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To me the writing is very important in VNs, even more than visuals some times. Harem games get boring after some time because you're always doing the same thing. Just the magic cock attracting women like light attracts moths. In those games it doesn't matter how many animations or sex positions you have because real porn will be always better for what you're trying to do. FiN writing can vary depending on your choices but it's pretty good for an erotic vn.
 
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Personally I see it as a slife of life,has its premise to advance the characters and some subplots, but many slice of life series also have some arcs full of plot and that does not mean that they stop being slice of life.
The characters and the stories are under no pressure to go anywhere in a slice-of-life and the stories also tend to be more basic & relatable stuff. We definitely have scenes with some slice-of-life here, but this story's main plot is crime, corruption, & conspiracy interwoven with vulnerable women where our MC is positioned to make defining moral & personal decisions around them. It's thrusting forward as we go, and by the end, it'll all come together and all plot points will be closed. Maybe I'm missing something, but I wouldn't consider that slice-of-life personally.

Not gonna lie i'm glad Neon plans to do shorter sex scenes , as I find sex scenes tend to be somewhat boring to me depending on the scene and game of course. But I see a decent amount of sex scenes that are prolonged especially with too much dialogue or making the MC cum twice, which bores me to death. It has to be a really hot scenario because of the context or the scene or LI has to feel a bit special to me where I want it actually be longer.
Shorter scenes in the future will make sense, but in the meantime, I love this game's scene length. It gives them a meaty girth and there's a lot of choices interspersed for personal tastes or simply for variety. Great erotic introductions for the various LIs and gives great replay value.
 
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Shorter scenes in the future will make sense, but in the meantime, I love this game's scene length. It gives them a meaty girth and there's a lot of choices interspersed for personal tastes or simply for variety. Great erotic introductions for the various LIs and gives great replay value.
yeah the scenes in this never felt to long to begin with tbh . In fact I really loved how long the Ashe one was during the date. Not to long but really erotic. ( both scenes). Neon is one of the few devs that can pull of longer sex scenes if im being honest and won't feel bored. But in generally usually I just think to my self I want to get back to the story haha.
 

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As always, I appreciate that people worry I'll up and abandon this project. But, I have no such intentions.

I know I add a bunch of characters, but I honestly just see it as more toys to play with if I want to, and if I don't.. I won't! There's obviously the core cast of love interests, and I have plans for how they connect to each other, and the larger plot bubbling in the background.. But, sometimes a character is just there because I want to do a fun little scene. Blizzy and Cutiedoll are in that vein. I liked the idea of Guy being accosted by two idiots, and based on his mood, having it go in very different ways. Being able to respond kindly, curtly, or angrily -- or if you're already in a bad mood, getting no real choice in the matter.

I also believe that, if you're going to have a minor character in a porn game.. Make them a hot lady. Kara the hotel owner from the last chapter is an example of this. I could have Guy just pull up to the hotel, and then cut to him and Risa in the room. Hell, I could just cut from Guy deciding to take her to the hotel, to them being in the room. But, I wanted to do a little scene where for once, someone is completely unfamiliar with Guy's local fame, and therefore entirely unimpressed with him. And since I'm doing that, let's make her a hot lady (literally, ba-dum-tssh).

And if I decide I want to do a little self-contained chapter where a small business owner realizes a multi-millionaire was staying in her hotel, and approaches him for a grant to fix up her place.. Well, I've got this character ready for sexy fun-times.

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We're eventually going to get to a point where the love interests don't really need such complicated sex scenes. That drastically speeds things up on my end, and allows me to focus on more story stuff. Mason gets another BJ scene in the next update, and it's a pretty sparse 40ish renders. Compare that to his first one, which was 100+. Ashe's fucked-over-the-table scene? That's 28 renders for the longest variation, as opposed to 130+ for her long sex scene in the same update.

My intentions are that, as the game progresses and I don't need to do such long sex scenes, I'll be able to focus on moving the story along at a faster clip. So, rather than things getting more complicated, they actually get a bit simpler. This is kind of modeled on the way sex scenes work in most erotic novels -- the first scene is always a big deal. After that, it's more like.. "And then they fucked!"

Once all the characters are at their, "And then they fucked!" stage (currently Nicki, Ashe, and Risa are there, and Mason will be after next update) I'll be able to focus more on interesting little events that depend on your relationship with a character. Threesomes, kink content, and of course the main narrative of sexual exploitation and Guy trying to outmaneuver an antagonist.

