Feedback
Guys can you give me some feedback on the game ?
Writing
I'm looking to improve the writing. I have no problem with rendering but I find writing scenes and dialogues very stressful (probably because of my autism). I don't give writing enough time and always try to rush it.
I think I would deliver the updates a bit faster if I could use some help with the scene direction and dialogues.
Should look into hiring a writer ?
Sandbox/VN
Though I like linear VNs but I don't find them very immersive or interactive. There's no playing in it, its just reading and skipping.
Will you prefer some of the sandbox elements ?.
Like small quests, that way the sex scenes will probably feel a little bit more rewarding. Or are you okay with the current day settings.
Any feedback is appreciated
Hello
Awesome beginning , love the premise and the color pallet chosen for the renders. I know there has been some feedback already but here is my two cents:
Writing / Structure
There is good stuff here but it feels spaced out and a little empty, when it could use more events in the day.
Basically we should follow more of his routine and be shown more of the passive-agressive Beta he is before things change. Possibly some “small Peter” moments to foreshadow his transformation later.
All the stuff leading up to the bite probably should stay a fairly kinetic prologue. This section works like a first Act introducing core characters and places. Things we may revisit later and have the chance to change.
SAND BOX STUFF
My opinion is that the morning after the bite should begin the Sandbox elements of this game. I am thinking more Summertime Saga and Midnight Paradise. We get a map and a quest log with routes we can pursue.
Assuming this is also intended to have dating sim elements, the routes would focus on romantic interests while still moving a central story along. Treating each route more like a campaign than a series of repeatable events might feel more fulfilling and not grindy.
Gonna show my age here with my mental impression of the humor for this one with a list of movies:
- Top Secret
- Naked Gun
- Airplane
- Austin Powers
- Super hero movie
I can already imagine the MC dealing with Yandere and Tsundere tropes, as well as the Aunt and Uncle having their own kinks and misunderstanding the MCs' costume when they discover it.
The focus should be more on the management of his non-hero life and ways it can all go wrong as he tries to find balance.
I look forward to see where this goes, be safe and have fun.