Hello.
For an Intro, it already contains material and has a good start of building the story and lore of the world surrounding the MC.
I think that the introduction of an archenemy necromancer would be interesting, a kind of final boss that will only emerge towards the end of the story, but that during the adventure will indirectly demonstrate itself to our heroes through actions and events hostile to us.
As it is also a harem story, it could, for a change from 95 percent of the stories here, have a chubby girl, and I'm not talking about a girl with good hips and good breasts, but then she's skinny in other places on her body. ... im talking about a really fat cutie... Maybe a dwarf girl, or something.
Love games with realistic girl bodies.
Hope to see more content soon, as this looks promising with excellent images, and a good start to the story.
Compliments.