Man looking at ya'll criticise it so hatefully makes me kinda want to play to see how bad it is
I mean, Kinetic Novel exists where you don't really interact with the game, and I don't see why it's wrong if the dev wanna self-insert, as long as the porn is good.
Is it biased cuz the personality of the dev is not exactly likeable, or the game is really cringe to be enjoyed?
Iunno there's honestly not a lot of porn in it so I wouldn't want to give you the wrong impression, its more romance than erotica for most of the story but that's fine with me, I have no criticisms of the character designs either I think they have a lot of appeal to them. The story is pretty cheesy and the prose are not always particularly inspired but I don't mind a cheesy romance from time to time. Its been said the plot is very much a derivative of Adastra with the caveat that the story for FBtW was apparently penned before Adastra came out and the two dev's seem to be friends and there doesn't appear to be any bad blood between them. I also have nothing against kinetic vn either, but I would have to agree that there are times that the MC hasn't been the most likeable protagonist and I can't deny the option to have him behave differently in certain scenarios would have been greatly appreciated.
Certainly there is nothing wrong with writing a self-insert character but from what I understand about creative writing its generally seen as sort of a lack of sophistication. I suppose the problem is when people write self-insert characters they often aren't able to self-reflect accurately enough to portray themselves as a fully fleshed out character. They tend to feel very superficial if you can't take a good look in the mirror and see who you really are. Personally, I also find when the protagonist in particular is a self-insert, and the reader becomes aware of that; it begins to stand in the way of your reader forming an emotional connection with your protagonist and by extension your story.
Again nothing inherently wrong with that, its your story. Writing is hard, if being the main character is what makes it worth it for you then by all means its better than not writing at all. I'm just saying it does have an effect on the reader's experience. Especially in a medium that actually allows you to name the character. To have the author slowly erase the small amount of agency you do have in the story and replace it with their own feels very weird. Since I imagine some non-zero number of people started the game naming the protagonist after themselves. It seems kinda selfish and unnecessary to take that away from them.
And by unnecessary I mean the whole stuff about the name is very contrived. It just so happens in the wolf's language the author's name "Caelan" means "tiny" which I'm sure the author's biases about themselves played no part in. So the wolf man calls him Caelan as a nickname. At this point the MC has slowly decided that he doesn't like his actual name anymore and wants to be called just Caelan now. I was already cringing at making your name mean tiny in the made up language in your story but now the character has canonically taken your name instead of the name your reader gave them because he likes it better lol
anyway I've said way too much I hope I made a point somewhere lol
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