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Here, some inspirationFor now it is only an attempt
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I like this one, hoping we will get the entire story one day
besides the grammar (which is still understandable) the story is decent, since it is still just beginning, there are many plot lines that need to be filled
the renderings are decent/good
and the Dev's approach to the music (adding the links) is a decent idea and relay's that it does have a meaningful relation to the game
in short;
Great Game, looking forward to much more
besides the grammar (which is still understandable) the story is decent, since it is still just beginning, there are many plot lines that need to be filled
the renderings are decent/good
and the Dev's approach to the music (adding the links) is a decent idea and relay's that it does have a meaningful relation to the game
in short;
Great Game, looking forward to much more
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I wander if anyone figured out what that bot is saying? well ....... I have, that's an 8bit binary code for "hug me!"
merlin7560
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and in this screen that bot says "kill all humans"
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A strong inspiration or coincidence
, like Dark Angel and Alita and more but not mentioned because it spoiled the story ... in one scene the protagonist mentions that there are no horses in her world.
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I haven't read the other two, I own the Alita books and it is on my to-read list.A strong inspiration or coincidence
I began the game, I enjoy it for now.
If I can be a little blunt though, well, I think you already know this, but the English grammar is not the best, and it can make some sentences hard to understand (especially when male and female pronouns are used incorrectly)
But other than that, the writing is a little rough too. I really like the constant innuendo and touchy-feely, but it feels too much to the level of fanfiction and could be improved. Some interactions between some characters don't feel natural (like when she is being interrogated)
But nonetheless, keep up the good work. The renders are really nice, And I like the world setting. I love uchronias and modern mixing with other eras.
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Yes, just lesbians, at least as of now. I wouldn't expect any male intimacy, although I haven't really tried to find out the eventual plans of the dev. Namco's pretty active on this thread, however, so you're likely to get a definitive answer soon . . . if they decide to reveal the answer, that is. But I would just assume it's all lesbian relationships unless you see otherwise from the dev.
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Perfect! I didn't think I'd seen anything otherwise, but I also didn't want to speak for you and future plans. It's great just how it is.You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.
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Great news! Thank you so much for claryifing Namco15 can't wait to see how the game will unfold!You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.
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WOW if i click on a panty i get a pantyshot?
Kinda didnt expect such a degree of awesomeness, with the game being exclusively lesbian and all... time to reassess my assumptions
Kinda didnt expect such a degree of awesomeness, with the game being exclusively lesbian and all... time to reassess my assumptions
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About an hour in, and it has good art, good lore, and good characters. Unfortunately I am having one hell of a time keeping track of what the hell is going on. A few suggestions to the dev, if I may, that might make it easier to follow:
1) There are a lot of scenes with "Unknown" talking to "Unknown". I'm barely paying attention to the text for the first half of them because I am trying to figure out who is saying what-- having them both called the same thing does not help. Try using something descriptive ("blonde girl", "armed woman", whatever) so that we have a mental hook to hang things on as we are trying to learn these characters.
2) It might help to use text colors that are meaningful (i.e. helps us figure out who the speaker is in the image on the screen). Most characters seem to reuse orange and green, and there does not seem to be any particular meaning to that color.
3) There is a backward time jump that is somewhat confusing. For one thing, it's not entirely clear when it ends-- the MC. whom we thought was a badass, turns out to be weak and gets beaten up for no reason we can understand (lots of talk about characters we have not met yet), the there is a flashback and we meet a lot of characters. That was 30 minutes ago and I am not sure if I am still in the flashback or not. It would be helpful if when we move from scene to scene we got some kind of timestamp to tell us what is going on.... like, we meet Sidra-- ok, she's awesome-- and then this new person comes in and we have to decide if she is to be a roomie or not before we have any way of knowing who the heck she is, what our relationship is with her, etc. Was this happening 12 hours ago? A year ago? After the fight? It's fun to get a hot tsundere into the harem but some explanation would help a lot.
You start the game with a couple of outsiders, which is a great narrative device because they need the whole world explained to them, which helps the reader. But then the outsiders immediately vanish for some reason, and a ton more lore is thrown out with no real explanation. Don't get me wrong, it's interesting, it would just be more fun if it was presented in a way that was easier to follow.
Also, random feedback on some pronoun trouble: Scan your scripts for the word 'his'. About half of them should be 'her'.
1) There are a lot of scenes with "Unknown" talking to "Unknown". I'm barely paying attention to the text for the first half of them because I am trying to figure out who is saying what-- having them both called the same thing does not help. Try using something descriptive ("blonde girl", "armed woman", whatever) so that we have a mental hook to hang things on as we are trying to learn these characters.
2) It might help to use text colors that are meaningful (i.e. helps us figure out who the speaker is in the image on the screen). Most characters seem to reuse orange and green, and there does not seem to be any particular meaning to that color.
3) There is a backward time jump that is somewhat confusing. For one thing, it's not entirely clear when it ends-- the MC. whom we thought was a badass, turns out to be weak and gets beaten up for no reason we can understand (lots of talk about characters we have not met yet), the there is a flashback and we meet a lot of characters. That was 30 minutes ago and I am not sure if I am still in the flashback or not. It would be helpful if when we move from scene to scene we got some kind of timestamp to tell us what is going on.... like, we meet Sidra-- ok, she's awesome-- and then this new person comes in and we have to decide if she is to be a roomie or not before we have any way of knowing who the heck she is, what our relationship is with her, etc. Was this happening 12 hours ago? A year ago? After the fight? It's fun to get a hot tsundere into the harem but some explanation would help a lot.
You start the game with a couple of outsiders, which is a great narrative device because they need the whole world explained to them, which helps the reader. But then the outsiders immediately vanish for some reason, and a ton more lore is thrown out with no real explanation. Don't get me wrong, it's interesting, it would just be more fun if it was presented in a way that was easier to follow.
Also, random feedback on some pronoun trouble: Scan your scripts for the word 'his'. About half of them should be 'her'.