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Thanks for the info but this belongs in the reviews section. To get there copy pasta text then press the review star.Having finally played the game now, can say that in general it works and seems to move in good direction.
Renders:
Are good enough for characters that matter to us, Kimberly looks especially nice in comparison to other women. So in that sense, whenever the other characters compliment her and single her out as being the best looking it feels believable.
Writing:
Cons:
I am definitely not a good writer, nor is English my first language but I wanted to comment a few things. As a whole the writing is good enough but can definitely feel awkward at times. For example: "A little while later, Kimberly is arriving at school". It is a sentence that when I read it, it somehow bothers me. Maybe just the fact that it exists in first place? We know she is going to school and then next see her there, so already starting with "Living in a trailer....." would be sufficient enough? There were other cases like this where sentences individually felt a bit off but to me that is fine, as long as
Pros:
The setup for her situation and motivations is believable enough to set up her corruption path. Unlike the japanese porn level of stupid "Oh, they have a video of me masturbating or they took a picture without my consent, guess I have to become a sex slave now", despite having a million options at their hand. In here there is urgency, she has only one friend and yeah, has to manage school, work and taking care of little brother and her mother. Sure, there might be options for her but it is a porn game and this is good enough.
What I liked the most and what was done really well was Kimberlys inner thoughts towards the older men and how disgusting they feel to her when they obviously stare at her or try to force themselves on her. I could not immediately remember other games, where it was done so consistently.
Maybe the only thing I would have preferred was more comments towards her first experience with the dick. Think she just said "It's gross"?. Would not mind seeing more more of her negative thoughts towards how it feels/tastes/looks and. Feel like it would be a good contrast later to when she is fully corrupted (if this is the path for her) and how she then actively craves for it and loves their dicks.
As last thing I would comment that I liked to see how Kimberly actively showed her dislike towards any sexual actions and also actively trying to get out of those, especially how she found the excuse to not do things with grandpa for one evening because she could herself watch over her brother. It makes the slow steady corruption all the more rewarding.
Characters:
Can't say too much, have had little time with most of them. I guess the main 3 ones are also the best: Finn, Skroob and Jethro. Also bunch more introduced in short amount of time and honestly could be too many but as long as there is focus on select few, while the rest act as support to the main ones then it will be okay.
Was thinking about it but then again felt the game was so fresh that my rating might change later. But I guess the the rating is not permanent so... yeah, could always later update it.Thanks for the info but this belongs in the reviews section. To get there copy pasta text then press the review star.
Yeah no worries, the star rating system is very flawed that way and old reviews don't do never versions justice. Everything is timestamped tho so most people with some active brains cells are usually able to figure it out.Was thinking about it but then again felt the game was so fresh that my rating might change later. But I guess the the rating is not permanent so... yeah, could always later update it.
How close are you to getting the update out?Thanks for the info but this belongs in the reviews section. To get there copy pasta text then press the review star.
I am having some slight difficulties with Daz at the moment. As soon as I release the update, I am going to upgrade my computer. I’m hoping to release the update in the next week or two.How close are you to getting the update out?
I greatly appreciate your post and thank you. One thing I will say is I am an English speaker and I still need assistance at times. That’s because I’m not always writing the correct thing. However, on the parts you said “a little while later…” those are necessary transitions and allow for the reader to understand that some time went by and we are moving to a new scene. I write more like a novel and I get it that it can be odd for some people. Also, some people need more of an explanation than others. There is someone who helps me who wanted me to make sure, in several different sentences, that everyone knew Jethro and Kimberly were not related. So some need more than others.Having finally played the game now, can say that in general it works and seems to move in good direction.
Renders:
Are good enough for characters that matter to us, Kimberly looks especially nice in comparison to other women. So in that sense, whenever the other characters compliment her and single her out as being the best looking it feels believable.
Writing:
Cons:
I am definitely not a good writer, nor is English my first language but I wanted to comment a few things. As a whole the writing is good enough but can definitely feel awkward at times. For example: "A little while later, Kimberly is arriving at school". It is a sentence that when I read it, it somehow bothers me. Maybe just the fact that it exists in first place? We know she is going to school and then next see her there, so already starting with "Living in a trailer....." would be sufficient enough? There were other cases like this where sentences individually felt a bit off but to me that is fine, as long as the thought itself in the message is fine.
Pros:
The setup for her situation and motivations is believable enough to set up her corruption path. Unlike the japanese porn level of stupid "Oh, they have a video of me masturbating" or "They took a picture without my consent, guess I have to become a sex slave now", despite having a million options at their hand. In here there is urgency, she has only one friend and yeah, has to manage school, work and taking care of little brother and her mother. Sure, there might be options for her but it is a porn game and this scenario is good enough.
What I liked the most and what was done really well was Kimberlys inner thoughts towards the older men and how disgusting they feel to her when they obviously stare at her or try to force themselves on her. I could not immediately remember other games, where it was done so consistently.
Maybe the only thing I would have preferred was more comments towards her first experience with the dick. Think she just said "It's gross"?. Would not mind seeing more more of her negative thoughts towards how it feels/tastes/looks and. Feel like it would be a good contrast later to when she is fully corrupted (if this is the path for her) and how she then actively craves for it and loves their dicks.
As last thing I would comment that I liked to see how Kimberly actively showed her dislike towards any sexual actions and also actively trying to get out of those, especially how she found the excuse to not do things with grandpa for one evening because she could herself watch over her brother. It makes the slow steady corruption all the more rewarding.
Characters:
Can't say too much, have had little time with most of them. I guess the main 3 ones are also the best: Finn, Skroob and Jethro. Also bunch more introduced in short amount of time and honestly could be too many but as long as there is focus on select few, while the rest act as support to the main ones then it will be okay.
Then as a little side comment I also liked how Kimberly was given different clothes for school. I am a sucker for corruption that is shown through changes in clothing as well. Where it can initially get progressively worse at her work places/school and then later carry on to her life outside of it. Like her choosing skimpier clothes willingly in every day life.
Understandable.I greatly appreciate your post and thank you. One thing I will say is I am an English speaker and I still need assistance at times. That’s because I’m not always writing the correct thing. However, on the parts you said “a little while later…” those are necessary transitions and allow for the reader to understand that some time went by and we are moving to a new scene. I write more like a novel and I get it that it can be odd for some people. Also, some people need more of an explanation than others. There is someone who helps me who wanted me to make sure, in several different sentences, that everyone knew Jethro and Kimberly were not related. So some need more than others.
Despite the lack of corruption from her side, at least it will have some progress then with her having orgasm. This direction would not be my personal preference but I respect the vision.I don’t like games where the girl becomes a sex loving slut. She will have an orgasm, but I don’t plan on making her like it and want it…ever.
I love the idea of a reluctant orgasm where her body betrays her and has a party of it's own without her consent.I don’t like games where the girl becomes a sex loving slut. She will have an orgasm, but I don’t plan on making her like it and want it…ever.