All that said -- this is still the first game I've done. I'll mess up here and there, and overextend myself. But, I think I'm already doing better than many novice devs.



So, one thing I learned over time is that I really need to be tagging like.. Every mildly consequential decision with a variable. For the Ashe roleplay scene, I kind of just intended for it to initially show her as someone who's extremely kinky/horny in a way that most of the other love interests aren't. Then eventually she'd meet Cassie and it'd be kind of funny/awkward/something. But, I'll often be writing a scene and think, "Oh man, I could bring that back up right here, since all the pieces are assembled."

Writing a scene where Ashe is changing into her swimsuit, realizing Guy would have Cassie's suit in his room, and realizing that Ashe would connect the dots, made me want to revisit her little fetish. But, I didn't have a variable tagged from the earlier scene, to show Guy was into it. Which meant that I had to do a little improvisation, and have Ashe just bring it up in a way that could suggest she'd both already talked about it with Guy, and not. It'll be fixed once I clean up Chapter One, and fill out/polish up a bunch of stuff I've long meant to.

It's important to remember that the game is still technically in a Beta/early access stage. I'm constantly finding little things in the script where I think, "Shit, I wish I'd have labeled that.." But, the good news is that once it's done, I'll be able to do a thorough review and make sure everything is just so.
Do you think we'll get the option for more roleplay with Ashe in the future? Because that scene was really awesome.
 

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Do you think we'll get the option for more roleplay with Ashe in the future? Because that scene was really awesome.
I second this not just because it was really hot but it's probably my favorite or one of my favorite scenes in this game. I'd say it's at least somewhere in the top 10 or so of my favorite scenes ive seen in AVN's in general off the top of my head. So i'm greedy and want more of it haha
 

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I second this not just because it was really hot but it's probably my favorite or one of my favorite scenes in this game. I'd say it's at least somewhere in the top 10 or so of my favorite scenes ive seen in AVN's in general off the top of my head.
It's my favourite scene currently until sex with Mason happens. I wonder if he'll leave his knee high socks on? I hope so because the thought of that is really hot.
 

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It's my favourite scene currently until sex with Mason happens. I wonder if he'll leave his knee high socks on? I hope so because the thought of that is really hot.
I was going to say something, but, I caught myself, because we're not allowed to actually discuss Mason.
 
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As always, I appreciate that people worry I'll up and abandon this project. But, I have no such intentions.

I know I add a bunch of characters, but I honestly just see it as more toys to play with if I want to, and if I don't.. I won't! There's obviously the core cast of love interests, and I have plans for how they connect to each other, and the larger plot bubbling in the background.. But, sometimes a character is just there because I want to do a fun little scene. Blizzy and Cutiedoll are in that vein. I liked the idea of Guy being accosted by two idiots, and based on his mood, having it go in very different ways. Being able to respond kindly, curtly, or angrily -- or if you're already in a bad mood, getting no real choice in the matter.

I also believe that, if you're going to have a minor character in a porn game.. Make them a hot lady. Kara the hotel owner from the last chapter is an example of this. I could have Guy just pull up to the hotel, and then cut to him and Risa in the room. Hell, I could just cut from Guy deciding to take her to the hotel, to them being in the room. But, I wanted to do a little scene where for once, someone is completely unfamiliar with Guy's local fame, and therefore entirely unimpressed with him. And since I'm doing that, let's make her a hot lady (literally, ba-dum-tssh).

And if I decide I want to do a little self-contained chapter where a small business owner realizes a multi-millionaire was staying in her hotel, and approaches him for a grant to fix up her place.. Well, I've got this character ready for sexy fun-times.

View attachment 3877294

We're eventually going to get to a point where the love interests don't really need such complicated sex scenes. That drastically speeds things up on my end, and allows me to focus on more story stuff. Mason gets another BJ scene in the next update, and it's a pretty sparse 40ish renders. Compare that to his first one, which was 100+. Ashe's fucked-over-the-table scene? That's 28 renders for the longest variation, as opposed to 130+ for her long sex scene in the same update.

My intentions are that, as the game progresses and I don't need to do such long sex scenes, I'll be able to focus on moving the story along at a faster clip. So, rather than things getting more complicated, they actually get a bit simpler. This is kind of modeled on the way sex scenes work in most erotic novels -- the first scene is always a big deal. After that, it's more like.. "And then they fucked!"

