VN Ren'Py Abandoned Laws of Love [v0.1] [TaleWizz]

[AlBetGam]

Renders look nice and premise sounds interesting, but could definitely use a proofreader.

 

[L3z1l3]

My OCD is triggered by the missing spaces after punctuations in every single sentence...

 

[WuzzyFuzzy]

If instead of saying these [this] nonsense when every game is released, you would [should] spend your time on something else, [.] [Y]you would definitely be in [a] better places[.]

 

[EXN]

i mean.... this is exactly "Laws of Attraction" (Choices mobile game by Pixelberry Studios)
Plagiarism is not cool at all

 

[L3z1l3]

Almost feels like someone else made/rendered the banner. The quality of the actual renders don't feel as good as what the banner implies. Not that the renders are bad, or anything.

In my opinion the renders on the screenshots look better than the ones on the banner.

 

[MissFortune]

In my opinion the renders on the screenshots look better than the ones on the banner.

That's subjective, of course. On a purely technical level, the renders used in the banner are better. Lighting is a lot more dynamic and make good use of the shadows. And while that exists in a lot of the renders within the VN, it's not used as much or as well. It's only a minor thing I noticed, not trying to detract from objectively good renders, obviously.

 

[Dogorti]

If instead of saying these nonsense when every game is released, you would spend your time on something else, you would definitely be in better places

At this point i'm convinced that he's some kind of experimental ai or an undercover fbi agent. Who knows?

 

[Roldez2893]

The premise isn't bad, the renders are decent, but the writing (I'm gonna be blunt) is bad. You could benefit from hiring a proofreader.

 

[CULTHERO]

i mean.... this is exactly "Laws of Attraction" (Choices mobile game by Pixelberry Studios)
Plagiarism is not cool at all

Haven't played the game yet however the overview is so similar lol

 

[Jnx]

Pretty brave boasting the default ass renpy UI AND terrible English in the previews

 

[EXN]

Haven't played the game yet however the overview is so similar lol

not only the overview... the story is 99% the same (including the choices you can make as a character)

 

[Chimba]

A surprise job offer takes you from your small town to New York's most prestigious firm.
Can you handle the highest levels of law....and love?

ok is this the same dev, or a 1x1 copy?

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[micojive]

Renders are quite good, and the girls are smoking.

Whoever wrote the script needs to watch a few episodes of suits because this just isnt how law works and is pretty silly. Also like people have already mentioned this needs a proofreader asap.

 

[Gabbagul]

Only the fourth preview picture has correct spelling and grammar, every other pic is Engrish. Please seek out a proofreader. Your game looks great so far otherwise, keep up the good work and good luck to you.

 

[Impious Monk]

Nice, another lawyer protagonist. Good luck to Dev.

 

[twiztid]

Even they can write out a proper sentence with spaces.

 

[Kond]

I think grammar receives more hate than NTR nowadays.
And this is why i usually dont like narrators on games, here the narrator actually blocks the view, this is the perfect example of "show, dont tell", and maybe the player doenst have the same opinion.

 

[Blernblern]

This could be something but desperately needs a proofreader. There's just no way a lawyer would use "u" instead of "you."

I know this is a minor gripe but then again I'm a guy who watched the first X-Files movie and decided that this is completely unrealistic since Mulder didn't have a wool cap on in the Antarctic.

 

[ghosthog]

As EXN says this is completely plagiarized...other than they must have typed the script in by hand in order to massacre spelling, punctuation and spacing.

 

[Kond]

i mean.... this is exactly "Laws of Attraction" (Choices mobile game by Pixelberry Studios)
Plagiarism is not cool at all

In dev's defense it's not exactly the same, is just 100% similar