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Looks promising, but I'll wait for future updates - a little bit more content would help for a better judgement basis
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WTF is the logic in this intro? This scene needs an edit. It feels lazy. Rushed. It's out of order. (version .1) Azalea did not make her argument well, but Henry just accepts the argument before evidence. And he will change his obsession and stop his celebrity love based on a single perspective from a stranger her never met?! How weak-willed is that? Do you know one you have made up your mind about something it takes five times the data to change it as it did to initially form it?
Azalea should make her case, tell her story of her sister before Henry even begins to accept the possibility that the Four aren't good.
"No your lying," is a pathetically short time in the bargaining stage of grief. Henry should know collateral damage happens. Death counts are in the news. The spun narrative would always be "but it could have been worse!" Azalea could raise the question, "is there more collateral damage than there needed to be because the Four don't care about human life."
Or Azalea's hidden superpower is mind control (wouldn't that be a change). Or being healed for a month turned Henry's mind to mush.
"And they didn't know about my existence" The ego of this brat.
I'd add that the logic Azalea uses (and the MC immediately falls for) is really flimsy. It's not like the Four were sitting home masturbating when the robot blew up his building; they were dealing with one threat, and had no idea that it was a distraction while another threat they knew nothing about showed up somewhere else. MC instantly flips to hating them for the sin of... not being omniscient and omnipresent.WTF is the logic in this intro? This scene needs an edit. It feels lazy. Rushed. It's out of order. (version .1) Azalea did not make her argument well, but Henry just accepts the argument before evidence. And he will change his obsession and stop his celebrity love based on a single perspective from a stranger her never met?! How weak-willed is that? Do you know one you have made up your mind about something it takes five times the data to change it as it did to initially form it?
Azalea should make her case, tell her story of her sister before Henry even begins to accept the possibility that the Four aren't good.
"No your lying," is a pathetically short time in the bargaining stage of grief. Henry should know collateral damage happens. Death counts are in the news. The spun narrative would always be "but it could have been worse!" Azalea could raise the question, "is there more collateral damage than there needed to be because the Four don't care about human life."
Or Azalea's hidden superpower is mind control (wouldn't that be a change). Or being healed for a month turned Henry's mind to mush.
"And they didn't know about my existence" The ego of this brat.
lol you even got the intro. I'm not even sure online lyrics show that.uuuh uuuh uuuh uuuuuuuuh
uuuh uuuh uuuh uuuuuuuh
uuuh uuuh uuuuh uuuuuuh
aaaaahh aaaaaah
Where have all the good men gone
And where are all the Gods?
Where's the streetwise Hercules to fight the rising odds?
Isn't there a white knight upon a fiery steed?
Late at night, I toss and I turn
And I dream of what I neeeeed
nope i'm not definitely have the urge to sing that song..
Is that not the Mc with her?
Edit: It seems like it isn’t since that guy has a beard and the Mc doesn’t? Waste of potential. Who actually finds a chick more appealing and gets turned on by seeing them fuck someone else? Not harem fans, that’s who.
The approach could be to not have any relationship with her? After what you have written it's evident that I don't consider her as a LI.If you chose to follow the girl, you find her fucking the teacher. You take a photo and leave, basically (he's not standing there jerking off). Then you can blackmail the girl, or chose a different approach (that's in the next update).
Not yet, sorryOne question...
Can I court the big woman from the last group picture ? The one with the muscles ?
That's a good idea. No plans for that yet, but we'll see.Shapeshifter superheroine/villainess when?