RPGM Ren'Py Laura: Lustful Secrets [Ch.2 v0.3 P2] [Dark Anu]

[Obranyi]

If you don't like it, do better. No need for unnecessary criticism. We do not know under what conditions the developer is working.

If somebody doesn't like update keep the silence or what? Another boring comment, do it better, we do not know under what conditions the developer is working, what a heck, need more time, some problems in real life for example ok, we will wait, me and another gamers said that last update was boring, almost all animations were on gym session for workout, previous two updates were hotter and cooler, I hope developer read healthy critics and will make next update way interesting, and you should not criticize people for their opinion, that calls freedom.

 

[michelita]

If somebody doesn't like update keep the silence or what?
you should not criticize people for their opinion

You're saying you like to give criticism but can't take any yourself. If people think your opinion is shit then we have every right to call you on it too.

Laura LS is mainly about story and character development, which there was plenty to speak of in the last update. If you're only looking for sex scenes you're in the wrong place. This is an adult game, not a porn movie.

 

[DqnkSpeed]

You're saying you like to give criticism but can't take any yourself. If people think your opinion is shit then we have every right to call you on it too.

Laura LS is mainly about story and character development, which there was plenty to speak of in the last update. If you're only looking for sex scenes you're in the wrong place. This is an adult game, not a porn movie.

Its not that he cant take criticism from you or anyone else, its just that his opinion same as mine is objectively true and yours sucks.Literally 8/10 games on this adult site and any other ones have character development and also deliver sex content from update to update without failing to remain realistic.You just have very low standards on adult games.Milfy city, the visit, family at home, away from home and thousand more do this perfectly.

 

[ssmarcos]

Its not that he cant take criticism from you or anyone else, its just that his opinion same as mine is objectively true and yours sucks.Literally 8/10 games on this adult site and any other ones have character development and also deliver sex content from update to update without failing to remain realistic.You just have very low standards on adult games.Milfy city, the visit, family at home, away from home and thousand more do this perfectly.

"Milfy city, the visit, family at home, away from home "
Milfy City literally has the abandoned tag because the developer does not release content.
Family at Home has sex scenes that just happened out of nowhere... terrible writing
away from home took forever to get laid with certain characters...
If you want to critique their work at least give good feed back. Don't just say not enough sex... Why not just wait for more updates to pass as the game progresses more of those scenes you want will happen eventually. Btw your opinion does not = true just because you say it...

 

[DqnkSpeed]

"Milfy city, the visit, family at home, away from home "
Milfy City literally has the abandoned tag because the developer does not release content.
Family at Home has sex scenes that just happened out of nowhere... terrible writing
away from home took forever to get laid with certain characters...
If you want to critique their work at least give good feed back. Don't just say not enough sex... Why not just wait for more updates to pass as the game progresses more of those scenes you want will happen eventually. Btw your opinion does not = true just because you say it...

What the fuck does milfy city being abandoned have to do with the great quality of every update of the game in the past?If I have to wait months to play a new update with no sex scenes and just character development only for the sake of it then I might as well just stick to actual popular pc games that execute every aspect perfectly and have fun.Taking an adult game that serious is sad.

 

[kissloveD]

there are plenty of other games to play guys this argument leads you no where

 

[Kanis9x]

Will the game have pregnacy content?

 

[groove5741]

When will the new update come?

 

[Mac182]

The rendering process is a little late because a lot of characters on the beach but I will keep the date on January 25th.

 

[Mac182]

He said that

The rendering process is a little late because a lot of characters on the beach but I will keep the date on January 25th.

 

[Mac182]

 

[michelita]

The rendering process is a little late because a lot of characters on the beach but I will keep the date on January 25th.

U mean February 25th like next week? or possibly March

 

[Dark Anu]

Has the Portuguese translation been updated?

I'm sorry for the delay, it's just lack of time.

Will the game have pregnacy content?

Yes, in the future!

When will the new update come?

He said that

U mean February 25th like next week? or possibly March

February hahaha.... I am lost in time

 

[ShawnLee95Gamer]

I played a few minutes. Here's my thoughts.

