VN Ren'Py Don't Leave My Side [v0.1.2a] [Emotional Tokyo]

[goulet1995]

I would suggest running with your original idea, if by the end people are still hating on the opening then consider a rewrite. I won't lie I'm not a huge fan of the opening but that doesn't mean what you already had planned isn't good, like others have said a lot of people get touchy about a possible LI being involved with another character, but maybe it's just better to see how it ends up. I got a feeling that based on your comments there are some good things ahead like with Oliver's sister, also maybe his mom just to pour salt on the wound give the MC some vengence. Let him burn it all to the ground and be king of the ash pile also what about Amanda's sister, mom, aunt... just some food for thought.

i would say the sooner he makes a descision the better less stuff you have to change down the line if a change is made earlier

 

[WastedTalent]

i would say the sooner he makes a descision the better less stuff you have to change down the line if a change is made earlier

Probably, just a couple of people see something they don't like and they have to squish it like a bug... would be nice if just once a dev could make their game and if we like it great if not on to the next. I guess it depends on the dev's goals if they are financial then yeah you are definitely right if it's just a hobby and the $$ isn't the issue then he will find his fan base. Either way unless we want to make our own game/vn we will just have to wait and see what happens.

 

[htakara82]

Ronnie... uh.... a young Rodney Dangerfield? lol

 

[goulet1995]

Probably, just a couple of people see something they don't like and they have to squish it like a bug... would be nice if just once a dev could make their game and if we like it great if not on to the next. I guess it depends on the dev's goals if they are financial then yeah you are definitely right if it's just a hobby and the $$ isn't the issue then he will find his fan base. Either way unless we want to make our own game/vn we will just have to wait and see what happens.

iv never worked on a game or even know where to start i would just think a descision like that would be better if made now than if he releases 3 more updates then wants to change something then you have more content you have to go through to make sure things make sense.

 

[EmotionalTokyo.Games]

You mean she never cheated on the MC. The MC 100% is betrayed and lied too by both his best friend and the love of his life / other best friend. We have no reason to like or care about any of your characters so far, Sadie is the best of them and considering what she has done and says to mc thats not saying much.

If these guys are going to be kept around being "friends" there is no saving this from those that dont like being betrayed and feeling like a loser for letting it happen. For anyone paying attention this game feels exactly like any other NTR/cuck game with a loser mc that is betrayed, lied too and treated like shit by those around him. If this is not how you want the game viewed you did an aweful job showing it with this release.

So far Amanda is a slut, Sadie is a slut, your best friend is a cunt and mc is a fat loser.

Yeah, as Sadies says: "Everybody is a piece of shit".
But don't worry, the MC has a plan.

 

[MAD6999]

I wonder if the developers who put NTR in their games just for people to throw shit at their game and complain have a very strong will or are they masochists?

 

[EmotionalTokyo.Games]

Taking the suggestions into consideration, I decided to add another piece of the plot to this version 0.1. It's an important piece of information that was missing and perhaps this was a big mistake. But like I said, it's okay to not get it right the first time.

The new songs are also ready and will be implemented.
Thanks to everyone who commented. The game will become better with each release, you can be sure.

 

[Negate]

The biggest issue with this game for me is that every single character is a complete and utter shitpiece. Not one redeeming quality to be found. There's no one to root for here...except for maybe an oncoming meteor aimed straight at the MC's house to take out all these garbage humans at the same time.

 

[Larry2000]

Yeah, as Sadies says: "Everybody is a piece of shit".
But don't worry, the MC has a plan.

If everybody is a piece of shit, who are we rooting for?

If this game isn't focused on NTR, but the aspect that tear our MC apart, what is the end goal? Love? Cause as you just said, that's out of the window with these "piece of shits." I think people would like the game a lot more if it was a revenge story. That way we dont' have to care about the characters.

If this is a story based game where we are supposed to care about MC's interactions with the Female characters, it's definitely starting off on the wrong foot.

Maybe I misunderstood something though, so feel free to correct me, but this game isn't turning into a harem or romance any time soon, so my interest is low.

Have a good one and good luck!

 

[Anaktorness]

ntr has some ramifications: in the case of this game will it be netori or netorare?
Will there be incest?

 

[Negate]

ntr has some ramifications: in the case of this game will it be netori or netorare?
Will there be incest?

