- Nov 17, 2020
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EchoFoxtrot A quick suggestion, on the transition screens, don't just use a white background, use a black one. Two things it does, it blinds anybody playing in a dark room and it makes the text on that screen really hard to read, even with the slightly shaded textbox you are using.
Also, in the scene where the MC meets all the soccer girls and takes them home, when it is just him, Jessie and Amira, she asks him some questions about his service, he suddenly asks "When did you get out?" without any pretext letting us know that she escaped Afghanistan. At first I thought you mislabeled that line and it was Amira asking him when he got out of the army, Very odd dialogue.
Also, in the scene where the MC meets all the soccer girls and takes them home, when it is just him, Jessie and Amira, she asks him some questions about his service, he suddenly asks "When did you get out?" without any pretext letting us know that she escaped Afghanistan. At first I thought you mislabeled that line and it was Amira asking him when he got out of the army, Very odd dialogue.
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