Pros:
1. Isometric graphics of the map is refreshing
2. Amount of locations on map shows ability to create a believable world (at least physically)

Cons:
1. Writing is poor - (more later)
2. Proportions of women is off - Kim Kardashian's ass is not a good indicator of a good hot body. Go look at the Olympics athletes in Tokyo if you want to see what perfect female asses should look like. Kim's ass is all fat and plastic surgery, which is gross. It's not natural. Go to reddit /r/gonewild if you still can't figure out. There's no excuse for not knowing what a shapely ass should look like)

Writing is the core of any narrative driven game experiences, such as the ones here in h-games. There's a lot of issues with the writing in this game, I will list them in order of pressing matter.

1. Lack of characterization for wife, daughter, and husband - Who are they? What does wife do? What does daughter do? Where are they living? What kind of neighborhood is it? What does wife want in her life? Is she a homemaker (unemployed leecher)? Is daughter a student? Does she have a job? Does she have a boyfriend? What is wife scared of? What makes her happy? etc. etc. Learn how to do it:

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2. Lack of real meaningful dialog between characters - Biggest examples being the conversation that the MC had with his wife when he told her "Hey babe, without asking you, I am going to have some stranger live in our house". You need more life experiences or watch more TV if you think the way you portrayed that conversation is how real people talk. It's completely bogus
3. Too many side characters - I don't give a shit about the neighbor when you can't even get the 4 characters you have correct: MC, wife, daughter, and Marketing Consultant. Too many characters don't make your game better, well developed characters do.

Overall the writing in this game is just poor. It sounds like someone with no life experiences trying to emulate real life. The first thing that jumped out to me was when the Boss chewing MC out in the office. It's 100% not believable and not how real corporate BS meetings go down (at least here in America where I work).

You seem to know alot.....maybe you should become a developer yourself?

...this days theres only critics and not enough developers ...

 

[Alea iacta est]

I played a few minutes. Here's my thoughts.

Pros:
1. Isometric graphics of the map is refreshing
2. Amount of locations on map shows ability to create a believable world (at least physically)

Cons:
1. Writing is poor - (more later)
2. Proportions of women is off - Kim Kardashian's ass is not a good indicator of a good hot body. Go look at the Olympics athletes in Tokyo if you want to see what perfect female asses should look like. Kim's ass is all fat and plastic surgery, which is gross. It's not natural. Go to reddit /r/gonewild if you still can't figure out. There's no excuse for not knowing what a shapely ass should look like)

Writing is the core of any narrative driven game experiences, such as the ones here in h-games. There's a lot of issues with the writing in this game, I will list them in order of pressing matter.

1. Lack of characterization for wife, daughter, and husband - Who are they? What does wife do? What does daughter do? Where are they living? What kind of neighborhood is it? What does wife want in her life? Is she a homemaker (unemployed leecher)? Is daughter a student? Does she have a job? Does she have a boyfriend? What is wife scared of? What makes her happy? etc. etc. Learn how to do it:

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. Google "How to write a good character"
2. Lack of real meaningful dialog between characters - Biggest examples being the conversation that the MC had with his wife when he told her "Hey babe, without asking you, I am going to have some stranger live in our house". You need more life experiences or watch more TV if you think the way you portrayed that conversation is how real people talk. It's completely bogus
3. Too many side characters - I don't give a shit about the neighbor when you can't even get the 4 characters you have correct: MC, wife, daughter, and Marketing Consultant. Too many characters don't make your game better, well developed characters do.

Overall the writing in this game is just poor. It sounds like someone with no life experiences trying to emulate real life. The first thing that jumped out to me was when the Boss chewing MC out in the office. It's 100% not believable and not how real corporate BS meetings go down (at least here in America where I work).

Or you wank on it or you do not... cut all this crap.

 

[DqnkSpeed]

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Overview:
This game is about a quiet suburban family who receive an unwanted visitor and his presence causes a sudden change in the family's behavior. The question is can a butterfly flapping its wings really cause a hurricane? Play as Laura a devoted wife and discover for yourself...​

Thread Updated: 2022-01-31
Release Date: 2022-01-31
Developer: Dark Anu

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Version: 0.7
OS: Windows
Language: English
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Extras: Guide/Walkthrough - Spanish Translation* - Portuguese Translation* - Skip intro mod* - Wallpapers - Save

*This port/version/android is unofficial and not released by the developer. Download at your own risk.

