I would like to say that, from my point of view, that scene seen from the teddy bear camera where the Mary masturbates, shouldn't be there. This is suppossed to be an slowburn game and we shouldn't be able to see Mary like that so soon. Reminds me of that silly shower scenes shown at the beginning of bad games which gives you for free what you should be hard working in game to receive. I think it's way better to create a crescent sexual tension which makes the player want to see Mary naked. Showing her off that early and without her doing it voluntarily to expose herself ruins that tension.
Also, I dislike the scene with the redneck at the laundry, don't think it gives anything to the game.
Sorry for the bad input but I'm trying to be as constructive as possible while it's still under development. Of course, I still think it's a great game and thank the developer for the work.