting some reports lately about poor performances from some of the other branches. I need you to investigate and figure out why this is happening.
Casual talk with Eva
"Will do as soon as possible Mrs Lovia" -> Should be thank you or something like that since she complimented me on doing well.
Asking for your own office room
"Miss Lovia i'd like to have own office room"-> Miss Lovia, since I got promoted to Manager, I was wondering if there were any spare office rooms I could move into?
"Fine, i'll arrange it with the General Affairs. Congrats for your promotion by the way"-> Fine, I'll arrange it with General Affairs. Congrats on your promotion by the way.
Even if we get acknowledged here by the boss I think it woulda been better to have someone not even necessarily the boss tell us we got promoted in the earlier ranks. If that does happen you can remove the congratulations here.
" The management has approved to grant you corporate funds to manage your team.."-> Management has granted you approval for access to our corporate funds in order to manage your team..
(I notice all your use of elipses is always two or .. when normally people use three or ...)
"Thank you Mrs. Lovia.. i promise i will prove to you that your decision to promote me is the best decision Mam" -> Thank you Mrs. Lovia. I promise you that I'll prove that your decision to promote me was the best decision you ever made Mam!
"The fund will be ready on Monday"-> The funds will be ready by Monday.
Hiring Remu
"I'm Graduated from Tokyo Institute of Technology, majoring Data Science"-> I'm a college graduate from the Tokyo Institute of Technology, majoring in Data Science
"My Dad, Anthony Fukuda works in this bank sir. His name is Anthony Fukuda"-> My dad , sir. He woks here. His name is Anthony Fukuda
She says her name is Remu Anastasia but her dad is Anthony Fukuda? Unless her dad never married her mom and so didnt adopt his family name Remu should be Remu Fukuda. Unless Anastasia is her middle name which is weird cuz normally people introduce themselves with their first and last names.
"You got exactly what you needed then.. Data analytics is daily "toys" "
I dont even know what your trying to make her say here. Specifically what you mean by Data analytics is daily "toys".
Based on my intuition and context clues Im gonna try to guess and rewrite the sentence.
->"Then I'm exactly what you need. Data analytics is like child's play to me! "
Check on remu button isnt actually a button when I expected it to be one since all the other interactions were actual buttons instead of being in a parenthesis (). It wasnt immediate that I had to click that at first.
Remu seems doing quite well.. she delivers all the tasks i gave her with exceptional qualtiy-> Remu seems to be doing quite well. She is able to deliver on all the tasks I give her and with exceptional quality!
Talk with Remu
"Yeahh.. i spent my childhood in Warsaw.. then at 14 i moved to Tokyo"-> Yeah. I spent my childhood in Warsaw then at 14 I moved to Tokyo
Give her harder tasks/more work
"Remu.. I need these pattern be analyzed. I sense somethings up with the data"-> Remu... I need these patterns analyzed. I'm sensing that something 's wrong with the data.
I wish we had different text for when we spend time with Remu. Learning how she lived in Warsaw all the time is odd if I out myself into their shoes.
High class escorts in the brothel
"Damn, it's quite expensive i think" -> Damn, that's expensive!
Remu is still a high class escort even though she works in the bank which I think is an error on your part and not intentional like she's secretly Moonlighting
When selecting escort Maria ozawa
Double-click this passage to edit it. (Wrong error message)
Selecting Ameri
"You know, i offer special service for a handsome customer like you, you know "-> You know... I offer special services for handsome customers like you.
"I'll let you fuck me, for a 500 bucks" -> I'll let you fuck me for 500 bucks.
Having sex with Ameri
"Ohh Yess.. You can cum in me for a 500USD" -> You can cum in me for another 500.
Cumming inside her
"Yesss burst all your load inside me Mr <Player Last name>!"-> Yesss burst all of your load inside me Mr. <Player Last name>!
Clicking the Treat Remu button
"So tell me Remu, do you find anyone handsome in the office beside me"-> So tell me Remu, do you find anyone handsome in the office besides me
"Treat Remu drinks" -> Treat Remu to drinks
"i think you drink too much remu.. time to stop. Let's get you back home"-> I think you've drank too much Remu... time to stop. Let's get you back home.
"I'm okay with whatever you're going to do at me now "-> I'm okay with whatever you're going to do to me.
"How about this? is this what you want Remu?" -> How about this? Is this what you want Remu?
"Thank you.. it's nice hearing it coming from you" -> Thank you.. it's nice hearing it come from you.