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I realised Laura is a copy of the girl from Manila Shaw

 

[Kotobiki]

Dark Anu
Okay, played it and here is my critique, hopefully you can get something out of it:

I agree with Cleanfeel for the most part character writing wise. Whille we do not necessarilly need the characters to have some internal monologues telling us their dreams and ambitions every couple lines, they should be fleshed out more, they seem just there for sake of making things happen leaving you like "How???". In example, when FMC gets caught masturbating her deadbent decision that it was her son spying on her and never even thinking of the possibility it was anyone else was not believable and in my honest opionion kinda annoying since it drags on for a long time to boot. You should try the characters to feel a bit more organic, have in your head whats their goals, preferences, etc before you write the story that way even if these things aren't elaborated on too much the interactions still feel more fluid and real since they're already characterized in your head while writing.

Work on your grammar a bit, that will also help the writing be more digestible even at times where the events aren't realistic. Being able to coherently convey what is going on will make even nonsense seem like half sense, this alone will make a bit of a difference in your writing quality.

Another big negative in my opinion is the linear nature of the game. Don't get me wrong, I am in favor of it being a game easy to get through, its a fap not a competition, no reason to overcomplicate it. However the RPG ish nature of the game of you being able to walk around gives a lot of opportunities which the game neglects. You could have added "easter egg" situations where walking around and interacting with something at certain time will actually get you a new interaction or scene, like lets say if you went out with FMC and snooped behind the bar at certain point you could catch a guy getting a blowjob, or if you looked at the gym after certain point FMC could comment on her wondering if the guys are as big down there as they are in their other muscles which would also serve as exposition on FMC starting to "surrender" to her hidden lust. Little details like this would give much more value to the "interactive/explorable" world you have. At least where im up to I have found no such of these easter eggs despite being over halfway through and having interacted with a lot of things in the map, if you have added some then i'd suggest to add even more because the map def feels empty and unresponsive since as I mentioned I haven't really gotten anything extra worth notice despte my interactions.

Now here is a big prop I wanna give on a generally overlooked topic; FMC's friend is something you got right. Most games neglect to add that one friend which helps the FMC break their boundaries. This is a not rare relationship in real life friend circles where there is always that one guy/girl who is more uninhibited and tries to get their friends in on the craze too, and games centered on cheating or NTR are perfect scenarios to make use of these kind of characters. And you did use it, and used her effectively to boot she is a more cemented character than the main character, you can tell how shed interact with others or what her motivations are pretty easily. So props on that one and if you make another game I definetely suggest you do not drope this character archetype as it is benefitial for the narrative and you did it rather well here already imho.

 

[Kotobiki]

Finally cleanfeel's ass complaint does seem goofy, but there is some merit to it too imho. It is not rather to not do asses like that, everyone has their own tastes after all and imo they dont look bad at all (and I believe majority would agree with me here lol). It is that there should be a bit more variety, pretty much all the girls have same ass type with the difference being its smaller or bigger depending if they're thinner or larger than FMC. I personally would recommend there be more than just 3 girls (in example, could of shown the Priest's wife when your friend was talking about him) and with more variety in proportions. I'd recommend The Office as a reference for huge asses like you like but that still give a bit of a different feel than the ones in your game.

The similarity in shape's aside, I actually do wanna praise your character design. They are some of the most mainstream attractive models which i've seen with this engine imo, only few like Pandora's Box and The Office have done notoriously better and it is evident they are working with more resources so you doing this much with less resources and experiences is still commendable.

You def have something going on, just work a bit more, analyze other games or series which youd like your own works to be more like, etc, and you will be able to make some great products.

 

[Deleted member 3789640]

Is there anal in this?

 

[Anzonio]

I love how the game is proceeding keep up this content right here, cheating and some sort of cuck husband,i love it