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Maybe she has onlyfans accPaid for with Erryns "modeling" money lol
The girl is making big bucks
Maybe she has onlyfans accPaid for with Erryns "modeling" money lol
Maybe, but whatever it is, she's chock full of self loathing from it.Maybe she has onlyfans acc
The girl is making big bucks
May I suggest that you call the town/suburb the characters live in East or West Madison Springs? It is odd for two communities to be called the same thing, next to each other, and not have any distinction. There are a lot of reasons why it wouldn't be that way IRL. They may still call it all "Madison Springs" but there would be an important difference.I'm gonna answer some question which won't spoil anything.
Madison Springs is pretty big actually. But they live in a smaller town at the outskirts of Madison Springs.. Which is still called Madison Springs.. That's why they have to take a bus/train to go to the city.. It's like 20min away..
Yep, yep, I was wrong. Not the first or last time. Can't even blame drunkenness... SMHla "How do you know Erynn?"
mc "She was my neighbour back in the day.."
la "Oh nice.. So you also know Melissa?"
la "She's my hairstylist.."
I think you read it wrong. They were never neighbours. MC and Erynn were.
Oh! I am looking forward to that.Yes they did. There will be a flashback about them in one of the future updates.
Yeah, it felt very much like the comment was about that moment in time and not a "back when the MC was younger" type thing.me "Haha.. Don't worry.. I'm kidding."
me "Nothing you haven't seen before right..?"
mc "{i}(What? What does she mean by that? Did I..?){/i}"
Even if the backyard scene didn't happen. Something else happened in the past..
But I get the Deja Vu comment.. It might be a stretch.. I will look into it and change it if possible without having to restart the game..
I just want to reiterate, for immersion, if you want players to feel like they are invested in the MC that we should know whether it was a man or woman. If it was a man the MC would ask "who was that?". If it was Layla there is a chance he should recognize her voice, I know they've only known each other for a week but they've spent a lot of time together. Though with the shower on, the talking through a door, and the distraction that Alexis presents it would be possible for him not to recognize her voice.I know you play as the MC and actually know if the voice was male or female. But this way, it adds more to the mystery.
It gives me more options.
Female: Mother, sister, girlfriend
Male: Father, brother, boyfriend, husband
Edit:
Now when I reread it, it would be really weird if it was the father or brother.. Since they mention that Alexis normally doesn't lock the door. And they wouldn't just barge in on a girl in the bathroom.. So these options are invalid..
What do other think about this.. Do you want me to add if it's a male or female or keep it like this and keep you guessing until it is resolved?
Funny enough, I live in a city which has exactly this scenario. The city is split in 5 districts, each has their own name, but one of them has the same name as the city itself.May I suggest that you call the town/suburb the characters live in East or West Madison Springs? It is odd for two communities to be called the same thing, next to each other, and not have any distinction. There are a lot of reasons why it wouldn't be that way IRL. They may still call it all "Madison Springs" but there would be an important difference.
At the moment more people are for the change rather than keep it. I give it a couple more days just before the next patreon tier release. I make some changes then and reupload it. Maybe some other things come up in the meantime which I can "patch" too..I just want to reiterate, for immersion, if you want players to feel like they are invested in the MC that we should know whether it was a man or woman. If it was a man the MC would ask "who was that?". If it was Layla there is a chance he should recognize her voice, I know they've only known each other for a week but they've spent a lot of time together. Though with the shower on, the talking through a door, and the distraction that Alexis presents it would be possible for him not to recognize her voice.
I was going to offer to proofread the game and suggest any tweaks to the language, if you are interested? Purely volunteering here, just would like to help out.Funny enough, I live in a city which has exactly this scenario. The city is split in 5 districts, each has their own name, but one of them has the same name as the city itself.
But I actually like your idea. The distinction would make it easier. But I don't think it has come up yet in the story.. I have to read it to see if something needs to change. I think I called it "city" if they were talking about the big city center.
At the moment more people are for the change rather than keep it. I give it a couple more days just before the next patreon tier release. I make some changes then and reupload it. Maybe some other things come up in the meantime which I can "patch" too..