Once all the characters are at their, "And then they fucked!" stage (currently Nicki, Ashe, and Risa are there, and Mason will be after next update) I'll be able to focus more on interesting little events that depend on your relationship with a character. Threesomes, kink content, and of course the main narrative of sexual exploitation and Guy trying to outmaneuver an antagonist.

All that said -- this is still the first game I've done. I'll mess up here and there, and overextend myself. But, I think I'm already doing better than many novice devs.



So, one thing I learned over time is that I really need to be tagging like.. Every mildly consequential decision with a variable. For the Ashe roleplay scene, I kind of just intended for it to initially show her as someone who's extremely kinky/horny in a way that most of the other love interests aren't. Then eventually she'd meet Cassie and it'd be kind of funny/awkward/something. But, I'll often be writing a scene and think, "Oh man, I could bring that back up right here, since all the pieces are assembled."

Writing a scene where Ashe is changing into her swimsuit, realizing Guy would have Cassie's suit in his room, and realizing that Ashe would connect the dots, made me want to revisit her little fetish. But, I didn't have a variable tagged from the earlier scene, to show Guy was into it. Which meant that I had to do a little improvisation, and have Ashe just bring it up in a way that could suggest she'd both already talked about it with Guy, and not. It'll be fixed once I clean up Chapter One, and fill out/polish up a bunch of stuff I've long meant to.

It's important to remember that the game is still technically in a Beta/early access stage. I'm constantly finding little things in the script where I think, "Shit, I wish I'd have labeled that.." But, the good news is that once it's done, I'll be able to do a thorough review and make sure everything is just so.
If I may say, I'm basically a newbie to all these NSFW games and don't have much of a dog in this fight, am largely unbiased and haven't tried but a handful of what I would consider all around solid games through and through. I don't hardcore nerd out and play and replay these games 50 times like some appears to like to do but I've dabbled with a few different paths in various games etc etc. I don't have any demands or requests. These games are created by the creators with a goal in mind, I would assume.

All that to say, coming from what is effectively a layman who appreciates good art, good stories, most especially good writing and realistic scenarios whether in games, TV or film, I think you've nailed this. It's all very compelling, intriguing and engaging. At this point unless you hand it over to someone else to take creative control of, I can't see how you COULD fuck it up. Well done.
 
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It's my favourite scene currently until sex with Mason happens. I wonder if he'll leave his knee high socks on? I hope so because the thought of that is really hot.
For me I think im looking forward to either Pepper sex scene or maybe another Risa one the most. While I liked the Risa sex scene we got. It left me feeling like I wanted one where she was completely sober and not coming off the drugs or having to worry about her father / butler catch the MC.
 
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As always, I appreciate that people worry I'll up and abandon this project. But, I have no such intentions.

I know I add a bunch of characters, but I honestly just see it as more toys to play with if I want to, and if I don't.. I won't! There's obviously the core cast of love interests, and I have plans for how they connect to each other, and the larger plot bubbling in the background.. But, sometimes a character is just there because I want to do a fun little scene. Blizzy and Cutiedoll are in that vein. I liked the idea of Guy being accosted by two idiots, and based on his mood, having it go in very different ways. Being able to respond kindly, curtly, or angrily -- or if you're already in a bad mood, getting no real choice in the matter.

I also believe that, if you're going to have a minor character in a porn game.. Make them a hot lady. Kara the hotel owner from the last chapter is an example of this. I could have Guy just pull up to the hotel, and then cut to him and Risa in the room. Hell, I could just cut from Guy deciding to take her to the hotel, to them being in the room. But, I wanted to do a little scene where for once, someone is completely unfamiliar with Guy's local fame, and therefore entirely unimpressed with him. And since I'm doing that, let's make her a hot lady (literally, ba-dum-tssh).

And if I decide I want to do a little self-contained chapter where a small business owner realizes a multi-millionaire was staying in her hotel, and approaches him for a grant to fix up her place.. Well, I've got this character ready for sexy fun-times.

View attachment 3877294

We're eventually going to get to a point where the love interests don't really need such complicated sex scenes. That drastically speeds things up on my end, and allows me to focus on more story stuff. Mason gets another BJ scene in the next update, and it's a pretty sparse 40ish renders. Compare that to his first one, which was 100+. Ashe's fucked-over-the-table scene? That's 28 renders for the longest variation, as opposed to 130+ for her long sex scene in the same update.