The MC's LI (not his girlfriend) is apparently in a relationship with another guy we haven't met yet but also secretly banging the MC's best friend.

 

[Digital Pimp]

I hate to say it, but the game as written is no fun to play. I don't like anyone. That's problematic to say the least, as there's no emotional investment. The MC is a pudgy, delusional dumb ass with no self respect or spine. He has no redeeming qualities, he's just there to be walked on. And then you throw that curve ball of a kitchen scene at us...

We should be playing as THAT guy (male best friend). It would make a lot more sense for him to want to throw a monkey wrench in Amanda's traveling/relationship plans. From a narrative/creative standpoint, think of all the doors a simple shift in character could open. Now as a player, we'd have more to do than party planning. We'd have to keep our affair a secret from both Amanda's boyfriend and our best friend.

There would be the backstory of how and why it happened, and Sadie could be there for more than the cliche of wanting her ex back. She could be there to to kill Ronnie's pipe dream and kill his friendship to us as she knows we're messing with Amanda. She could even try blackmailing us etc. This is a game I'd like to play.

Again, as written, Ronnie's wanting to get with Amanda comes off as nothing but wishful thinking on his part. If we can't take the MC seriously, how do you expect us to believe that Amanda would? And as psychotic as Sadie is, I don't see what she sees in him either...

 

[Negate]

I hate to say it, but the game as written is no fun to play. I don't like anyone. That's problematic to say the least, as there's no emotional investment. The MC is a pudgy, delusional dumb ass with no self respect or spine. He has no redeeming qualities, he's just there to be walked on. And then you throw that curve ball of kitchen scene at us...

We should be playing as THAT guy (male best friend). It would make a lot more sense for him to want to throw a monkey wrench in Amanda's traveling/relationship plans. From a narrative/creative standpoint, think of all the doors a simple shift in character could open. Now as a player, we'd have more to do than party planning. We'd have to keep our affair a secret from both Amanda's boyfriend and our best friend.

There would be the backstory of how and why it happened, and Sadie could be there for more than the cliche of wanting her ex back. She could be there to to kill Ronnie's pipe dream and kill his friendship to us as she knows we're messing with Amanda. She could even try blackmailing us etc. This is a game I'd like to play.

Again, as written, Ronnie's wanting to get with Amanda comes off as nothing but wishful thinking on his part. If we can't take the MC seriously, how do you expect us to believe that Amanda would? And as psychotic as Sadie is, I don't see what she sees in him either...

Yeah, as much as I find all the characters in this game unlikable...I would rather play any single one of them than the MC.

 

[Anaktorness]

This is Alice. Ronny's sister. She was very dissatisfied when she found out that her brother was having a party and didn't invite her. She intends to show up to pay a visit and understand the situation. lol

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His sister is very sexy, I hope she is a LI and if MC's mother is introduced in the game in the future (and she is sexy like her sister) I hope she is an LI of MC too

 

[THE KILLER 13]

Paraíba. Nordeste. Legal ver outros brasileiros aqui. TMJ!

I live in the city of Mineiros, in the interior of Goiás

 

[Claudio83]

There will be also a cuckold/sharing path in this game (MC enjoy see his girlfriend/LI with other men) or NTR will be intended only as cheating?

 

[Simpleton173]

I wonder if the developers who put NTR in their games just for people to throw shit at their game and complain have a very strong will or are they masochists?

Or they enjoy their craft and could care less about people melting down. I enjoy witnessing all these people proclaiming their stances (one way or the other).

One suggestion for the developer, let’s eliminate the domestic violence content (man on woman violence or vice versa). We can all agree that it’s just wrong and non value add.

Bless you all for this phenomenal entertainment on this thread.

 

[rereader]

i dont like this (any) level of tragedy, especially in porn games, but the environmental renderings are great.

 

[acondo]

This was really funny to read ... The thread, not the game, the game is pretty bad.

 

[M3lly]

Yeah, as Sadies says: "Everybody is a piece of shit".
But don't worry, the MC has a plan.

Don't be discouraged by the very rude and loud NTR haters. There are many NTR enjoyers out there and they are usually willing to support the game. I will give this game a try when I get off work later and leave a review if I like it.

Thanks for the making the game. I like how the models look. It is quite unique.