"Ughh your pussy so tight Remu"-> Ughh your pussy is so tight Remu!
"Kiss her more intense"-> Kiss her more intensely
"Relax.. let's enjoy it a bit longer"
I have no idea what this is for since pressing it leads me back to the same screen or scene. Remove it if it really was the same and does nothing
" Turn her and fuck her doggy" (souds like bestiality aka you fucking her dog) should ne Turn her and fuck her doggy style
"We then fell asleep.. we're too tirde" -> We then fell asleep...
"i just fucked the CFO's daughter... i don't know if this going to be a good thing.. or a bad one" -> good thing... or a bad thing.
"I'm still sleepy, but my "junior" seems already awake"-> I'm still sleepy, but "junior" me seems to already be awake.
"Damn.. i'm really satisfied... this is the real sex"-> Damn... Mmh... so satisfied... Now THATS some real sex...
Drinking in the bar with Remu
chocked->choked
Suggestions / Improvements
Personal Life screen under Check Stats
[PC Name AKA player's name]
Mgt Trainee at Chase Bank NY
Nobody
I have no idea what Nobody means I'm guessing its supposed to be girlfriend? or wife? If it is I think it would be better if it was Relationship status: Single
and if you do have a gf and or wife Relationship status: Married (NAME OF WIFE HERE)
Edit: ok so apparently this is for a variable/ game play stat called prestige, I think it would be better if it was reputation
so like
[PC Name AKA player's name]
Mgt Trainee at Chase Bank NY
Current Reputation:
Nobody
Financial Asset-> Financial Assets
plural form of Asset
Transport-> Mode of Transportation
better term
Address-> Current Residence
better term
Currently checking the Journal: Relationships page increases lust by a small amount even if its blank or tells me to meet the characters first. Is this intentional? If it is at least make it only increase once we met a girl first XD
Banner goes out of the box in full screen, but honestly I'm just nitpicking and I personally know how tricky it is to get the UI to look correct across different device screen sizes in browsers
when it asks for the player's name the Home button would be cooler if it was Go Home
I'm wondering if there should be different styles of displaying text for when the Player Character is thinking or talking to himself vs actually saying them... IDK
Having a screen of all the models used and their character names with their real life model names with profile pic somewhere in the main menu or in a txt file.
The initial filled input for first name and last name is undefined undefined would be better if it was initialized with first name last name
Once you grind enough to finish the promotion bat and get Assistant manager rank, nothing happens. I woulda liked an event where the boss comes in and knocks on your door/cubicle/ tap you shoulder while you are focused on doing work on the computer screen, then proceeds to tell you got promoted. It woulda also been a good way to get to know the boss' personality through how she treats her employees or talks with others. Is she cold only being formal and talking to you un enthusiastically and only for as long as possible? instantly leaving you before you can thank her? or is she nice and friendly giving you a big smile and a handshake?
The Player character says take her home after Remu gets drunk. Until the post sex wake up I thought we brought her to our home but instead it's hers. I wish there was a short sentence or two telling us that we brought her to her house. Something like "You quickly hail the nearest taxi and get in as Remu drunkenly slurs her adress to the driver. Several minutes later you arrive at her place as you both enter her home while drunkenly making out before planting yourselves onto her couch."
I have no idea what the lust stat is supposed to do or what is the consequence or bad effect of it being full?
-More developed characters with personalities like learning what they like and dislike, learning about their personalities aka flirty, quiet, cold, etc..., learning about why they're working in the company, learning about what they do outside of work? Bonding with them more by doing stuff they like outside of work?
You can only flirt with co workers when you're the manager (Im guessing your trying to tell us that only bigshots get the attention or affection of the ladies? sad life lol Personally I think we should be able to, like make us close workers working on a team project then see us slowly rise the corporate ladder then have a coworker's romance route be about how to show we are still friendly and largely the same even if we dont see each other or that now you are their boss etc.)
Having espesso for 10USD gives more energy than a Cafe Latte which is 15 USD, which makes me more incentivized to spam espresso. Swap the energy gain values of the two items?
-Having "Company Team Building retreats/exercises".
A choice to make some girls official girlfriends thus letting some events happen at your house like visting or staying over etc...,
Not being forced to romance certain girls in order to romance other characters.
Having your girlfriend or your in game wife know that or deal with or address the fact you are boning other girls or giving consequences for cheating on them if they arent okay with sharing (which I am assuming since its been realistic so far)