VN Ren'Py Abandoned Faded Bonds [v0.3] [Whispering Studios]

[herrbertold]

I've barely started this game, but already I have to say the Dev needs to invest in a native English speaking proof reader. There are far to many gramatical errors. Cases where the wrong word is in place of the actual word. Which is something you get with a lot of the auto correct programs (last time I checked at least). Which leads to a constant break in immersion. Other than that I don't have any other comments so far, but then again I am just barely starting the game (Valery's 1st tennis match with MC)

And yes, I realize my own statement here probably has a bunch of gramatical and spelling errors, lol

 

[Belnick]

loli? that is what many 18 look here lol

 

[FatYoda]

is the game supposed to end mid scene with the redhead? i'm thinking not and it's a bug somehow.

 

[TsubameYui]

is the game supposed to end mid scene with the redhead? i'm thinking not and it's a bug somehow.

That is how it's meant to end. Just checked the script file.

 

[Pax Draconis]

loli? that is what many 18 look here lol

Uh, yeah you can get a driver's license at 16

 

[Spike81]

Virus Free?

 

[Prj3tC]

Wow! The floating characters I can understand, but floating pubes? That's new!

 

[YogSothoth1982]

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Uh, yeah you can get a driver's license at 16

I guess it depends on the country, here you need 18.

 

[NeoEros]

There're too many grammatical mistakes. I can tolerate most of them but I can't stand when the pronouns are misused. It makes the dialogues really confusing to read.

 

[guardianfather]

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Uh, yeah you can get a driver's license at 16

Not if you are 15.

 

[Ozygator]

The incest focus harem game I like most is SSP. The incest relationship the Dev described in that game is
intoxicating.

Whats SSP?

 

[Bobber Tail]

Leaving things like "Nervous" and other explainers in the sentences is bad form. The story has a lot of attitudes without understanding where they come from, thus making us out of depths with the story. It's like walking into the middle of a movie.

 

[Spike81]

Not if you are 15.

In The US you can have Drivers Licence From age 15

 

[molva]

Whats SSP?

Such a Sharp Pain. A loli game, which was banned here.

 

[Osider]

Love those kind rework when it's make the game better, we can add this one in "successfully reborn"

 

[Ashira13]

I guess it depends on the country, here you need 18.

and you can have sex at 16

 

[YogSothoth1982]

and you can have sex at 16

From the age of 16 you can have sex with an adult and have an abortion without parental consent. Creating responsible young people.

 

[Grmpybear]

and you can have sex at 16

Depends on what state you're in.

 

[BigJoe644]

Ending the update at the cafe, after the tennis match would've been more ideal.

 

[Oberlix]

What else should I write, that's not progress, you could have saved yourself the upload, well, like with many games, you have to wait at least half a year, if not longer, to see real progress