- Jun 9, 2017
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This REALLY needs a proof reader. I would go so far as to suggest someone to help write the script. Here's a thought: Give the current script to someone who can proof read it and flesh out the dialogue more. The interactions between the characters are stiff and occasionally lack coherence. The art work is quite good, the developer can hang their hat on that and look for ways to improve the writing overall.