I was fine with the camera floating/magnifier effect, only thing I'd change is some scenes like this one:
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"anon_stroke_loop_offscreen" should be displayed infront of suzie, not behind. Minor things.
I think it was fine, as long as it's viewed through a narrative lens and not a fetish lens - which will be difficult round these parts. I saw it as the former - it drives the intrigue forward about the town and the old landlord. Furthermore, assuming you intervened, it did a great narrative job of
showing not telling how the common townspeople are all frightened of that group of cronies. I didn't find it anymore tonally incongruent than any of the other horror-themed stuff earlier on.
Agreed with this part though - that was a little much given the escalation - what's more; it serves as active bait for the people that want fetish content out of this - ala the token bully to march in and stomp him and have his way with Suzy. I'd say the scene was perfect barring the kiss.
The goons holding her mouth was a much more effective "violation" depiction without treading into fetish land.
re-screenshot guy, I so hope this specific girl doesnt remain an anon party girl
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Sweatshirt+jeans and all, *chefs kiss*. If you were able to give an ai the prompt "PGJ ideal girl in the art style of Moonripple Lake" - that's exactly what it would spit out.