VN Ren'Py Driftborne [Ep.1] [Jamleng Games]

[Black Orchid]

this is amazing for a first relase and the mc actually looks good for a change. new all we need is the planned tags cause the previous game doesn't inspire confidence in me.

 

[Shabrani_Goudou]

How does a guy from ancient times know what a camera is or even how to drive a car?

Well he's immortal, not a time traveler. So obviously he lives in current times.

 

[Rayne]

this is amazing for a first relase and the mc actually looks good for a change. new all we need is the planned tags cause the previous game doesn't inspire confidence in me.

Well, in the last game, as I saw, all the controversial tags were easily avoided, and if something controversial is planned for this game, then most likely it will be the same, but I would really like to know the future tags.

 

[Greebz]

Looks fantastically outstanding. Will there be some pregnancy and breeding content in the future?

 

[desmosome]

I'd rather not waste my time when there are flashing warning signals against doing so. It doesn't even have incest to tempt me to try it.



IDK if you're the main writer yourself. If not, you should double check what your writers are doing, because the syntax in the character cards screams AI. I know some people like to draft things with AI and then edit it afterwards; but if you're not hyper-sensitive to syntax the clear markers in the writing will remain.

If it was all written by humans, then damn, your writers spend so much time reading AI content that they've started to imitate it themselves, which would be a hell of a feat!

EDIT: Also WTF is up with the reviews? They are almost identical... Hmmm...

As soon as I read "Jayne doesn't just enter scenes, she takes them over," I had my suspicions. We definitely can't know for sure just from these LLM "vibes," but it does seem like the character cards could be AI generated. Not interested enough to delve into the actual writing of the game to look for more clues.

To be fair, I don't think LLM assisted writing is inherently a bad thing. Rather have this than the Engrish of people that can barely speak the language.

 

[FakeWuxia]

Just played through and impressed for a first play, can't wait till it gets a few updates and more content.

 

[Rayne]

EDIT: Also WTF is up with the reviews? They are almost identical... Hmmm...

Honestly, I also noticed and it feels like it was written by one person or AI.

 

[yoyomistro]

As soon as I read "Jayne doesn't just enter scenes, she takes them over," I had my suspicions. We definitely can't know for sure just from these LLM "vibes," but it does seem like the character cards could be AI generated. Not interested enough to delve into the actual writing of the game to look for more clues.

To be fair, I don't think LLM assisted writing is inherently a bad thing. Rather have this than the Engrish of people that can barely speak the language.

I feel that it is a problem. Language use is a base skill that can convey deficiencies in other areas. If there's an ESL issue, you can typically glean the degree of the problem from the syntax, and how it relates to the author's original language. Not saying that most people will do that, but Engrish hasn't often been a barrier for me (very much speaking for myself here, lol) getting into someone's work.

You can farm so much of the process of game/VN creation to AI these days in a way that papers over whether you're skilled in any aspect of the work or not that someone wastes a ton of time deciphering deficiencies that would have been immediately apparent absent the AI facade.

Besides that, I'm interested in seeing work that comes directly from someone's imagination and is informed by their skills and experiences. AI is anything but that, so I have an opposition to it from that front as well.

I understand that a lot of people don't care whether something is AI generated or not, but it feels like such a violation of the process of intellectual property and artistic ownership that I feel using it without full disclosure as to every aspect of its use in your work is no better than full plagiarism.

EDIT: There will be no AI content in the game, all AI elements in initial synopsis were due to leaks and not from the dev.

 

[rspkers]

I honestly like the idea of this story, but why is the MC so frustratingly inept? Seems like he's a doofus being pushed around by literally anyone when he's supposed to be some immortal that should be quite familiar with surviving and how the world works. Why does he have zero instinct? The amount of mistakes he keeps making throughout the story as well as how easily people get the better of him is so annoying. It's like he has zero awareness of his surroundings, but I'm supposed to believe he's got all this experience over multiple hundreds or thousands of years of being alive? Or maybe it's supposed to be femdom centric with the typical flavor of male protagonist for those sorts of games? The way he handled that officer, for example, was so disappointing.

In short, it's hard to take the MC seriously as of right now because he keeps getting his ass handed to him in every single way when his backstory suggests that he really shouldn't be this dumb.

As an aside, I agree with everyone saying the writing is very clearly AI or at least very heavily edited by AI. If you're actually paying someone to do this (and it's not just you using chatgpt while pretending to have a team ) then you might want to have a word with your writer.

