- Jul 12, 2017
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A real gem this one, a true work of art. Fap material but with depth. Who would have thought it could exist?
Bravo!
Two thumbs up.
Bravo!
Two thumbs up.
- Thread starter naughtyroad
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Right, so I've got the following written down:(...) my criticism is out of love for his/her work so it doesn't become a faded memory like other game's that I've grown to love over the years.
- No milking.
- Get some actual ideas.
- Stop being lazy and boring.
- Dialog isn't worth reading, cut to the fucking already.
- Jul 12, 2017
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I’d also like to add it was a bold move to draw women with such facial characteristics, and I’m referring to their noses, when everyone’s expecting the perfect girl.
Well, it paid off.
You made them unique. I must confess I wasn’t exactly thrilled at first. But now... Their gaze, I simply can’t get it out of my mind. OK, their tits too.
Well, it paid off.
You made them unique. I must confess I wasn’t exactly thrilled at first. But now... Their gaze, I simply can’t get it out of my mind. OK, their tits too.
The dialog isn't the problem, its the fact that it drags on were the scenes feel empty and pointless, if you want to build up to something worth a damn, then present these moments between each of the girls in a separate fashion were the MC doesn't feel like a third wheel, take each of them on a romantic separate date or put them in random path of lust filled moments with the MC, if the story just drags on with the girls argue like a old married couple that goes on and on in every CH and only asking the MC his option on every damn thing, then he might as well be there therapist then a love interest, just some food for thought.
This game is so good, thanks dev! Not the usual son with mother and two sisters starts a harem because the dad went missing for some reason.
- Sep 12, 2017
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JUST FOR CREATOR AN SERIOUS STORYTELLING FANS
Sorry but English its not my mother tongue so ill try to explain myself the best i can. First of all, and most important. Awesome game. Really nice chapter; funny, interesting, deep some times and of course, the usual hot moments thats keep us coming back (mate, that lake scene... less is more sometimes). But second (always the "but") just for feedback, and on a constructive way. The feel on the father, its been quite strange. I totally buy the daughters behaviour, motivations and twisted but delicious paths. Even the coworkers with al that fetish menu. So the oniric resources and traumatic backgrounds. Whatever. But that father is becoming less credible, a puppet even. I mean, is supossed to be the protagonist, and is a blurry character. Its quite passive, its like not taking responsability, and i can understand it in the laboral situation but not in home. At least for me im losing contact with him. The better stories are these were you can relate, and even in the arousal part he is becoming a secondary. This can be right, maybe is this way you want to develope it, making more a groupal travel. Its your choice, but be careful, maybe when less expected he will develope a face and fall into the third person and we all want to watch the spin off centered on the daughters travel of self discovery and forget about the not so "choice maker". The italic part its just for laughs, but be aware. Still and amazing new chapter, thanks for whats already a "classic", and for me a real Top3 of all times. Continue this hard work, we are all supporting you, even when we lose our nails waiting. But, you know, abstinence is hard when the shit is damn good. Best.
Sorry but English its not my mother tongue so ill try to explain myself the best i can. First of all, and most important. Awesome game. Really nice chapter; funny, interesting, deep some times and of course, the usual hot moments thats keep us coming back (mate, that lake scene... less is more sometimes). But second (always the "but") just for feedback, and on a constructive way. The feel on the father, its been quite strange. I totally buy the daughters behaviour, motivations and twisted but delicious paths. Even the coworkers with al that fetish menu. So the oniric resources and traumatic backgrounds. Whatever. But that father is becoming less credible, a puppet even. I mean, is supossed to be the protagonist, and is a blurry character. Its quite passive, its like not taking responsability, and i can understand it in the laboral situation but not in home. At least for me im losing contact with him. The better stories are these were you can relate, and even in the arousal part he is becoming a secondary. This can be right, maybe is this way you want to develope it, making more a groupal travel. Its your choice, but be careful, maybe when less expected he will develope a face and fall into the third person and we all want to watch the spin off centered on the daughters travel of self discovery and forget about the not so "choice maker". The italic part its just for laughs, but be aware. Still and amazing new chapter, thanks for whats already a "classic", and for me a real Top3 of all times. Continue this hard work, we are all supporting you, even when we lose our nails waiting. But, you know, abstinence is hard when the shit is damn good. Best.
- Aug 26, 2016
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Don't blame the genre (unless it's Futa), blame those opportunist shitty dev who exploit the popularity M/S & B/S genre. There's also many shitty F/D & S/S genre, which abandoned due to poor attraction.
- Mar 26, 2019
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Never change, you glorious bastard
- May 20, 2020
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Disagree. The F is obviously conflicted by the pull of two opposing forces: Growing attraction to his beautiful Ds and being unable to help himself responding to their increasing advances as well as terribly missing their M, who he sees in them. Opposing force: the need to protect them, to be as good a caretaker as he can, his fear that in any way taking advantage of the situation would push them away. These girls are all he has. How could he just caually throw that away by falling prey to his needs/lust? I think it is perfectly balanced - the desire and the fear - the rewards and the consequences of falling for the temptation. It's masterfully done. If you feel like you can't relate to the MC anymore it's because you can't understand his struggle and because you expect fantasy whereas Naughty is creating something akin to heightend reality.
I don't blame anyone or anything (sorry for my english), I'm just tired of all harem games and I wanted to give the dev a cheer for doing something different, whats wrong with that?
- Apr 24, 2020
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I understand that realism is a core factor in the story, but 2 girls related to each other who are going at it with each other with no sign of regret or remorse while thirsty for the MC but not taking any leap for that to happen and then playing innocent with the feelings of the MC comes off as nonsense and wasted effort, the MC could lead in this effort but it takes the NPC's to move forward as well and that's were it falls on it's face, because there's no sign of progression in the story or any real feeling of relationship growth.
- Mar 26, 2019
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Excellent analysis - LoML is a story of how this family deals with loss and forbidden desire, and Naughty is doing a superb job of immersing us into their healing. F is struggling with many competing emotions and overt seduction of the girls isn't in his makeup.
- Jun 2, 2019
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You seem to think you would write a much better story, so why don't you just go do that and spare us...
- Jul 13, 2018
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The girls are only related to each other if you want them to be at the beginning. Otherwise they are just two different girls who were adopted by the MC. If you can't see any progression for the two in the story so far then you're one of the few. The rest of us see plenty of progression from the two wards, especially considering the huge weight Macy has gotten of her conscious and Denise allowing Sir to progressively go from applying ointment for her rash while covered in a towel to giving her half-nude massages while she insists he masturbate for his health. Get with it.
While I hate to be that writer that has to explain his story for the benefit of the reader, I'm gonna take a leap here and assume you skipped quite a bit on that part, given your earlier comments.
Your reasoning is flawed as the girls aren't related with each other or the MC at all unless you modify the game, but in hopping through the stale dialog (and who can blame you, really), you missed that there's in fact motivation there that's not hung up on non-existent kinship.
Just a thought, but have you considered providing feedback on a story you didn't actually pay attention to is not a very useful experience for either side of this conversation?
in the words of Heath Ledgers Joker "if your good at something never do it for free"
- Mar 26, 2019
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W.C. Fields may be more fitting:
“If you can't dazzle them with brilliance, [you know the rest].”