I'm not sure why I'm writing this, but it might be of use to someone who browses the thread.
First off - the game is pretty well written, all things considered. As for WHAT'S written, well... it's a lot, in multiple ways. Pretty dense writing.
Initially, I think that the MC was written very well in many regards, including (but not limited to) how he annoys the player/reader as well as the characters in the story. It's all very intentional, and very well done for what the game is.
At the same time, there are many things I dislike about him and the writing as a whole, and many times it comes off as either repetitive, preachy, or both.
As for the characters themselves... to me, that was the biggest disappointment. Not because they're bad. Quite the opposite, most of them are written very well. But for every single LI I've met, there's at least one or more things that either makes me feel disgusted, repulsed or otherwise just very negatively towards them. Some more than others, and some start off really likeable... until things start being revealed and/or shown that just absolutely kills my interest in them. I could go into specifics one by one like some other folks have... but honestly, I don't want to keep thinking about them anymore as I don't think I'll be coming back to this title despite it's great excellence in the writing department (give a man who hates fish the world's best prepared tuna and he still won't savor it, even if he appreciates the excellence in its preparation).
I mean that not as someone looking for some porn, but in some way or another they made me feel like I don't want to follow their stories anymore, don't want to get involved and want to cut them out completely - kinda like the MC himself usually does (or did). Of course we can't do that in this game though, as that'd go against what the game proposes itself to be.
I played until the end of chapter one and the introduction of the "variants" (Kyle and Diana). Quit the game just now, before the event itself was over (specifically, as King and Nathan entered the room with Sam and the MC to question them and King nearly pukes (again) after using her power to "see" the MC). I think that's about, roughly, half of the current content available? Like I said, it's a really dense game and very slow paced.
The story itself was interesting enough for me to push forward even with me liking the characters less and less as I advanced (with Lupe being the "last drop" as the chapter 1 events were wrapping up), however, it got very convoluted very fast towards the end of chapter one with tropes I absolutely detest (alternative worlds/versions of people), and prior to that the pacing was nearly GLACIAL in regards to anything regarding the events that initially set the whole story in motion - the things related to the shards and just about everything related to Sam.
Instead, there's a heavy focus on the MC's interactions with the characters, and a heavy (and oftentimes graphic) focus on the mental/internal goings on of the MC's mind.
I also felt that the game at times went out of its way to be disrespectful toward religion (Christianity in particular) and also has a very "anti-establishment political vibe" to it's themes and messaging, though the latter isn't too on the nose. The former is.
In regards to the religious references and imagery that is used I just thought... why? Why go out of your way to do things in this way? Felt very uncomfortable (and I'm not exactly a practitioner or anything but... I mean, for example, why would there be a placement of a crucified Ronald McDonald - a clown - painting in a fast-food joint in one of Lupe's events? Not to mention all the quoted scripture (many times with very intentionally warped text).
As an art form and as a means to convey a feeling or mentality, I get it. A way to denote a feeling of "godlike amoral superiority" or something of the like? I get it, I really do, but I don't appreciate the way it was done.
Overall, it's a very good and very well-written title... that will absolutely NOT appeal to MANY people. Even if initially people do connect in some way or another with the MC, as I did and I'm sure many ppl would/will as well, as events play out many people will feel more and more "DETACHED" from the game (pun absolutely intended cause I'm hilarious).
If you're on the fence about the game, give it a try. It's a very specific cup of tea that will not appeal to many people, but you just might enjoy it... maybe.