VN - Ren'Py - Completed - Haley's Story [v1.1 Pre-Patched] [Viitgames]

Pros:

- Haley is amazing: looks, personality, and chemistry with MC - all A+. She might be my favorite female character from all the games I've played, and I don't even like gingers.
- All models look hot and original, not refurbished from other games.
- All characters have their own unique personality and story.
- The story is good and flows well, no awkwardness.
- MC has unique dynamics with every character.

Cons:

- One unavoidable relationship. - Dark skinned characters are sometimes hard to make out in certain setups.

Even though I have downloaded somewhere in the hundreds games from here this is still probably my favorite the characters have the cute factor mixed with the sexy and sweet and the story so far has been simple but great as well I can't help but fall for these girls especially Haley

Let's start with the good stuff:

The renders are nice, although scenes with dark-skinned characters (Victor and Sandra) tend to be way too dark.

Haley's character is quite enjoyable. She's headstrong, smart, cheeky and also pretty relaxed.

The playful banter between the siblings is refreshing.


Now for the stuff I didn't like so much:

Haley isn't that attractive to me.
Her face looks strange (especially her botox lips) and her facial expression frequently reminds me of a scary Chucky doll.

The story.
From the beginning we already know the outcome. To keep things interesting, we should have either been given meaningful choices (like which girl to date) or a feeling of threat we could possibly lose Haley to another guy - or both.
Haley's Story gives us none of this - instead we get pretty much railroaded through the story and the little choices we have are for the most part cosmetic.

We also get forced into a relationship with Sandra.
I like Sandra, but forced relationships are a terrible idea.
It's never really explained why Sandra and the MC are dating and what they see in each other - there's almost zero chemistry between them. Especially the MC doesn't seem to have any genuine feelings for her.
In fact he ALWAYS shows the same blank facial expression - even during scenes when Sandra is cuddling with him.

Speaking of male characters: They are either wimps, creeps - or gay.

Jack is portrayed as an one-dimensional laughing stock with one purpose: getting dumped.
Haley doesn't even want to spend time with him or properly kiss him - he's just an annoyance to her.
So why are they even a thing?
To me that's just terrible, low-effort writing / character design.

Richard (another one-dimensional character) could have also been a threat, but it gets immediately defused because Haley isn't interested in him at all.

In the end the only interesting male character is Victor - and of course he's gay because… reasons.

It also feels like the dev had a basic plot idea, but then didn't pay too much attention to the consistency / details of the story, like:

Dinner at Adriana and Richard
The whole scene felt so out of place… Richard openly hitting on Haley while his wife and her brother are present. The MC talking in an extremely unpleasant way to Adriana, something that should have got him instantly fired. And Adriana, up to this point cool and professional, suddenly swearing and then jerking off the MC under the table. It felt like a scene right out of a JAB comic. "Bizarre, but not in a good way" (© Avaron1974).

At the pool
The girls' skin shines like the MC emptied 2 bottles of sunscreen on them (just to be completely dry again in one of the next renders) - and then out of nowhere he's fondling his sister's boobs. Seriously?

Emergency room
The MC carries his injured sister all the way to the next emergency room. Pretty convenient it's just around the corner, so no driving involved, nope. Haley is totally in pain, but the moment the doc states nothing needs to be done about her ankle (not even ointment and bandage - what kind of doc is she?) Haley's instantly fine again...


Conclusion:

Haley's Story is a visually appealing VN with a charismatic main love interest and some refreshing banter.
Unfortunately, the player gets pretty much railroaded through the story - and choices don't seem to be very meaningful.
On top of that some (especially male) side characters are just poorly written and many story details don't feel very believable.

I must say this VN has everything to become a masterpiece, a classic,really incredible renders and animations, the writing is also a key factor here, absolutely amazing so far, the slow burn with Haley is great, she conquered me so easyly, the only Con i can say for now is the forced relashionship with sandra, i really dont want to be anything but friends with her, you either are nice to her or kinda of a dick, so i hope you can dump her eventually to pursue the other girls, there is absolute no fucking way that i would chose Sandra over Haley, Haley always wins with me.

Excellent story,. Not a game that is going to just instantly throw you in there where you are banging girls left and right. You really feel like these are 2 people working through their hang ups. Might be my personal favorite plot in a story yet.

