Skep-tiker
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Yup Enjoyed it.. Love them already, great connections with some deep saddness. Great mix. Love to see how this will progress.
Izzy would say:
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To be fair you have only seen a glimpse of her past. Its ok if its a no for you though. Thats why youll have the power of that choice.
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I snorted out loudYup Enjoyed it.. Love them already, great connections with some deep saddness. Great mix. Love to see how this will progress.
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A glimpse ? so it's more than than sex drug and alcool at 16 years old ? Hum what choice ? i can't even say no in the cabin ...
Or it was the easy sex scene for an introduction to the game.
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Shes more then the sex history and its not like she was out doing gangbangs. It was with her boyfriend only, not slutting around. I cant say more then that. She had a reason for her actions but not time for that reveal yet. Her sex scenes are not over but yes they will happen kinetic like. Not trying to spoil anything but im not gonna hide that fact. Just being transparent and she is an active LI.
The transitions in the prologue have the name Alex baked in them instead of what we choose as the MC's name, FYI.
Also, probably need to do a text search for the word "then" and change most of them to "than". Some other words that won't trip a spellchecker need to be looked at as well since they are used incorrectly, i.e. were instead of where.
Also, Izzy's right breast may be etherial:
There should be no apostrophe in the word daughters here:
And immediately after that this:
Guess you need to search for all the apostrophes and double check them, too.
One other thing. Emilia's father's name is Denise. It is very rare that that would be a man's name in English. The closest analogue to that name would be Dennis.
Also, probably need to do a text search for the word "then" and change most of them to "than". Some other words that won't trip a spellchecker need to be looked at as well since they are used incorrectly, i.e. were instead of where.
Also, Izzy's right breast may be etherial:
There should be no apostrophe in the word daughters here:
And immediately after that this:
Guess you need to search for all the apostrophes and double check them, too.
One other thing. Emilia's father's name is Denise. It is very rare that that would be a man's name in English. The closest analogue to that name would be Dennis.
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i spotted that render and the title card's after i had already released. the title card's were made before i added in the name change and forgot i had hard baked the name into them.
I was also hoping nobody would notice that arm through tiddy haha. it will be re-rendered for new releases. along with that left hand finger going into the shirt.
also i am trying to be better with apostrophes. just got a beta tester on board to check behind my stupid self.
I have a learning disability and am very aware that some grammar rules will continue to haunt my brain. I'm doing my best.
With the apostrophes a simple trick is to remove them all and then let a spellchecker catch what is wrong. It doesn't help with possessives, but them missing in this case would be preferable and less jarring for a reader than all the extras that are there now. But, yeah, getting a beta tester to proofread will help a lot, especially if they are a native English speaker.
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frogbert
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also you don't need a two-legged spellchecker just use ai
literally "check my renpy code for bugs and spelling/grammar in the string literals" and just paste the whole file in
and no you don't have to add an AI tag just b/c you spell/grammar/bug check with it
though if you add "and change my writing to sound like ernest hemingway" it might idk
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I cant say its a full no but i dont exactly wanna broadcast it openly if i do it later. Keeping the patreon gods in check before they crash my account. Im debating it. Think most devs just let it slip and get in trouble that way cause there is no way patreon is paying people to play all these games. Would lock me out of steam though if i ever wanted it to go up there.twins without lesbian incest always makes me sad
totally understandable it`s a very fine line at the moment, one slip and everything you worked so hard on is gone
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Am i the only one who wants to see the detective make a reappearance?
Anyway not a bad first chapter overall. Most issues are nit picks, grammar and so forth. I like all the female characters. Different body types and personalities to make them stand out.
Looking forward to chapter 2.
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Anyway not a bad first chapter overall. Most issues are nit picks, grammar and so forth. I like all the female characters. Different body types and personalities to make them stand out.
Looking forward to chapter 2.
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She will. Her name entry has been in my character scripts since before i started rendering the prologue. Fun fact she was originally supposed to be named isabella and izzy was an Irene in the 1st script version. At least... few more appearances if i remember my head script