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for your first attempt, I think the little one is very successful.
her face has potential.
it just depends on what you want to improve and in which direction (style) you want it to go.
if it's just a matter of working it out in general, i would advise you to make it a bit more feminine.
I wouldn't use a skin from k1t0 for your model, rather nyaacho or DBlin.
you can also enhance your skin by using overlays and bumpmaps, for example.
in the end you just have to present your work with a good preset (i use more direct lighting of my scenes)
as an example, - i have loaded your card once - normal and once with my standard settings.
( i think you can recognize a minimal difference
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