FINALLY! A sister in an adult game that seems like an actual living, breathing human being with depth of character and a real personality. Haley is probably even better a sister and a better character than an adult game deserves. She's cute and sexy, without having a large boob or an ass, which seems to be the definition of beauty in most adult games. But, you know what, even if she were not cute, I wouldn't even mind, because, as one of my favorite writers once mentioned in one of his books that once you like a person, they start to look more beautiful. The story seems to revolve around her, more focus on her than the MC. So, "Haley's Story" is an appropriate name. Don't see an incest tag, so I'm just anxious that we get to romance her in the end. I can't wait to see where this story goes. Kudos to the developer. You sir/ma'm DO really know how to make a good character.

well well well...how the hell did i miss this gem? after reading the description it reminded me of another twin bro sis game (my sister my roommate...which is a great game btw)...but i dont want to review something by comparing with something else.
this VN is just beautiful...definitely one of the best i have ever played...excellent renders...excellent writing...story is pretty good...the build up is perfect and very realistic...not a bunch of H scenes but enough for now atleast (animations are well made)...also i loved the detail the dev has put into characters...very believable and unique...well what more can one ask? super hyped for how this turns out...
definitely try this one out if you looking for quality a VN

Tbth, I only DL'd because there just seems a be a real slump in decent games coming out recently... I was just looking for something a bit different-ish with decent-ish art and this game popped up in the "New Releases" section. I almost didn't DL it because I thought Haley looked too much like Lizzy Border from the 80's Metal Band \m/ (in the OP title screen)- Note to Dev: That really isn't a flattering picture of her, considering how stunningly she's rendered throughout the rest of the game. She is absolutely gorgeous!

This game is a hidden gem for many reasons, as I found out, and was pleasantly surprised by- yes, even though it's "that" topic. Lol This game actually does something not a lot of the other ones do- they let things happen. There's no talisman, book, potion, alien, pill, demon, wand, etc.,.- it just happens because...it happens.

It's also really refreshing to see the girl instigate things, while the brother is completely oblivious. It's obvious he cares about her and you're presented with some dialogue options that show you care, and then there are some that show you "care+". I really like the way it played out- you're even given the options like you have no interest in her whatsoever... C'mon though, HOW could you say know to that redhaired beauty?! I know I can't watch "Brave" without sportin' a chub. Lol What can I say? Merida replaced Ariel and I didn't even see it coming.

The art is exceptionally well done and so are the renders. The locations actually look like people live/work in those location. They aren't just randomly filled with generic assets to make it look habitable- it looks like people would live in the places. The ladies, oh the ladies are cute, sexy, adorable, and amazing.
Adriana- She's not holding up too badly for a "mature" woman. I'm still unsure about the pro/con of getting the HJ at dinner...
Sandra- Not normally a fan of sistahs, but I wouldn't mind getting "down with swirl" for some of that dark chocolate.
Alana- Hasn't really been given a whole lot to do yet, but she isn't hard on the eyes.
Lisa- She looks/acts like so much damaged goods, but looks/acts like she's be a whole lot of fun.
Diane- (I'm about to become a blasphemer...) She's attractive, but not really into ginormous fun-bags.
Haley- The crown jewel in this game. Even if she were only a side character, she'd still be the one that I'd have to- have to pursue. I think I'm in Love. Lol Haley is just the cutest li'l thing!

Last, but not least- the story is solid with a decent premise, BUT it's how it's written that really makes it stand out from similar games. The banter and interaction between Haley and MC is done really, really well. They act like a brother and sister, maybe if they were still 7 with larger vocabularies- but their dialogue is and sounds believable. What I love the most about it how playful, teasing, coquettish, shy, and fun Haley seems through her words and the renders- and how that attitude is conveyed. If I were planning on going against accepted, established societal norms with my sibling- there is no one I would rather do it with than Haley.

8/10 Another successful project. From the beginning, it looks like you're going to hit the ctrl key, but not. The story draws you. Ideal, simple and exciting. Perfect processing. Again one of the few games that did. Personally, I would add tears to rendering it to weight. Impression is essential. I'm delighted with this game. Whether she's a sister or a roommate. It does not matter. i wanna 3 things.
Add more corruption (incidents)
Better scene or more passionate
And mainly disappointment.
Otherwise, the perfect work of the developer.

