Reb3l911
Newbie
- Aug 12, 2022
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Let me just premise this by saying, I enjoy this choice based VN. What I'm about to type out is my personal feedback. Now!
I only have 2 issues with this VN.
1. How the MC has been written/portrayed. Hes obviously an inexperienced boy at the beginning. My issue is he has continued to act this way. The sexual growth of a man isn't slow. A situation will occur at some point that will practically force a man into becoming sexually explorative (meaning up for trying new things all the time) or becoming a worthless sack of shit, who is scared to try new things and decides Missionary is his bread and butter. Then never budges from that stand point. The MC needs to grow up sooner or later. This issue is not only in the VN either. Character growth should be considered when writing/creating a worthwhile story. Which this is! Let the MC sexually grow is all I'm saying.
2. Sex scenes are too short. Any man who can keep his cock hard obviously would go longer than 5 minutes and in multiple positions. Let the poor MC experience multiple position with the girls for fuck's sake! Especially, during 3somes! You can always change it up and have forplay as a transition point in-between position changes (BJ, eating pussy, Fingering, etc). No other game I've read has done this. It will bring a new aspect to the scenes. Reference your favorite porn vids if you have to.
Other than those 2 issues. Everything is great. Environments are on point. Character models are beautiful. Story premise is not original but is still enjoyable. Love the relationships screen in options (about time you put Auntie's character render in though). But, Like I said at the beginning. This is my personal feedback. Which the Dev should welcome. So, don't come at me if you disagree. I'll just laugh at you.
Goodluck on the rest of the VN!
I only have 2 issues with this VN.
1. How the MC has been written/portrayed. Hes obviously an inexperienced boy at the beginning. My issue is he has continued to act this way. The sexual growth of a man isn't slow. A situation will occur at some point that will practically force a man into becoming sexually explorative (meaning up for trying new things all the time) or becoming a worthless sack of shit, who is scared to try new things and decides Missionary is his bread and butter. Then never budges from that stand point. The MC needs to grow up sooner or later. This issue is not only in the VN either. Character growth should be considered when writing/creating a worthwhile story. Which this is! Let the MC sexually grow is all I'm saying.
2. Sex scenes are too short. Any man who can keep his cock hard obviously would go longer than 5 minutes and in multiple positions. Let the poor MC experience multiple position with the girls for fuck's sake! Especially, during 3somes! You can always change it up and have forplay as a transition point in-between position changes (BJ, eating pussy, Fingering, etc). No other game I've read has done this. It will bring a new aspect to the scenes. Reference your favorite porn vids if you have to.
Other than those 2 issues. Everything is great. Environments are on point. Character models are beautiful. Story premise is not original but is still enjoyable. Love the relationships screen in options (about time you put Auntie's character render in though). But, Like I said at the beginning. This is my personal feedback. Which the Dev should welcome. So, don't come at me if you disagree. I'll just laugh at you.
Goodluck on the rest of the VN!
