Elycia's design poll. Another roommate of the MC, 3 choices.


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Ulith

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I'm sorry that my comment sounded like criticism because it's not)
I like the character.

In my understanding, his whole life is study and working on how to get his wife back. This is the purpose of life.
Everything else for him is unimportant or secondary. He doesn't care about anyone's attitude towards him.

Therefore, I don’t see him as some kind of "alpha-chad" (and I don’t want him to be like that), and it seems to me that the harem is not very suitable here, as it conflicts with his character and the purpose of his life.
During his 200 years, his goal was to fulfill his promise with Aisha - to discover all the secrets of this universe. And finding the reason for Aisha's death is obviously part of the secrets of this universe.
However, he also experienced a lot in 200 years, I will not tell you directly what happened, but you can guess what happened from some of the present and after descriptions.
As for the harem, the MC will never pursue or attract a girl, but those girls will fall for him and he will accept the kindness of others.
 
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I have revised my overview to make it more attractive.I believe that by looking at the story in a new light, many of the problems do not arise.
 
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DrFree

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Just wanted to say, that looking at the previews, I was questioning if this was Koikatsu. Turns out it is! I like the models, the work in them is noticeable.
 
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I regret that my lack of ability caused my characterisation to fail to get to the heart of the character.
What I was trying to convey was that the MC, as a member of a god-like civilisation, in his eyes, those people are as small as dust to him and he doesn't care about them at all.
As for socialising, it has nothing to do with social skills, why would he need to socialise? Does he need to deliberately say things to make people happy to gain their approval?
Most of all, the MC has been a man of terrible indifference since the beginning. And some experiences during the 200 years have made him even more extreme.
You can think back to the scene where he and Aisha meet again and he has no emotion or desire to have her back.
That's what I got from the characterization. He doesn't talk too much (Ai was clearly teasing him when socialising was brought up) and instead acts, such as wasting some energy to repay the girl he was living with.
I didn't quite process he considered those people "small as dust" power-wise though, since I had no clue on how powerful MC's meant to be. He has a great soul power because of his accomplishments, is what I got, but I don't know how that translates into power. The biggest clue is Ai threatening the Dark/Evil god at the end.

Another thing I got from the characterization is that he grew colder after his wife died, so he was ok with letting her live her life. If he really grew god-like power, then him just accepting an harem is understandable.
This is basically one of those chinese wuxia novels, but the MC will actually get things done with the girls when they throw themselves at him, which is great.

Also, in this site, you would tag the game as ntr, and leave a giant, bold and differently colored message in the 1st post saying "MC WILL STEAL THE GIRLS (NETORI), NOT THE OPPOSITE (NETORARE)"
I hate the lack of tags in this site. I would recommend putting the message, clarification in the planned tags, but not the tag itself though, since some may skip the game due tot he tag, thinking MC's the cucked one.
 
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That's what I got from the characterization. He doesn't talk too much (Ai was clearly teasing him when socialising was brought up) and instead acts, such as wasting some energy to repay the girl he was living with.
I didn't quite process he considered those people "small as dust" power-wise though, since I had no clue on how powerful MC's meant to be. He has a great soul power because of his accomplishments, is what I got, but I don't know how that translates into power. The biggest clue is Ai threatening the Dark/Evil god at the end.

Another thing I got from the characterization is that he grew colder after his wife died, so he was ok with letting her live her life. If he really grew god-like power, then him just accepting an harem is understandable.
This is basically one of those chinese wuxia novels, but the MC will actually get things done with the girls when they throw themselves at him, which is great.