The writing is really phenomenal, which matters more than you might expect. I don't just mean that it's natural rather than forced, although that's part of it. I mean that the writer went above and beyond. The characters are written as characters, and not just as plot devices whose purpose is to move the player along towards a satisfyingly erotic ending. For instance, the main character loves Samurai movies—it's a detail that 99% of erotic games would never include, because it's irrelevant to the plot. But I love it.

Excellent game! First of all we have here a nice choice of models, textures, and overall excellent 3D work (although I think the kisses lack a bit of... something). The thing that makes this game so good for me, though, is the writing. The slow pace is excellent and the tension building works really well. It also helps that the relationship between the MC and Haley starts off as a regular brother/sister thing. Plus, this isn't a game where the women are treated as disposable, interchangeable objects (finally!).

I can't wait for the next installments!

I really like this one.

The characters and the story are both sexy and sweet. The writing is good, getting the story across without any verbal bloat and the art is well done too. Enough characters to be interesting while keeping the story focused on the siblings.

Updates are regular and consistant and no bugs as yet.

I haven't finished it yet but this is already one of my favorites. Twins move to the city for a job and they share an apartment. You live the day-to-day lives and meet a memorable cast of characters, while you two battle the slow-moving feelings you have towards each other.

It's a rom-com slice-of-life VN. It's not extremely dramatic and it makes you feel good.

A brilliant VN so far with a great story and good character building.
+ Renders are gorgeous. Haley's character is just.. wow!
+ The relationship of MC with everyone is interesting and realistic.
+ The slow burn is done perfectly. You can see that the MC and Haley desire each other but they don't push their relationship towards something, nor do they push each other part. They just enjoy the moment.
+ Humor is on point.

- The only cons I could think of is that we're being pushed into a relationship. But I'm willing to accept it as a part of the plot and overlook it.
Thanks for a great game and cheers!

If you like writing in Ptolemy games, then you definitely should play HS. This guy and his team are always trying to bring something new to the table with each game. And from the looks of it we are gonna have another superb adult VN.

This is top notch so far. "So far" is just past the point the dinner with Haley's boss and her cheating husband in v0.10. I had to take a break at this point to show some appreciation for the game. It is brilliantly written, at least compared to the average games here. There are quite few "lewd-games" where I don't get bored by the dialogue and start skipping. This game as me reading it all, often feeling quite amused, and occasionally laughing out loud.

I also like that that the MC isn't instantly (or VERY QUICKLY) sexually interested in his sister. The first scene isn't him spying on her in the shower, or even considering her sexually. At the point that I'm writing this, I sense that there's some tension building up, and there's been some subtle hints. (Subtle to the MC at least. It's impossible to not know where this is heading for the player.)

SO: The writing is very good so far.
The characters have interesting personalities.
There are genuinely funny moments.
The pace feels spot on so far.
The tension is building up, and there's a good foundation for an erotic drama. The art is up to expected standards.
What animation I've seen so far hasn't been impressive, but that's not a deal breaker for me. I'd play it without animation.

So it's a good start, and we'll only have to hope that the creator can keep it up.

I really like this one. good story, renders, characters and all that. Even if it has no sex scenes yet (or minimal), it's already one of my favourite VN's. I hope the following updates will have the same, slow pacing too.

"Okay so, what drew me to try this VN out was the red-head in the preview pictures, but damn they don't do her justice, she's MUCH better in the VN itself, holy crap, can't get enough of her! I actually love every single female model/character in this one, I mean, why they all gotta be so desirable? I can't help but to go and attempt to build a harem, can't say no to any of them, haha!
I'm also actually glad that we finally have a black guy, Victor, who isn't a douchebag like in so many other stories, he's one of the few, so that's another big plus in my book, tired of the stereotypes."
a wise Eerie Entty said about the game.
I personally like the slow but believable and lovely way the love between the MC and Haley grows. There's that bickering sibilings have, but you know very welle, Haley will have your back when you're on your last match, and she knows how to be flirty with just a wink
cudoes to the devs. they mastered the art of facial expressions

The writing is intriguing and just keeps you interested. No sex scenes have happened and yet it's still is one of my favourites. Renders are solid. The relationship between characters nice especially with the brother and sister teasing and making fun each other while still loving and caring still.

Thnak You! I realy like the story, the character and the choices you can make in this game. The graphic is great as well. The only "negative" i can tell are the animations, but thats only becouse of me, and my sky high demands on that department( after Milfy City i question everything sorry). Overall this is one my favorite game. Keep up the good work.