I'd like that. That would help immensely. Thank you very much.I was going to offer to proofread the game and suggest any tweaks to the language, if you are interested? Purely volunteering here, just would like to help out.
MrFriendly should have been Officer friendly ... lmaoI'd like that. That would help immensely. Thank you very much.
Hm i don't find it very cringey, even less compared what u see in most other games on a regular basis.The conversation about the tattoo Mc's daddy got for him to me was fuckin' cringe. Having a really hard time relating at all to this Mc and he seems like another freeloading beta.
Agreed, I didn't feel that the MC was in anyway completely passive, submissive, etc. He seemed rather "normal" to me. Not an overly dominant individual but also not overly sub... <shrug>.Hm i don't find it very cringey, even less compared what u see in most other games on a regular basis.
Well we all have Mc's where it's easier to relate to, or not at all.
Though the freeloading beta is a bit exaggerated, as the Mc is still a 18 year old student.
As for the beta part, i would say, Mc is insecure/inexperienced at some points, which isn't surprising for a young adult
,i would find the opposite more unbelievable...or unsympathetic.
Edit: and didn't the Mc want to work at the bar/restaurant/club of his mother
That's fair and understandable. I just find it cringey, because even my own dad offered to pay for my first tattoo, yet I didn't get my first one until I had enough to pay for it myself. I just go by the philosophy that if you can't get your own tattoo then you don't need it. I don't find the tattoo itself cringey, just the dialogue about it. And I say freeloading because he's 18 y/o yet, as soon as he gets to his mother's he doesn't seem to want to man up and earn his keep. I didn't get that far in the game, however, so maybe I'm wrong? This is why I said the words, "he seems" as I am judging solely based on what I experienced so far. Insecure and inexperienced is definitely understandable. It's just that he seems hung up on a girl from 10 years before (not sure how old he was) who was a complete cunt. Or at least that's what is hinted at. So yeah, if he is then that's beta energy in my opinion. Time to grow up and move on. But hey that's just me. Merely stating my opinions/experience. If others enjoy the game, then awesome! I'll play a bit more to see if it piques my interest at all.Hm i don't find it very cringey, even less compared what u see in most other games on a regular basis.
Well we all have Mc's where it's easier to relate to, or not at all.
Though the freeloading beta is a bit exaggerated, as the Mc is still a 18 year old student.
As for the beta part, i would say, Mc is insecure/inexperienced at some points, which isn't surprising for a young adult
,i would find the opposite more unbelievable...or unsympathetic.
I can relate to that, my parents had a similiar philosophy, even as a 12 year old u can deliver newspaper or something and pay half of what u want, makes u treasur something much more.I just find it cringey, because even my own dad offered to pay for my first tattoo, yet I didn't get my first one until I had enough to pay for it myself.
I agree with u there, holding a grudge for over 5 years because he got rejected as a 13y old let him look butthurt and whiny. U get the choice to grow up and move on though.It's just that he seems hung up on a girl from 10 years before (not sure how old he was) who was a complete cunt. Or at least that's what is hinted at.
a couple of definitions :what the hell does cringey mean anyways ?
First, if you don't like the story, you don't like it, nothing wrong with that. It's not for everyone..Yo, that entire intro was painful to get through . The conversation about the tattoo Mc's daddy got for him to me was fuckin' cringe. Having a really hard time relating at all to this Mc and he seems like another freeloading beta. Perhaps my mind will change, but not a good start for me as it's just a slog to get through. I do see the potential of something good here though. Just not sure if I want to keep at it.
I would say the pacing was good so far, a few days of settling in and meeting the characters.Him being a freeloader...
He's a high-school student. He hasn't even been back for a week.. Give it some time.. I know I might have paced all the scenes to quickly. I should've just skipped days, but hey, hindsight 20/20. But it's nothing I can't change in the future..
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Just played the game for the first time. Great Job on this. I love this game. Great story and great pace. Keep it upHim being a freeloader...
He's a high-school student. He hasn't even been back for a week.. Give it some time.. I know I might have paced all the scenes to quickly. I should've just skipped days, but hey, hindsight 20/20. But it's nothing I can't change in the future..