Also, in this site, you would tag the game as ntr, and leave a giant, bold and differently colored message in the 1st post saying "MC WILL STEAL THE GIRLS (NETORI), NOT THE OPPOSITE (NETORARE)"
I hate the lack of tags in this site. I would recommend putting the message, clarification in the planned tags, but not the tag itself though, since some may skip the game due tot he tag, thinking MC's the cucked one.
In fact, MC's soul has no use at all, it is just to create some conflicts. Until the end of the story, MC will not have any magic.
MC is a completely ordinary(physically) person, both on Earth and in isekai. He has hardly received any enhancement and is seen as very weak in everyone's eyes.
However, I do not intend to give MC any enhancement or power. On the contrary, I have given MC a lot of restrictions, such as 1. All items carried by Ai are lost. 2. Most of Ai's functions are damaged and can play a very limited role. 3. The resources he can obtain on the planet are limited. 4. His every move may attract the attention ofthe Cosmic Will.
Even in the sequel of the story, I will continue to add restrictions to him.
A very simple fact. He doesn't need "god-like power" at all, because at the beginning of the story he has already surpassed "God". If I don't give him any restrictions, the story will end quickly.

Power can be many things. In that universe without magic, an individual's combat strength is the most insignificant.

The biggest difference between this work and similar stories is that almost all the fighting and most other areas are done by the girls. MC will give them some help, but not too much. He will accompany them and witness the efforts and growth of the girls.
In other stories, basically MC relies on "cheat (mostly not even obtained through his own efforts)" to show off and act cool everywhere alone, girls are attracted to him simply because of his power.
 
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Ulith

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That's what I got from the characterization. He doesn't talk too much (Ai was clearly teasing him when socialising was brought up) and instead acts, such as wasting some energy to repay the girl he was living with.
I didn't quite process he considered those people "small as dust" power-wise though, since I had no clue on how powerful MC's meant to be. He has a great soul power because of his accomplishments, is what I got, but I don't know how that translates into power. The biggest clue is Ai threatening the Dark/Evil god at the end.

Another thing I got from the characterization is that he grew colder after his wife died, so he was ok with letting her live her life. If he really grew god-like power, then him just accepting an harem is understandable.
This is basically one of those chinese wuxia novels, but the MC will actually get things done with the girls when they throw themselves at him, which is great.

Also, in this site, you would tag the game as ntr, and leave a giant, bold and differently colored message in the 1st post saying "MC WILL STEAL THE GIRLS (NETORI), NOT THE OPPOSITE (NETORARE)"
I hate the lack of tags in this site. I would recommend putting the message, clarification in the planned tags, but not the tag itself though, since some may skip the game due tot he tag, thinking MC's the cucked one.
Sorry, my previous reply was a bit presumptuous.
I did not directly reveal in the current story the specific level of power that the MC has mastered.
So it will indeed cause doubts.
 
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DraxisSilencer1000

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Alright... lore heavy game. There are so many stuff in it that I don't understand so you better have those edited to have a much clearer clarity on whatever they are talking about. Seems most characters just speak jargon and lore so that definitely needs to be improved. I'll see what the next update's do. Grammar and all that, etc., etc. like that.
 

Ulith

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Alright... lore heavy game. There are so many stuff in it that I don't understand so you better have those edited to have a much clearer clarity on whatever they are talking about. Seems most characters just speak jargon and lore so that definitely needs to be improved. I'll see what the next update's do. Grammar and all that, etc., etc. like that.
I apologize for the bad experience.
The subsequent dialogues will basically be daily conversations between characters.
I have added an option to skip long explanations.
I received some feedback on the translation, but I reviewed the text at least twice and finally I read the English text once to make sure I could understand it basically myself. So I need more precise feedback to improve the translation.
 
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DraxisSilencer1000

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I apologize for the bad experience. Most of the dialogues after that are daily conversations. I am considering adding a button to skip all the lore that will not take effect immediately, while adding a wiki to explain them.
I received some feedback on the translation, but I reviewed the text at least twice and finally I read the English text once to make sure I could understand it basically myself. So I need more precise feedback to improve the translation.
Oh so its actually a translation, yeah you definitely need to sort that out, you know those badly fan-translated old Light Novels? With their complicated expression of Kanji being translated to nonsensical English and all that? Including some daily day-to-day parts of the dialogue, some battle scenes and all that?

It really feels like I'm reading one of these stuff, its not necessarily bad. But you barely understand anything, you know from the many complicated original Japanese text in there (from the raw version) that you would think its actually a masterpiece but simply badly translated? You don't necessarily need to remove the lore and story heavy parts (I like it, for one), you just need to make sure the readers actually understand what they're reading.
 
