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thanks for all the feed back! I love getting specific suggestions! I will definitely change the ‘thoughts’ to all italics.My first impression was how quiet the game was. Music or ambience would add so much to the atmosphere, so I'd probably do that first. SFX can be added later.
Some of Christine's fingering animations were smooth, so nice job there. What tool do you use for animation? And what tool did you use to draw the cum?
For the names, I'd suggest using Christine instead of Christine's Thoughts, and just use italics every time she's thinking. It would be smoother that way.
I never played Midlife Crisis so I don't know if there was choices in the game, but I think your game could improve a lot with choices. Here are some examples I quickly came up with. Choosing to:
- Tell Sarah to be quiet if she's talking too loudly
- Talk loudly to make sure Steve hears
- Touch his dick at the hotel
- Take off your top at the hotel
- Move closer to the balcony to hear better
- Taste the cum or not
- Walk in front of Steve at the pool
Ultimately, these choices would improve or reduce the player's chances of getting with Steve or how much they can do with Steve. Or possibly get with Sarah as well. There are so many ways to put players in a situation where they risk getting a negative response from Sarah or Steve. It would create tension and help players get invested in the story by letting them decide what to do next.
Most of the writing is ok, you probably just need an editor and maybe a game designer to help plan out the scene choices.
I also hit an error, so I attached the error log. I was still able to continue after clicking a few times.
edit : done chapters 1&2 edits for the italics. Took 45 min! Not looking forward to doing rest of game. hopefully it helps when I post next update.
I can look at adding more choices, but I am not sure I would be so great at the coding to make sure that I don’t keep referencing things the player chose not to occur. I am planing to have a few choices in the next short update. But they are more like which character does what with Steve and where a cum shot goes.
animation is just done with daz and then displaying individual images in renpy. If you have a text editor you can check them out in the animation.rpy file.
the cum is a daz resource. I can link it when I am back at my rig.
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