Hey guys i need your opinion on my review. I hope i will not shock anyone with this but that's me being honest. No disrespect intented btw, but constructive opinion i have prepared for 24h long and difficult tough processing.
You asked for it so let me tell you what I think. My analysis will not be whether I agree with you or not by constructively criticizing your critique.
First disclaimer to read my following comments is that I think very few people are actually able to give an objective and valuable review for work in progress projects. Many times people fail to understand that any story can totally change in the last minute and sometimes totally awesome/terrible stories became terrible/awesome just in the last page (The novel, not the movie, I am legend is a great example in my opinion of a barely passable novel written just to make a fantastic ending). With this in mind:
Your good points:
1) It was kind of silly for you to mention the spoilers part. If you have just said the eyes are amazing, nobody would have arrived to the conclusion that eyes matter to the story. It would have been understood that "eyes in this novel look amazing". Beside, most reviews include a bit spoiler. Having said that, what is really wrong is that you mention what you think is a spoiler before the warning. The problem with spoilers is that they cannot be undone, so if you think your review includes spoilers you should have included that before saying anything else in the beginning.
2) Your comment about the story are overall fine. You don't need to love or hate a story a hundred per cent.
Your bad points:
1) Your comment about the free roaming. It is a valid critique and you are explaining what you like or dislike.
2) Your critique about sex is a joke. This is a common mistake of many people to fail to understand that just because a game is an adult game is has to have sexy action 1 out of 5 sentences. Even if you hadn't made "mistakes" (I'll come back to this), there is no reason why the novel should congratulate you all the time with sexual actions. It is important to realize that story building, character development, conflict building and other aspects of any regular novel are also aspects that need their time and are a prize by itself (even sad moments can be a "prize" of picking the "right" choices). Which leads me back to the thing about mistakes. This is a novel built with story in the head, not a pick a right choices to get sex. If you are getting into the game with that mind set this game is not for you. I really think it is a terrible mindset to have, but if you want to enjoy that kind of games, you need to understand that not all games will satisfy it. In an essence, what I am saying is that your comment felt like criticizing Call of Duty for not having sword fights or criticizing Mass Effect for focusing too much on story and characters instead of giving us more weapons to kill the enemy. They are not the only focus of the game.
It also points back to the disclaimer. Suppose everything I said before is wrong and you should have been rewarded for you choices with a lot of sexy time. The work is in progress. All that happy action you are waiting can become available in future versions. We have no idea how long the game will be in the end (what are 7 chapters if the game end up having 70, for example). So the least you could do is give the benefit of doubt.
Hope that helps. I never meant to disrespect not to personally attack. Everything I said was with a constructive mindset.