 

[ImariKurumi]

Guess this gonna a mix of Monk or The Mentalist for the criminal forensics aspect and The Old Guard for the immortality plot. I'm all up for it. I hope dev has some background in Forensic Science, won't want the crime solving part to disappoint. VN looks real good so far.

But what's up with the storyboard? Some parts it feels like a scene or a couple of dialogue were missing in the writing.

 

[AnyName'llDo]

I like the spam message on your phone when you first open it. Made me laugh aloud.

 

[duckydoodoo]

so an immortal that runs around like a crackhead and easily gets bullied by, well everyone. idk, suspension of disbelief says even an idiot after dying a few times and living in the modern world knows to take a minute and make a plan. everything he does is reaction. to top it all off he is obviously running from something yet keeps going to places he has been before. not like one time things, but places he calls home, meaning he had spent considerable amount of time there.

i felt a lot of cringe reading this, and seriously considering taking my shot at ufc, cause ive now leveled my face palm technique to SSS tier

 

[Allan Trumbull]

Harem & malayalam upcoming ? (I hope yes)

Ntr & fem dom upcoming ? (I hope not)

 

[Raksha17]

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Leaving content direction open to polls always sounds like potential disaster to me.
I believe a dev (team) should decide what they enjoy creating and communicate that.
Feedback can then tell them if their intention comes across to their players.
Polls can be used for cosmetic things.

 

[Ragnar]

Everyone says the crime was at night.
Renders are of a sunny day.
Fix the renders or change the text because that kind of thing breaks inmersion.

 

[Jamleng]

Everyone says the crime was at night.
Renders are of a sunny day.
Fix the renders or change the text because that kind of thing breaks inmersion.

My apologies, should be fixed in the following version + a bunch of other stuff that was reported.
If there is some text, a render or anything else that feels out of place or is incorrect please let me know where so I can solve the problem.

PC:

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MAC:

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Android:

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Also, for everyone else:
This game(beta) should not have been up yet. I had plans to upload this game myself later this week as an official release with all the needed information.

Instead someone uploaded the (beta) game on F95 2 hours after the early release came out. The thread was released with a wrong banner that doesn't fit, a strange AI summary not written by me, and promotional teaser character templates that should not have been on this page to begin as they're not made for that purpose nor do they belong in the dev notes.

Xo already explained the rest, game was in development for about a year with careful planning and lots of time and money invested in assets, graphics cards etc. Also the learning curve for DAZ is quite high. Making this stuff is not easy.

I wanted to do something completely different after working on the old game for like 4.5 years, no AI used there. I think it turned out pretty awesome and it should only get better from here since the hardest work has already been done as in character creation, world building, story setups, learning the tools, gui, ui stuff and so fort.

I noticed some complaints about the story and how certain things don't make sense but one has to keep in mind that it's told over multiple seasons. It's quite far planned out and you're not given all the details in the first episode. It takes time to get a deeper understanding of the how's and why's. If I were to spoil everything now, it kinda beats the purpose of making a story based VN.

As for the game? No AI was used. Other than that, constructed feedback is very valuable so please shoot. If you find any bugs, let me know so I can fix them. All in all, I hope you guys will enjoy the game, it was a loooot of work. Have fun!

Cheers!

 

[Lady Lydia]

Guess this gonna a mix of Monk or The Mentalist for the criminal forensics aspect and The Old Guard for the immortality plot. I'm all up for it. I hope dev has some background in Forensic Science, won't want the crime solving part to disappoint. VN looks real good so far.

But what's up with the storyboard? Some parts it feels like a scene or a couple of dialogue were missing in the writing.

Their is a far simpler example to compare it with, namely Lucifer, a supernatural detective story with the MC being a consultant for the cops. I was thinking the MC was a vampire, considering their glowing eyes, the people seemingly hunting him and his paramour back in the Middle Ages, but considering we seem him roaming around during the day and no blood being consumed, its obviously meant to be a weird derivative between a vampire and an immortal.

Now for what many people mentioned, the MC's incredulous lack of skills yet at the same time him being a very skilled detective, its ridiculous, the way he get manhandled by other characters, YET is exceedingly competent within a very limited sphere of skill, considering he lived for hundreds if not a thousand years doesn't make sense. I mean I get he want to look fairly harmless to the cops, sure, but his 'daughter' just easily take him down? What is even the point, and why? If he has greedy immortals after him they could do better than target their own for money, in particular one like him that doesn't seem particularly that wealthy even if he got some gold ingots, I thought at first it might be a group akin to the Watchers from BTVS, but considering they employ people like him mean its not, if its personal what could he have done so terrible that other of his kind get offended about? I like the concept but I feel in many ways the execution is lackluster.

