Egris
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Have not played yet. But I like women of all shapes and sizes. Only thing is I hate nose rings. But because of it being a guy stealing from his bully, instead of the usual weak guy gets owned and everything taken from him. I will give it a shot.
Overlord070
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Milf looks a little "rough" but I'll take any netori at this point.
Is the netorare a misstag or is there both netori and netorare in this one?
Is the netorare a misstag or is there both netori and netorare in this one?
Sinxflavio2
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Shouldn't use netorare for a netori focus. Pretty different, and can easily kill off many interested.
I know it says it's a netori story in the overview, but is there any actual netorare in the game or does it just have the netorare tag because that's the closest tag this sites lacking tag system has to netori?
Woman with nose rings are very off-putting, seriously I don't know how you can jerk off to that. Anyway Dev if you could get rid of the nose rings for the love interests that would be great instead put it on an a non love interest just so we can hate the character more, or better yet put it on the MC's Bully. That would be really funny....
Finally some flesh on the bones. Not too much, not too little the perfect amount of chub. I kinda like the artstyle, needs a lil fine tuning tho but for a pilot its more than enough. haven't played the game yet so cant say much.
edit: as i said the art needs a lil revamping, also the dialogue needs attention. but HOLY HELL THE ASSES ARE PHAT AND THE THIGHS ARE THICC. I love it
edit: as i said the art needs a lil revamping, also the dialogue needs attention. but HOLY HELL THE ASSES ARE PHAT AND THE THIGHS ARE THICC. I love it
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BangB420
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Just say you get no pussy and move on
NoHands
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I think it's an issue of the site itself. There's no way to differentiate Netorare from Netori, you can only put 'NTR' as a blanket term even if it's strictly Netori.
The "Cheating" tag is the Netori tag. The "Netorare" tag is for netorare, not netori.
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Cesco
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Obviously I don't know your plan or what your final script looks like, but I honestly think it could use a little restructuring in the beginning. I get that you wanted to blow your load right off the bat and reveal to the player "Hey! Lucia is a murder accomplice"(along with the sneak peek in the future of this game). But that choice deflated any potential story-drama-tension you had in us finding out that "mystery." And along with that deflates any interest in potential supporters- you need that HOOK.
Or you can take what I say with a grain of salt.
My suggestion, start the story with the kid walking up the door, gives his little narration of his tragic past couple of days have been. Describe the Lucia and her family, how both her son and father are assholes, yet Lucia is a nice and warm presence in his life at school. But when he enters the house, it's the complete opposite. Lucia is cold and avoidant, while Kenta is the one being all nice and approachable. Player will be like that's not what I was expecting, what are they hiding?...I'm sure you see where I'm going with this.
On a technical level, I think you just gotta be consistent on the "who's who" when talking and putting their name on top of the dialogue. I see you started it, then just gave up halfway through. You can either be consistent with the naming, or just drop it all together.
Or you can take what I say with a grain of salt.
My suggestion, start the story with the kid walking up the door, gives his little narration of his tragic past couple of days have been. Describe the Lucia and her family, how both her son and father are assholes, yet Lucia is a nice and warm presence in his life at school. But when he enters the house, it's the complete opposite. Lucia is cold and avoidant, while Kenta is the one being all nice and approachable. Player will be like
that's not what I was expecting, what are they hiding?...I'm sure you see where I'm going with this.On a technical level, I think you just gotta be consistent on the "who's who" when talking and putting their name on top of the dialogue. I see you started it, then just gave up halfway through. You can either be consistent with the naming, or just drop it all together.
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HylTin
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Well... This one is... something I guess... Anyway good luck to the Dev.....
There is not a tag for netori nor for BBW (I wished there were) in this site. I tried to add it but I can't add or create new tags for this website
That's why I put netorare, that closest to netori. Although the story and POV is different