VN Ren'Py Abandoned Jezebels Curse [v0.25] [DVM]

[raziul]

This is another one of those where the dev tries to please everyone. I'm not interested in half stories, because usually if NTR is optional, the non-NTR side is completely dull and I'm not even interested in exploring it. If the game wasn't NTR oriented, then that shit wouldn't be put in the game. So the non-NTR side rarely gets the same level of events as the NTR side. And I don't trust any of the devs who try to push it, when at some point it usually leaks and shit spills over to the non-NTR side too. Or the shit is just skippable.

get help dude. Its a fucking game. Made of pixels and most probably written by some middle aged male dude. If it isnt your kink then just dont play it but for gods sake stop bothering other people with your whining.

 

[Griev]

I'll just make a suggestion about Patreon. It might be better to reconsider your pricing strat for Patrons. Having the lowest tier $7 then highest being $22.50 with no previous games completed that we can see is a bit much. You're asking for more than Xenorav, one of the best Devs out there. He creates the best renders and animations for his lewd scenes, and you're asking for more than him for his first 2 tiers. I'd lower that if I were you and maybe you could draw in more supporters. But as is, you're simply asking for more money for potential supports than those Devs that have superior products and proven track records, it's gonna be a struggle.

 

[OhGodNotAgain]

Alright so I gave this a try because of the proportions, the sisters also pretty hot but I would not dream of expecting much of this letting alone supporting it in it's current state.

The game has no music, never a good sign.

You notice a failure to have a capital at the beginning of sentences within some of the very few starting lines.

I know it's the first update but the purpose of a first update is to make you care, why do new devs expect to be supported when they fail to show they can deliver, blueballing only works for masterful story tellers.

It looks to be split 50/50 choosing between incest and NTR, so that means half content for a lot of people, in fact some of "vanilla" content was a dream about the sister laughing at the MC's tiny dick, I mean I know people are into that but again most aren't.

I don't consider anywhere near NTR but I find it funny that in the non-ntr route a guy falling unconscious on top of your sisters chest got further than the MC

I actually have a high tolerance for stupid MC's but the MC is not simply stupid, he doesn't act like a real person, no one see's their topless sister hiding in an alley and screams out "are you a whore, where you graped" I am not sure if graped was intentional or not.

The dev should also be aware patreon doesn't like step siblings.

You had the sister stop 2 separate attacks in the first update, better prioritize what to focus on.

Also it's another one of those games that's set in Japan but there was like one background asian.

If the dev didn't use an AI to write this then work at their writing, write the protagonist more like a real person, spend a bit more time on their relationship and the curse, maybe make it a family curse, say the curse feeds on taboo and why she's horny for bro, add the mom, people love moms. If you're going to stick to Japan say they have a Japanese grandmother or something and background characters should almost always be Japanese.

Now as for the NTR, seems like the 50/50 thing is going to be a mess unless you break your balls working at this.

Sounds like a dumpster fire that will only attract ntr fans and anything vanilla will be breadcrumbs at best. LOL at those patreon tiers.

 

[Saint Blackmoor]

Welcome to Jezebels Curse
You take on the role of a young man studying abroad in Japan. One day, his beautiful girlfriend, Lily, comes to visit him.
Little does he know it is not just a random visit.

Lily set out to vanquish an evil entity residing in John's area.
Lily's powers? telekinesis from mana {sexual energy}.
Will Lily reach success? Or will she fail?​

Good luck with the game. It looks interesting.

 

[joryh]

There are enough boobs in the images to set up an enormous dairy

Yeah. And nasty udders was all I saw, immediately scrambling for that iggy button.

 

[JaszMan]

Do you get to control Lily?. That name always makes me think of the demon Lilith, in some religious texts Lilith Was Adam's Wife before Eve but her actions cursed her to become a demon for eternity. Lily...I wonder

 

[AnimeHentaiGamer]

nice love ntr games

 

[Overlord070]

This is another one of those where the dev tries to please everyone. I'm not interested in half stories, because usually if NTR is optional, the non-NTR side is completely dull and I'm not even interested in exploring it. If the game wasn't NTR oriented, then that shit wouldn't be put in the game. So the non-NTR side rarely gets the same level of events as the NTR side. And I don't trust any of the devs who try to push it, when at some point it usually leaks and shit spills over to the non-NTR side too. Or the shit is just skippable.

