MarsUltor
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Honestly, I knew that the example I was giving wasn't the ideal example of dialogue in need of editing; it was mostly for illustration purposes. I should have chosen a better example.Every editor feels differently in small ways here and there, so these are only my own two cents.Again, these are just my own view on what you've specifically given as an example.You don't have permission to view the spoiler content. Log in or register now.
While I stand by my revisions in my example, and believe that they would result in an improvement to that dialogue (albeit a somewhat minor one), I also agree that the relatively more minimal revisions you suggested would also result in an improvement to that dialogue.
Writing great dialogue is tricky for most people, and becomes even more difficult when it involves translation from the language in which it was originally written. Idioms that may be commonly used in conversation are especially tricky, since they may not have an equivalent in a different language.
Anyway, I'll continue to be on the lookout for better examples...
Peace