I assume the lady in red is his ancient paramour that got shot in the face in the Middle Ages, why she is hunting him doesn't really make sense, did he leave after discovering what she was? You'd expect she'd overlook him having a freak out about it and try to more nicely reclaim him. Like I said overall I find the concept interesting, but the story is very questionable in quality. Their are three sorts of Devs making games that we find here, those that are good at graphic design, those that are good at writing and those that are good at programming. I'd say this Dev is on the graphic design side, the characters look great, but the story is meh, I can see the potential, but it was poorly put into motion, and the programming is what you'd expect of a typical Ren'Py game.

 

[yoyomistro]

My apologies, should be fixed in the following version + a bunch of other stuff that was reported.
If there is some text, a render or anything else that feels out of place or is incorrect please let me know where so I can solve the problem.

PC:

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MAC:

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Android:

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Also, for everyone else:
This game(beta) should not have been up yet. I had plans to upload this game myself later this week as an official release with all the needed information.

Instead someone uploaded the (beta) game on F95 2 hours after the early release came out. The thread was released with a wrong banner that doesn't fit, a strange AI summary not written by me, and promotional teaser character templates that should not have been on this page to begin as they're not made for that purpose nor do they belong in the dev notes.

Xo already explained the rest, game was in development for about a year with careful planning and lots of time and money invested in assets, graphics cards etc. Also the learning curve for DAZ is quite high. Making this stuff is not easy.

I wanted to do something completely different after working on the old game for like 4.5 years, no AI used there. I think it turned out pretty awesome and it should only get better from here since the hardest work has already been done as in character creation, world building, story setups, learning the tools, gui, ui stuff and so fort.

I noticed some complaints about the story and how certain things don't make sense but one has to keep in mind that it's told over multiple seasons. It's quite far planned out and you're not given all the details in the first episode. It takes time to get a deeper understanding of the how's and why's. If I were to spoil everything now, it kinda beats the purpose of making a story based VN.

As for the game? No AI was used. Other than that, constructed feedback is very valuable so please shoot. If you find any bugs, let me know so I can fix them. All in all, I hope you guys will enjoy the game, it was a loooot of work. Have fun!

Cheers!

Thanks for the fixes and clarification. Sorry an incomplete private build got leaked, along with the AI synopsis/content. Understandably that'd be upsetting and potentially negative for the game's reception. Good luck on the new project, I'll be sure to check it out sometime!

 

[fitty543]

i feel like the bio doesnt tell me anything about the game lol. is there fights? is the mc strong? thats what i need to know beforehand

 

[Ragnar]

My apologies, should be fixed in the following version + a bunch of other stuff that was reported.
If there is some text, a render or anything else that feels out of place or is incorrect please let me know where so I can solve the problem.

PC:

You must be registered to see the links

MAC:

You must be registered to see the links

Android:

You must be registered to see the links

Also, for everyone else:
This game(beta) should not have been up yet. I had plans to upload this game myself later this week as an official release with all the needed information.

Instead someone uploaded the (beta) game on F95 2 hours after the early release came out. The thread was released with a wrong banner that doesn't fit, a strange AI summary not written by me, and promotional teaser character templates that should not have been on this page to begin as they're not made for that purpose nor do they belong in the dev notes.

Xo already explained the rest, game was in development for about a year with careful planning and lots of time and money invested in assets, graphics cards etc. Also the learning curve for DAZ is quite high. Making this stuff is not easy.

I wanted to do something completely different after working on the old game for like 4.5 years, no AI used there. I think it turned out pretty awesome and it should only get better from here since the hardest work has already been done as in character creation, world building, story setups, learning the tools, gui, ui stuff and so fort.

I noticed some complaints about the story and how certain things don't make sense but one has to keep in mind that it's told over multiple seasons. It's quite far planned out and you're not given all the details in the first episode. It takes time to get a deeper understanding of the how's and why's. If I were to spoil everything now, it kinda beats the purpose of making a story based VN.

As for the game? No AI was used. Other than that, constructed feedback is very valuable so please shoot. If you find any bugs, let me know so I can fix them. All in all, I hope you guys will enjoy the game, it was a loooot of work. Have fun!

Cheers!

Idk if this has been reported already but when you find the body a Molina render shows before her scene.
Beside some minor bug or inconsistencies, like the MC carrying his bags around, the girls look good and the story is engaging.