If its half to half the ntr part always get more, cause they don't care playing everithing. But the no-ntr get just the the no-ntr half.

Some VNs can pull it off but considering the MC is retarded as well, this will be on of those where the "vanilla" side is limited to kisses, dreams and maybe a blowjob waaaay down the line while the NTR route the LI gets destroyed and their back blown out very early on.

 

[Pr0GamerJohnny]

Is 16 or 45?

 

[5554432]

Does the bitch with the watermelon titties get to cuck us? If not then MEH.

 

[AJBit]

Barely any content for either routes. not an NTR fan at all but I made every single NTR choice and that route didn't even have any content either. Only good thing about this game is the massive milkers.

 

[yoyomistro]

Holy capitalization and punctuation, Batman.

 

[MemeKiddo420]

This is another one of those where the dev tries to please everyone. I'm not interested in half stories, because usually if NTR is optional, the non-NTR side is completely dull and I'm not even interested in exploring it. If the game wasn't NTR oriented, then that shit wouldn't be put in the game. So the non-NTR side rarely gets the same level of events as the NTR side. And I don't trust any of the devs who try to push it, when at some point it usually leaks and shit spills over to the non-NTR side too. Or the shit is just skippable.

Then play the hundreds of other games that don’t feature ntr at all lmao

 

[th3n]

Then play the hundreds of other games that don’t feature ntr at all lmao

That's why we ask and wait for the dev to answer. If devs dont want this topic, the put it clear in the thread. Don't want to waste other peoples time arguing about ntr, but if the center of the game is the NTR then put it clear and the non-ntr people just flew away from the start.

 

[MemeKiddo420]

Is 16 or 45?

both

 

[vs2011xyz]

Android update pls.

 

[Tverdislav Yablochko]

NTR, non-NTR... Just look at those saggy tits!

 

[JenMistress]

Well, this was an interesting start, and very interested in what is going to happen to Lilly along the way. To be honest, kinda wish Lilly was the MC, kinda like her better, but still, very curious to see where this goes. Thank you so very much for this!!!

 

[DVM_]

Alright so I gave this a try because of the proportions, the sisters also pretty hot but I would not dream of expecting much of this letting alone supporting it in it's current state.

The game has no music, never a good sign.

You notice a failure to have a capital at the beginning of sentences within some of the very few starting lines.

I know it's the first update but the purpose of a first update is to make you care, why do new devs expect to be supported when they fail to show they can deliver, blueballing only works for masterful story tellers.

It looks to be split 50/50 choosing between incest and NTR, so that means half content for a lot of people, in fact some of "vanilla" content was a dream about the sister laughing at the MC's tiny dick, I mean I know people are into that but again most aren't.

I don't consider anywhere near NTR but I find it funny that in the non-ntr route a guy falling unconscious on top of your sisters chest got further than the MC

I actually have a high tolerance for stupid MC's but the MC is not simply stupid, he doesn't act like a real person, no one see's their topless sister hiding in an alley and screams out "are you a whore, where you graped" I am not sure if graped was intentional or not.

The dev should also be aware patreon doesn't like step siblings.

You had the sister stop 2 separate attacks in the first update, better prioritize what to focus on.

Also it's another one of those games that's set in Japan but there was like one background asian.

If the dev didn't use an AI to write this then work at their writing, write the protagonist more like a real person, spend a bit more time on their relationship and the curse, maybe make it a family curse, say the curse feeds on taboo and why she's horny for bro, add the mom, people love moms. If you're going to stick to Japan say they have a Japanese grandmother or something and background characters should almost always be Japanese.

Now as for the NTR, seems like the 50/50 thing is going to be a mess unless you break your balls working at this.

noted honestly i never play VN with music on; if its something people want to see then i can see what i can add

 

[AntiVeraX]

First impressions my dude... Grammar is really, really bad!

Clothing is bad, the bodies are clipping through in a lot of cases.

No sound, no music at all, not sure since when this is even acceptable... Barebones ren'py with minimal work done to it.

This whole project feels like someone had fun in Daz and made a decent female model and decided to put a 'game' around it later on with zero -or at the most: minimal- knowledge about coding, project management.

The fact that your versioning doesn't follow any standards also says a lot.

Finally, and just to point out the problems with incorrect grammar... my favorite sentence from the demo:



I honestly did a quick mirriam search to see if the Grape as the fruit could be used as an adjective/verb... and to my surprise it could, but probably not what you wanted to convey...