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ElBandarra

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Great game and story. As usual, the MILF looks too young to be realistic, and the story with the doctor is not the best of the excuses to start a story about sex between a mother landlady and her son whatever, but at least the MILF doesn't look like Barbie silicone, and the MC doesn't use mind control, superpowers, magic or drugs. I hope the dev continues making the story as plausible as posible in this kind of story, since it seems the original story in Literotica is not finished and the dev will have to finish it by himself, I suppose.

Good idea to find a story you like in the net and make the game from it. Most of the devs know how to make 3D models, but not how to write a script, and that's why most of this kind of games just sucks. Way better this than, again, anoter lazy story about using mind control, magic, superpowers sleeping-rape or drugs to fuck a MILF.
 
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hubvan

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Taking the story and then using your own freakin words to make the VN based on it, isn't that hard. We are not talking about Shakespeare here, it's just a silly story about measuring cum...
I agree and that's why I wrote in my first comment that the language feels a bit unnatural. And in a sense you are right, one could argue that it's pure laziness, but considering writing is not the developers strong suit, I think it's very reasonable that the developer focuses on what he can do best, which is obviously the art and just takes a text that is already available. Besides, whether it's hard or not, depends on how good you can speak a language. A foreign language is not learned withing a few days and hiring someone when you barely make any money yourself doesn't look like an attractive option.

I guess we could argue for days now whether it's OK to purely copy and paste a text. But you said it yourself, it's not Shakespeare anyway, so who cares. At least that's my opinion. That doesn't mean that all of the critique is unjustified. I think the developer should take some of if and implement it in the next few parts or his next game.
 

AL.d

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I agree and that's why I wrote in my first comment that the language feels a bit unnatural. And in a sense you are right, one could argue that it's pure laziness, but considering writing is not the developers strong suit, I think it's very reasonable that the developer focuses on what he can do best, which is obviously the art and just takes a text that is already available. Besides, whether it's hard or not, depends on how good you can speak a language. A foreign language is not learned withing a few days and hiring someone when you barely make any money yourself doesn't look like an attractive option.

I guess we could argue for days now whether it's OK to purely copy and paste a text. But you said it yourself, it's not Shakespeare anyway, so who cares. At least that's my opinion. That doesn't mean that all of the critique is unjustified. I think the developer should take some of if and implement it in the next few parts or his next game.
You are right that visuals are the strong suit. That's why I mentioned earlier that I'd like to see them teaming up with a writer. Renders that good deserve writing that suits them.

Also dev themselves said they are not looking to make money from this, so I don't see how sharing whatver profit with an actual writer makes it a less attractive option. If that's the case, then the latter directly contradicts the former...
 

morpheusahrms

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Guys, as much as I can appreciate the various points raised as valid, let's be realistic here for a moment. I guess the dev is much more at home at doing renders than writing. Also, I'd presume that they really like this particular story, to have chosen it as basis for this project. So I can't see them really abandon this plot.

Furthermore, I seriously doubt that someone would be actually raising a huge fuzz about a porn story that was posted some 11 years ago to a rather shady story site - just look at the genres they post, from bestiality, over necrophilia to underage stuff... anyone using THAT as basis for a legal action would have to answer some pointed questions about that first... Under their REAL name... ;-)

Lastly, who says that this is really the original? In my 25+ years on the internet and it's shady underbelly, I believe I have seen something very like this story more than just a few times and would not be at all surprised to find the same story in some collection pulled from one of the many usenet (look it up, youngsters!) story groups.

Granted, it would have been preferable if the dev clearly stated the source he was using, just to be transparent, but in the end it is more or less a moot discussion.

Have fun with the visuals and the story, at least he has enough chapters to use, to do a metric ton of dirty animations :cool:

Cheers!
 
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atlas114

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i’m crossing my fingers that tomorrow or sometime this week we’ll see a refreshed status report showing dev has started work on the next update.
 

Draakaap23

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Looks gorgeous. Worth keeping an eye on. I just hope it won't take another whole year (or more) before we get to see some serious action.
 

tg

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Thanks for all the good comments / reviews.

I have written something in my bad English, I hope it is understandable.

I start with whether what I do is ethical or not. I turn a story shared for free into a visual novel and publish it completely free of charge. I have a Patreon page yes but no one has to subscribe to me to play this game. I tried to reach the author to get his/her permission, but as I said, he/she has not been active for 10 years and I could not reach it. And it saddens me that some people write here what I'm doing is just taking the author's story and sharing it and making money from it. The story can be very good and I think it is very good, but I have a very serious effort to turn it into a visual novel and again I distribute it for free. I cannot understand what is written about whether it is ethical or not. UndercoverLover As you mentioned, I could change the story a little bit and share it like a story I wrote, then would it be ethical? Maybe I am thinking wrong and what I did may be wrong and if there is a lot of criticism about this, I can close my Patreon page and stop turning someone else's story into a visual novel.
UndercoverLover When it comes to copyright, I don't think it will be a problem since I can convert a free shared story into a visual novel for free, but I will do research on it. Thanks for your warning.
Hey, I just wanted to say that we understand why you're doing it this way. Like, with your English, it's better to just get a story you like, and put pictures to it. That's cool.

It's only really one guy that says you need to stop. But, I hope you can just ignore that guy and continue on. Maybe you can work with someone on another story after you've done this story, and that way make your own stories.

I can say that you're close to the best game maker here, so just have fun with it and make a name for yourself. If needed, you can always get rid of the story later (in case of legal trouble) and have someone rewrite it to match the visuals you've come up with. And yeah, I could be that guy that does the rewrite if it comes to that.

But, I don't think you need to do anything but what you're doing. At least not yet. Words are words, and you can worry about those words later. Just make the art!
 

atlas114

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I'm getting ready to dive in this game for the first time, but before I do there's not gonna be any NTR will there?
there's no NTR. it's basically the mom and son and their "adventures" together measuring his cum load. if he takes it past Chapter 10 there's stuff with the doc...but i'll let you read more into it on the literotica site where the original story is hosted.
 
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lambdadw

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CH1: 69 pics = 152,9MB, CH2: 87 pics = 232,4MB... It is too inappropriate to use PNG. WEBP or JPG 100% would give the same quality at more optimal weight.
... unless for the narrow-minded, spitting at the small weight of the first versions, and giving out nonsense like "how many minutes is there to play? what should we look at the menu ???". :unsure:

Excellent animations btw, Suzinak
 
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Yogi8156

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Can you please change the name that the MC calls "Landlady" To Marge since that is her name. I found it annoying every time the MC call her landlady instead of her name. No one does that in real life.
 

Sturbuck

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I've changed the songs with my erotic ones and the game became more enjoyable. I suggest you try that once..Btw one thanks to Dev and another to KoGa3 for the Mod.
 
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