Others Corruption of Champions II [v0.8.1] [Savin/Salamander Studios]

[NODOGAN]

I'm not surprised. I still wanna see the actual text but going through and reading TOBs writing makes me wanna take two steps on a one-step cliff.

The temple is Groomer ground no doubt, they try to justify it by saying you can leave the temple when you're 18 and that not all the ones living in the temple HAVE to be sex-workers (cat-paladin constantly tells us "guys guys Mallach is also the god of Arts, you can be writters, artists and so much more than just fuckbuddies!") but well...is hard to justify kids leaving when they grow up with the temple and the fucking and everything as their refference for "normal lifestyle."

Also gotta admit is kinda funny they ask you for 15.000 coins to impregnate the cat and that "those are savings to raise your kitten from birth till 18 y/o without much troubles" and I'm just here thinking..."inflation ain't a thing or something? I though you cats were artists, since when economics to calculate life costs is part of your passions?"

P.S: I jus find it funny that in a porn fantasy game they choose to fixate on economics and try to make it sound so well-planned out and precise, like...dude just say part of the income of the temple goes to raising your childs or something instead of pretending a single sum will be enough lol.

 

[Quintilus]

implying Quint was really Bubbles

 

[Basty96]

Quint was really Bubbles.

hey i don't like the guy but that insult goes a bit too far

 

[Quintilus]

inflation ain't a thing or something? I though you cats were artists, since when economics to calculate life costs is part of your passions?

Inflation was close to nonexistent in ancient/medieval times.
Reason, gold/silver/metal name costs a considerable amount of 'wealth', in abstract sense, since they extracted from ore without using modern smelting technologies, aka one abstract metal peso require enormous amount of human hours for making.

 

[Lord Kentus]

Inflation was close to nonexistent in ancient/medieval times.
Reason, gold/silver/metal name costs a considerable amount of 'wealth', in abstract sense, since they extracted from ore without using modern smelting technologies, aka one abstract metal peso require enormous amount of human hours for making.

All that south american silver did eventually render silver basically worthless in Europe for a bit though

 

[Deleted member 1660801]

https://f95zone.to/threads/corrupti...-savin-salamander-studios.11371/post-10741813
It's in the spoiler with multiple examples taken out of the game. There'd have to be some very loose interpretations on err... Things mentioned.
I can't remember of the two (Savin/Tobs) who even wrote this nonsense. And it's not like it matters all that much.

Regarding Cait I'm sure there's going to be somebody that gets a chuckle

Long as you sidestep that she's advocating doing in the Alraune.

Anyways Cait remains as abrasive and generally unlikable to me for the same reasons you don't ask your best friend intimate questions about his love life.

Did.... did anyone proofread this shit?

 

[Deleted member 1660801]

On another note I've read that Kohaku preg is never going to happen because Tobs said it would get in the way of her being a merchant.
I don't know if it's just me but the kitsune world-building feels so weird. The lore is randomly explained to us and their rules feel like they are made up on the spot just to fuck with the player.

 

[YouShallNotLol]

their rules feel like they are made up on the spot just to fuck with the player.

Because they are. Kekw.

 

[Darak123]

The lore is randomly explained to us and their rules feel like they are made up on the spot just to fuck with the player

Bro, it's Tobs lol. He's a salt miner through and through, of course he gonna do that to fuck with the player. By the by, here's my first draft of the champ fucking Nakano. I'm open for feedback so pls drown me in them.

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[Deleted member 1660801]

Bro, it's Tobs lol. He's a salt miner through and through, of course he gonna do that to fuck with the player. By the by, here's my first draft of the champ fucking Nakano. I'm open for feedback so pls drown me in them.

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Despite this content not really being for me. I really liked it! how long did this take to write?
Now there are some grammar mistakes that need to be fixed to make it better to read but I won't harp on that too much because I would make the same mistakes lol.
Good work and keep it up!

 

[Hargan2]

Bro, it's Tobs lol. He's a salt miner through and through, of course he gonna do that to fuck with the player. By the by, here's my first draft of the champ fucking Nakano. I'm open for feedback so pls drown me in them.

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Not bad! Could use a fem-champ variation imo but in terms of actual writing, I liked it. The formatting was a little weird, though. You indented with a dash for some reason on every line that started with dialogue, but then you kept the whole paragraph indented. It would be better to indent only the first line of each new paragraph/dialogue. Unless there's a reason behind it that I'm not seeing, which there very well could be.

Edit: replied to the wrong post at first

 

[Wrynn13]

Did.... did anyone proofread this shit?

As testament to Savin's laziness submissions of "trusted" writers like Tobs don't get proofread. In other words even Savin ain't going to drown in that word salad.

 

[Biostar]

On another note I've read that Kohaku preg is never going to happen because Tobs said it would get in the way of her being a merchant.
I don't know if it's just me but the kitsune world-building feels so weird. The lore is randomly explained to us and their rules feel like they are made up on the spot just to fuck with the player.

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

 

[Lord Kentus]

Bro, it's Tobs lol. He's a salt miner through and through, of course he gonna do that to fuck with the player. By the by, here's my first draft of the champ fucking Nakano. I'm open for feedback so pls drown me in them.

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Very solid first draft, needs a bit of a spellcheck go over because I spotted a few errors but the premise and tone are good.

Add in a few feminization or outright tg options later down the line and this will be a great route

 

[claralover]

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

 

[Hargan2]

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

 

[muschi26]

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

 

[YouShallNotLol]

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

Tobs can't perceive a woman having a career and a family.

 

[Deviton123]

I think y'all mean Tobs can't observe...

Yeah I'll let myself out.

 

[G3b]

I think y'all mean Tobs can't observe...

Yeah I'll let myself out.

He can't observe his writing to let himself know that he needs to understand his word to tell you how much he spites everyone for Kinu's father and daughter's relationship.