- Jan 24, 2018
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Hey Bro,Sorry, but it's not top priority right now. I've already had my share of headaches with the current one
Check out my review above if you want to see my overall thoughts. The following will be a lot of constructive criticism:
Cum as a stand-in for mana: absolutely love this idea! Expand on this pls
The text is a bit too small and too widely spread to lead to comfortable reading. (Using a 2.5k monitor on fullscreen with the .exe). Try making the text bigger, bolder, and maybe laying it out in columns?
Having sounds and images would obviously be preferable. I think 30 minutes of google searching could reveal a royalty free library for generic fantasy sounds for SEs and maybe 1-2 music tracks.
For Moaning, slapping, and clapping, I would just rip the sounds from a few porn videos and play them on loop.
For images, I would go on a booru and borrow a bunch of images. Tag the artists somewhere in your credits and leave a link for them to contact you if they want their art removed.
Add a self-inspection tab somewhere. I want to see the MC described moment-to-moment. Also, I still don't know her age, level of fitness, measurements, facial expressions, skin clarity and color, hairstyle and pubic hair style, sexual organs shape and size, and so on.