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In v0.1, I have improved all the feedback I have received so far. But I'm still getting very little feedback.
Much of the content of my post is wrong in v0.1, I have fixed all the problems mentioned in the above posts. so please don't read this story with preconceptions.
 
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As for the harem, the MC will never pursue or attract a girl, but those girls will fall for him and he will accept the kindness of others.
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So the girls will fall for the MC through no conscious effort of is own, but simple by existing and doing things to further his goal?

The girls will all love the MC, but he will basically be indifferent towards them the entire time? That's...idk how I feel about that. There is genre of hentai that is "emotionless sex" where one character is blank. I never liked that. Even if it's the slightest degree of emotion shown it would be better for me but nothing at all is a mood killer.

Is that how this game is going to be? Like, if the MC doesn't actually care about anything, what is his motivation? Is he just there to watch what happens? I don't understand.
An indifferent MC at the start of the story is usually meant to undergo some personal growth or eventually find something to make him feel again, even if only a slightly.
But if he is going to be indifferent the entire time...if the main character of the story doesn't care about anything, why should I as the player care?
 
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Ulith

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:unsure:

So the girls will fall for the MC through no conscious effort of is own, but simple by existing and doing things to further his goal?

The girls will all love the MC, but he will basically be indifferent towards them the entire time? That's...idk how I feel about that. There is genre of hentai that is "emotionless sex" where one character is blank. I never liked that. Even if it's the slightest degree of emotion shown it would be better for me but nothing at all is a mood killer.

Is that how this game is going to be? Like, if the MC doesn't actually care about anything, what is his motivation? Is he just there to watch what happens? I don't understand.
An indifferent MC at the start of the story is usually meant to undergo some personal growth or eventually find something to make him feel again...but if he is going to be indifferent the entire time...If the main character of the story doesn't care about anything, why should I as the player care?
MC responds to everyone's kindness in a way that is even better than they expect.
MC doesn't show much emotion, but what he does is stronger than any kind of emotion.
I never said the MC would be indifferent forever.
On the specific, it's foreshadowing, you notice I mention the MC's "true nature" in the story.
You will soon know the answer.
 
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Fazed

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MC responds to everyone's kindness in a way that is even better than they expect.
MC doesn't show much emotion, but what he does is stronger than any kind of emotion.
I never said the MC would be indifferent forever.
On the specific, it's an ambush, you notice I mention the MC's "true nature" in the story.
You will soon know the answer.
Hmm alright. Guess I will see. I started playing. The use of the word "soul" is quite confusing to me. "Soul" already has a strong existing definition, so to see it being separated from that and used to describe the phenomena in this story is quite jarring. Maybe it's just me though.
"it's just easier to think of it as magic" is right.
 
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Ulith

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Hmm alright. Guess I will see. I started playing. The use of the word "soul" is quite confusing to me. "Soul" already has a strong existing definition, so to see it being separated from that and used to describe the phenomena in this story is quite jarring. Maybe it's just me though.
"its just easier to think of it as magic" is right lol.
You know, it's a way of describing the story. It just tells the player that for Ai, "magic" and "soul" can even be explained in a scientific way.
 

Fallen Branch

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You should look into giving a background of opposite clarity of the text to the textbox (dark on light and light on dark : here it would be dark , commonly black). It's an easy and sur way to ensure readability. (Many VN add an opacity scale for the textbox in the option menu. Just make sure to not make the text transparent with it.) Outlining text isn't always enough (especially on detailed images).

Also, you should shy away from white screen. They are blinding in the dark. If you must have such scene (like for the mc *mindscape*), you should subtitute the white for light gray or very light gray : it make a world of difference while still looking white.

Finally, if you do a dark scene, never put pitch or near pitch black in it, if the intent is not to conceal something in darkness or subtract part of the image. It kill the details or make them hard to discerne.
 
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Ilhamwawawaw

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I haven't play the game,the description says isekai but from the screenshot the environment seems modern so which, is it just for the prologue?
 
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