ItsRamdomGuy
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A Red Head Thicc Futa Protagonist. I am SOLD.
But from what I have seen the dialogue requires extensive modification and proper grammar and structure.
I think the one scene made was quite good but instead of slowing the FPS of scenes to make it seem like increasing speed of scenes, maybe bit different poses for when scenes get changed. But overall I think its going to be a good start.
And dang that femboy was cute. All the ladies are fine, but that femboy, dang.
But from what I have seen the dialogue requires extensive modification and proper grammar and structure.
I think the one scene made was quite good but instead of slowing the FPS of scenes to make it seem like increasing speed of scenes, maybe bit different poses for when scenes get changed. But overall I think its going to be a good start.
And dang that femboy was cute. All the ladies are fine, but that femboy, dang.
Nikephouros
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thank you, please release more. We need more games like this, I am eager to waiting for new parts
Love the look of all the characters, especially MC. Tags including futa/trans protag, harem, virgin, creampie, and planned pregnancy basically ticks every one of my boxes. Curvy redhead futa muscle mommy protag is absolute perfection. An already established harem, mostly consisting of pseudo-elves, and an adorable femboy. So many things to love about this game.
As others have pointed out, the game is in desperate need of proofreading. The story so far is already a bit confusing, and it's compounded by poor English making it even more difficult to follow.
Alucard421 is right about the animation FPS. The low-FPS animations tend to just look cheaply made and choppy. I think it'd be better to just cut out the low-FPS versions of the animations, as they take away more value than they add. Adding more camera angles and positions would add a lot more value, but if that increases development time too much, then I'd recommend just sticking with what you're doing, minus the low-FPS animations, and maybe work on angles/positions retroactively when you've got free time.
Really looking forward to the next update. Please keep up the great work.
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You are absolutely right. About the animations, not only does it take time, but also I don't have too much free time from work to do my daily necessities. and animation if left unattended, it becomes crappy. My goal in this project is to always improve in every aspect, even if it means doing a tech update multiple times; those animations will be for sure reworked. About the English, I can't really do much, as you said, some proofreading and trying to make the text not feel robotic. I will try to make it feel at least understandable. The story is supposed to be that way to put you in the MC's shoes, a lot will be explained soon.
If I tend the animations too much right now with the time I have, my planned release times will go from 1-2 months to 3-4. Which is far from my goal, I will never do that, I will find a way.
damnedfrog
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Where are the constructive criticism? Where the good advises? More trash!
damnedfrog
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Hi Lewd Core Games.
Your MC is gorgeous!
The story is intriguing but a bit confusing.
But I understand the game is in very early stage and it's just a very short prologue. I suppose we will get more info as the game develop.
A few things I notice you may want to correct:
You use 'i' (in lowercase) for the first person singular pronoun when not at the beginning of sentences.
But in English, it must always be 'I' (in uppercase).
At the start, when stating the 5 rules, the 4th came between the 1st and the 2nd.
Also during this scene, the size of Renn increased and decreased a couple of time.
Your MC is gorgeous!
The story is intriguing but a bit confusing.
But I understand the game is in very early stage and it's just a very short prologue. I suppose we will get more info as the game develop.
A few things I notice you may want to correct:
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You use 'i' (in lowercase) for the first person singular pronoun when not at the beginning of sentences.
But in English, it must always be 'I' (in uppercase).
At the start, when stating the 5 rules, the 4th came between the 1st and the 2nd.
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Also during this scene, the size of Renn increased and decreased a couple of time.
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trying to not giving any spoiler Most of the common English mistakes have been fixed on a patch available on itch or my subscribestar page. The word "know" is truly missing. Thanks for finding it. I'm going to change this in Part 2. I will change most of the dialog and renders of part 1 as soon as part 2 drops. About the other "issues," u are quite sharp. maybe they are there for a reason.
damnedfrog
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I didn't thought that what I took for minor issues could be intentionaltrying to not giving any spoiler Most of the common English mistakes have been fixed on a patch available on itch or my subscribestar page. The word "know" is truly missing. Thanks for finding it. I'm going to change this in Part 2. I will change most of the dialog and renders of part 1 as soon as part 2 drops. About the other "issues," u are quite sharp. maybe they are there for a reason.
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We are a few days from part 2. I will include an Android test version. I don't recommend modding it the interface, video and images will surely crash on any device or will be unplayable. Bear with me. here look at her all wet after a bath:
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xizaaR
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I really like how the game looks but I am a little bit lost on the story part.
SpyderArachnid
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I really tried to like this, but I'm lost on what is even going on.
There is just so much emptiness in the story or who everyone is or what is even going on, that you are left confused. There's just no information on anything that is going on. It's like we are thrown into the middle of a story with a bunch of casual dialogue going on and expected to know everything already.
Doesn't help that it definitely needs proofreading and/or a better translation. Everything is just happening, but no explanation why and the rough writing doesn't help with trying to figure things out.
I mean, it looks nice, and the characters look good, but I just can't get through the lack of info and the writing.
You have no choices in relations at all, everyone is just jumping on your dick, but I guess that's normal? No idea as there is a lack of information again. The only choices are just basic information choices, no path or important choices. So, it's basically a kinetic novel at the moment.
Eh, like I said, I tried to like it, but I'm just so lost on the story and what is going on. It's very lacking in the writing department. Still, wish you the best of luck with this and thanks.
There is just so much emptiness in the story or who everyone is or what is even going on, that you are left confused. There's just no information on anything that is going on. It's like we are thrown into the middle of a story with a bunch of casual dialogue going on and expected to know everything already.
Doesn't help that it definitely needs proofreading and/or a better translation. Everything is just happening, but no explanation why and the rough writing doesn't help with trying to figure things out.
I mean, it looks nice, and the characters look good, but I just can't get through the lack of info and the writing.
You have no choices in relations at all, everyone is just jumping on your dick, but I guess that's normal? No idea as there is a lack of information again. The only choices are just basic information choices, no path or important choices. So, it's basically a kinetic novel at the moment.
Eh, like I said, I tried to like it, but I'm just so lost on the story and what is going on. It's very lacking in the writing department. Still, wish you the best of luck with this and thanks.
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the theme of the prologue confusion You just got your memories wiped out, so you will have no clue of what's going on. The game is already AI-translated and proofread, so at this point I will need another human being to help.I really tried to like this, but I'm lost on what is even going on.
There is just so much emptiness in the story or who everyone is or what is even going on, that you are left confused. There's just no information on anything that is going on. It's like we are thrown into the middle of a story with a bunch of casual dialogue going on and expected to know everything already.
Doesn't help that it definitely needs proofreading and/or a better translation. Everything is just happening, but no explanation why and the rough writing doesn't help with trying to figure things out.
I mean, it looks nice, and the characters look good, but I just can't get through the lack of info and the writing.
You have no choices in relations at all, everyone is just jumping on your dick, but I guess that's normal? No idea as there is a lack of information again. The only choices are just basic information choices, no path or important choices. So, it's basically a kinetic novel at the moment.
Eh, like I said, I tried to like it, but I'm just so lost on the story and what is going on. It's very lacking in the writing department. Still, wish you the best of luck with this and thanks.
In episode one, we will have the side character's backstory and the rest of the core information. Let's say they are isolated in that place for so much time. Maybe there are some people who don't like each other.