VN Ren'Py Abandoned Dream [v0.02] [CN]

[Otherguy2012]

What drugs were involved in your creative process?.....seriously.

Starts out in a dream,but the characters name is dream,but is he really dreaming....yep. Drugs.

 

[Deleted member 4963437]

This thread is so chaotic. Everything is so badly spelt and written and dev is being an ass

Pass

 

[Deleted member 2342269]

This thread is so chaotic. Everything is so badly spelt and written and dev is being an ass

Pass

they are callin me while ok i'm a asshole bruh
today is really not my day i think
have a good day

 

[DrakoGhoul]

Looks like an interesting premise. I'll check it out. I'm curious about the fragments and different powers.

 

[Azsouth]

Dev chill, people are trolls, if they can get you riled up they will, don't take every criticism like it's a knife in the heart, you don't actually need to respond to people you think are insulting you. My only peev is that you can't rename the character, I'm sure with time or getting someone to translate we will eventually be able to tell what is actually happening in the story.

 

[Greebz]

they are callin me while ok i'm a asshole bruh
today is really not my day i think
have a good day

Hey dev, try not to let them get to you.
Question: Do you plan on adding pregnancy, impregnation or breeding?

 

[Thedude715]

Yikes in dire need of a proofreader on this one.

Also needs kinetic novel tag peace.

 

[Deleted member 2342269]

Yikes in dire need of a proofreader on this one.

Also needs kinetic novel tag peace.

I know but I can't hire one

Hey dude it is out of curiosity, you're saying i need a proff reader, but german guy read my vn and said it is not a masterpiece writing buthe understands and evn donated a good amount (I'm not lying) can you tell me why you think it need proofreading like i didn't understand, what to what kind of English do i use ?
can you please answer these questions

 

[Deleted member 2342269]

Dev chill, people are trolls, if they can get you riled up they will, don't take every criticism like it's a knife in the heart, you don't actually need to respond to people you think are insulting you. My only peev is that you can't rename the character, I'm sure with time or getting someone to translate we will eventually be able to tell what is actually happening in the story.

Well in this way i need to rename the story to make players to rename (I will think about it and thanks for some good words)

 

[AlisaB]

Damn, dev getting bullied
The criticism may be a bit harsh, but the quality of English, judging by the (pre-fix) overview and dev's replies, is hilarious - it's like bad MTL on shrooms.

Dev, you absolutely cannot build an intricate plot with this level of fluency in English. Maybe use an AI to write it for you or something...

 

[Thedude715]

I know but I can't hire one

Hey dude it is out of curiosity, you're saying i need a proff reader, but german guy read my vn and said it is not a masterpiece writing buthe understands and evn donated a good amount (I'm not lying) can you tell me why you think it need proofreading like i didn't understand, what to what kind of English do i use ?
can you please answer these questions

The structure building of the sentences are really bad, spelling is off.... and so on, nothing personal but in short going by the novel and your replies on here you are just not good enough at english to make a visual novel in english whitout assistance.

To make it clear I have no problem with the story as you seem to have misinterpreted me as saying.
Make whatever story you want.

 

[qljrnt6jc4eh2]

4 pages of text and chat and still no review? Come on guys. Give yourself a little push, I'm curious.

 

[Deleted member 2342269]

4 pages of text and chat and still no review? Come on guys. Give yourself a little push, I'm curious.

why don't you give one, Then. I too curious to see if this vn can gain audience

 

[qljrnt6jc4eh2]

why don't you give one, Then. I too curious to see if this vn can gain audience

Simply because I did not play it. And my guess is that at least 3/5 ppl participating in this thread are talking about ingame stuff, because they did play that game already. Got it?

 

[VN..reader]

seriously... not sure if this is made by 13 yr old who is a genius, but embedded deeply in "TODAY's" social culture, or a Much Older , child, that is trying to come out of his shell. he's doing a smashing good job of putting together what is starting to be a well written, clever, dare i say Original story. the graghics are new the renders are good. and the Use of the "Superpowers" tag may be the best yet in these kind of VN's
However, the editing is Bad...SO Bad that it is almost funny. Translation . . Engrish is no work here, it is so bad. i had to pause and reread Many lines while looking at the scene so i could get it. and i did. but. . . i'm a boomer. but i don't think i'm alone in this. there is So very much that i like about this, that i really want you to succeed at this. the More Cultured of us PERV's is that we don't give up on one of our own.

 

[Deleted member 2342269]

hey bro did you try the patch (patch is solely for English) I think you should try the patch (If you think an AI do a good working in writing dialogue you should try this patch and I"M 13 or not old I just come into my adult age. )

 

[VN..reader]

hey bro did you try the patch (patch is solely for English) I think you should try the patch (If you think an AI do a good working in writing dialogue you should try this patch and I"M 13 or not old I just come into my adult age. )

applying patch for play-thru 2 ...

 

[rafa30]

First girl
More...
I like

 

[Tyxo]

Will be there android port?

 

[Beerus]

wtf just made by whole work look like nothing. It is my fault to upload the game here, one guys wants incest. I have tio make it for him otherwise he will I'm bad
otherwise I'm bad guy.

other guy tell fake rumours game is taking 99% cpu. if I talk about it I'm a asshole and child throwing a tantrum for any criticism

bro in this thread in this fucking thread 70% people talking about incest remaining 20 percent fake comment and 5 percent are the supporter of fake comments

I can't talk
u can't say anything
if I talk I'm the bad guy.

Thanks for the warm welcome. This website is going is insane every day, and I caught up in one of the day

bro in this thread in this fucking thread 70% people talking about incest remaining 20 percent fake comment and 5 percent are the supporter of fake comments

Okay, first 70%...
+ another 20%... Okay, that's 90%, uh huh...
+ a final 5%, putting us at 95%...

Uh, dev, did the remaining 5% get lost in translation, like seemingly everything else?