My intentions are that, as the game progresses and I don't need to do such long sex scenes, I'll be able to focus on moving the story along at a faster clip. So, rather than things getting more complicated, they actually get a bit simpler. This is kind of modeled on the way sex scenes work in most erotic novels -- the first scene is always a big deal. After that, it's more like.. "And then they fucked!"

Once all the characters are at their, "And then they fucked!" stage (currently Nicki, Ashe, and Risa are there, and Mason will be after next update) I'll be able to focus more on interesting little events that depend on your relationship with a character. Threesomes, kink content, and of course the main narrative of sexual exploitation and Guy trying to outmaneuver an antagonist.

All that said -- this is still the first game I've done. I'll mess up here and there, and overextend myself. But, I think I'm already doing better than many novice devs.



So, one thing I learned over time is that I really need to be tagging like.. Every mildly consequential decision with a variable. For the Ashe roleplay scene, I kind of just intended for it to initially show her as someone who's extremely kinky/horny in a way that most of the other love interests aren't. Then eventually she'd meet Cassie and it'd be kind of funny/awkward/something. But, I'll often be writing a scene and think, "Oh man, I could bring that back up right here, since all the pieces are assembled."

Writing a scene where Ashe is changing into her swimsuit, realizing Guy would have Cassie's suit in his room, and realizing that Ashe would connect the dots, made me want to revisit her little fetish. But, I didn't have a variable tagged from the earlier scene, to show Guy was into it. Which meant that I had to do a little improvisation, and have Ashe just bring it up in a way that could suggest she'd both already talked about it with Guy, and not. It'll be fixed once I clean up Chapter One, and fill out/polish up a bunch of stuff I've long meant to.

It's important to remember that the game is still technically in a Beta/early access stage. I'm constantly finding little things in the script where I think, "Shit, I wish I'd have labeled that.." But, the good news is that once it's done, I'll be able to do a thorough review and make sure everything is just so.
I guess that quite a few people who love this game because of his dark paths and the "fat" chance for our Guy to exploit and/or rape his victims fancied watching the rape videos made by that scummy mad junkie asshole, but I assure you that people like me who only WANT to play the good guy routes found them very very "unpleasant".

So, I'm just wondering whether you might want to consider a way to make them "optional" (Guy starts watching them and when he realises what's about to happen to the girl we players have the choice to continue/stop watching it, for instance).

Just my 2 cents, of course.
 
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So, I'm just wondering whether you might want to consider a way to make them "optional" (Guy starts watching them and when he realises what's about to happen to the girl we players have the choice to continue/stop watching it, for instance).
I thought I read that was going to be planned not sure when tho. Probably in the next update id assume not sure how it's going to be handled.
 
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Does FiN not have a discord? I recently created an account there, so I was thinking of adding this game to my list.
 

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Also, btw, I just wanted to say about the latest update post here: I'm really, really, really pleased that you're going to be offering casual 1-off encounters in various chapters with some of the non-LI hotties you've introduced, Neon :cool: I, too, liked that hotel lady and was wondering if there were any plans.

The only thing that will be a bummer, from both your perspective and ours really, is that some people might decide their favorite character is a one-off character and then beg for an upgrade to official LI status :LOL:

Mayyyyybe you could offer endings for some of the minor characters if someone liked them that much without dedicating all of the renders & writing that a full-fledged LI would get. Some classical hentai games did that from memory. Don't know if you've already considered or made a decision on that Neon? But either way, it's gonna be refreshing and just generally a blast I think! Especially because, I have to admit, I have a cheating kink in these kinds of games 'cause it's something I would never do in RL. So, this sounds like it will definitely satisfy that!
 

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Speaking of the minor characters. One I wouldn't mind getting to know better but would be a waste of dev time other than a 1 off lewd scene would be the cashier in the store we saw Brittani and met her mother
 
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I only like Ashe sexually because she is kinky. So I would gently let her down the second Mason or Nicki ask for a commitment.
yeah for me I didn't care for Ashe then her date had so much character deveolopment that I don't even like her because her kinky side. I legit just like her for her character just like how I like Nicki and Risa for their characters and they became my favorite. tbh the only characters I like because they are hot and nothing else so far till I get to know them better is Brittani and Viola
 
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but I assure you that people like me who only WANT to play the good guy routes found them very very "unpleasant".
I can't watch real porn and start getting pre-nut clarity after watching Nicki's experience and the drug dealer's plot.
I become wondering how the "actress" in the video feels, are they really fine. :(
 
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