VN Ren'Py Abandoned Moving to the Wrong Neighborhood [v1.0] [jessica 1222]

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불용Kuzuri

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Half of characters looks like ghetto gang , the other looks like terrorist , nice start but to me it is more-less like Elena story or AnnA affection or Lida or that fat chick who works as an waitress (I forgot the name) , same old same old. Nothing new.

Girl or wife living with some guy and she taste sausage of richer or danger or corrupted men via - either manipulation or simply boring life of her own.

9 of 10 developers copy-paste others ideas or plot. Does anyone can't do something special and unique or just different??

How about :

Dad and mom travel with son on some vacation , Dad get into trouble with police after mess on airport (he attacked staff for losing their money and luggage and he must spend 7 days in station for not having visa or passport + violence in public) , mom lost their wallet with all money in that luggage so she is forced to find quick cash to pay hotel 7 days .
She accept to work in nightclub but boss wanted more, son becomes suspicious after first night, starts to follow her and realize what she is doing then (since he is innocent) he ask her to watch and learn from them and , instead of typical blackmail or some sick weirdo mom maybe developers need to take a different approach instead of raping or sneaking in 90% of games.

I mean , every game looks the same :

- spy in bathroom or spy night while sleeping
- mom already wanna fuck her son just wait son to ask (says no mom in real life)
- son got from mom everything (yeah yeah ...too much dreaming spoiling the real imagination)
- usually in home are mom + son + sister (or 2 sis) in every game DAD NOWHERE TO BE FOUND
- typical plot delay process or introducing too many characters etc. only to milk money
- if not that then usual things like BORING WIFE, CHEAT DUMB HUSBAND WITH NO MONEY, NO POWER NO GOOD JOB

Pretty much the same to me.
 
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hmmm, I predict the non-ntr path will be short lived, since the NTR crowd will be the main audience for this game. and because of ntr tag those who would otherwise play the non-ntr route will pass it by.

Not really a shame tbh, best to focus on a singular audience that appreciates your content, and the NTR people will be more happy if they get more content.

So don't really understand why they give the choice, like I get the thought, but for a heavily NTR focused game... imo from a design point of view given the main audience, should only be the level of NTR, (soft-hardcore) without the no ntr choice (is redundant given the main audience this game will attract.

Sincerely Anti-ntr guy :p (I can be objective :) )
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hmmmm by the lack of optional next to NTR under genre I shall assume I was correct in my assessment. (or there is basically 0 content without doing NTR).
 
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불용Kuzuri said:
Half of characters looks like ghetto gang , the other looks like terrorist , nice start but to me it is more-less like Elena story or AnnA affection or Lida or that fat chick who works as an waitress (I forgot the name) , same old same old. Nothing new.

Girl or wife living with some guy and she taste sausage of richer or danger or corrupted men via - either manipulation or simply boring life of her own.

9 of 10 developers copy-paste others ideas or plot. Does anyone can't do something special and unique or just different??

How about :

Dad and mom travel with son on some vacation , Dad get into trouble with police after mess on airport (he attacked staff for losing their money and luggage and he must spend 7 days in station for not having visa or passport + violence in public) , mom lost their wallet with all money in that luggage so she is forced to find quick cash to pay hotel 7 days .
She accept to work in nightclub but boss wanted more, son becomes suspicious after first night, starts to follow her and realize what she is doing then (since he is innocent) he ask her to watch and learn from them and , instead of typical blackmail or some sick weirdo mom maybe developers need to take a different approach instead of raping or sneaking in 90% of games.

I mean , every game looks the same :

- spy in bathroom or spy night while sleeping
- mom already wanna fuck her son just wait son to ask (says no mom in real life)
- son got from mom everything (yeah yeah ...too much dreaming spoiling the real imagination)
- usually in home are mom + son + sister (or 2 sis) in every game DAD NOWHERE TO BE FOUND
- typical plot delay process or introducing too many characters etc. only to milk money
- if not that then usual things like BORING WIFE, CHEAT DUMB HUSBAND WITH NO MONEY, NO POWER NO GOOD JOB

Pretty much the same to me.
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err.. thats called succesful formula for beginner.

most dev who goes overly ambitious before gaining spotlight first ended up getting burnt before they reached heir potential.

i dont blame them from using same pattern for few first chapters, its a matter of how they develop them that made it interesting.

then again with that super specific request, i don't think anyone would made that. you prolly gonna say they stealed it from you.

my advice? take a break from playing porn games for few month. its gonna make it fresh again for ya.
 
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You created Keren and Erika as a nice loving couple moving into a new house. if I have a choice, he will not be deceived, something would have to change, and with that, the dog's arrogant brazen macho will not. he would have to rape her otherwise he doesn't have a chance to sleep with her. And end it like macho grabs Karen ass. what if you gave Erik's samurai sword, macho not going to get her ass covered with that hand hahaha be the way I'm curious what's next :) good luck
 
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Probably in a half year when he/she finishes this story. The original story has an open ending
 
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The racism Theme is way too heavy, it is basically the only driving force in the writing (as of 0.7). There are many Themes that can be the driving force behind adultery/NTR. Good examples are the excitement of cheating, the feeling of being wanted/desired, doing it with someone younger or sexually more daring or physically stronger/fitter (which Jason at least fits but the Theme is still focused overly on racism).


If the creator wants variance in his game, it does not need a non-NTR route, just some non-racist ones that perhaps focus on other traits of Jason vs. Eric, without adding the labels black and white to everything.

Also the Art does not fit the story. Steph looks and acts slutty before her transformation to blackcock worshipper. She was already scantily dressed, with lots of tattoos and no bra. Just adding piercings after the transformation raises the question why she did not have them before and not show how she became a Slut. Having the text say "She had gone from being a prim and proper future housewife, naive and sweet, always dressed sexy but classy, to dressing and behaving like a true shank." is not what was shown.
 
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I just want everyone to know that this game is a direct rip of this story on Literotica -
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. If it is the same creator, good for you, but I doubt it due to the writing style between the two versions and the slight name change. I'm all for making good stories into games, but you should at least have the decency to directly shout out your source material. Otherwise you're just trying to take credit for someone else's work.
 
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